for Journals and Diaries10/21/2013 c2 gabi
Continueeeee
Continueeeee
10/4/2009 c3 Hannah aka pgtwlosh
well, its nice. but try and add a little lemon and adventure. and please tell us in advance who is gonna write in a journal/diary.and i(including my entire barkada and most of my classmates) are anime freakpeople. TTFN and keep writing more and more
well, its nice. but try and add a little lemon and adventure. and please tell us in advance who is gonna write in a journal/diary.and i(including my entire barkada and most of my classmates) are anime freakpeople. TTFN and keep writing more and more
9/17/2009 c1 neat01
ohmygosh, love the couples, you put my top three onto here, shikaino, narusaku & kibahina. :)
ohmygosh, love the couples, you put my top three onto here, shikaino, narusaku & kibahina. :)
1/7/2009 c3 
3shika-ino-4evers
ok well guess wat?
it is time to go on!
YAY!
and if you dont go on i will cry! 'tear'
it is sos good!
i loves it!
go on!
plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz!
i will stop talking if you go on!
plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz pzl plz just go on! by the way thing will be a long reveiw! come on just go on!
plz!
PLZ!
im down on my knees!
3shika-ino-4eversok well guess wat?
it is time to go on!
YAY!
and if you dont go on i will cry! 'tear'
it is sos good!
i loves it!
go on!
plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz!
i will stop talking if you go on!
plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz pzl plz just go on! by the way thing will be a long reveiw! come on just go on!
plz!
PLZ!
im down on my knees!
6/21/2007 c1 kibahina.4.evur
I WISHED INO SNEEKED DOWNSTAIRS AND SLEPT NEXT 2 SHIKA!THAT WOULD BE SOO KUTE!I GOTZ MUCH LUV 4 U HOMIE!
I WISHED INO SNEEKED DOWNSTAIRS AND SLEPT NEXT 2 SHIKA!THAT WOULD BE SOO KUTE!I GOTZ MUCH LUV 4 U HOMIE!
4/6/2007 c3 7PixieDust-Kiss
Hey this is Really good. I think that There should be a diary entry where Ino Writes sOmething like "Shikamaru kissed me, it was an accedent, i mean, he tripped and then he jumped to catch me and he sorta fell on ME head first and so his lips touched mine" or something like that :P I would love itt.
7PixieDust-KissHey this is Really good. I think that There should be a diary entry where Ino Writes sOmething like "Shikamaru kissed me, it was an accedent, i mean, he tripped and then he jumped to catch me and he sorta fell on ME head first and so his lips touched mine" or something like that :P I would love itt.
5/7/2006 c3 2Endless Snow
Hehe/ SHINO+THREAT=NOT GOOD! Hehe! ANyway keep going! These are my fav. pairings!
2Endless SnowHehe/ SHINO+THREAT=NOT GOOD! Hehe! ANyway keep going! These are my fav. pairings!
12/29/2004 c3 sioned
hey good work! I love shikaino fluff... :) and you seem to be writing it well so no worries. :) more fluff hopefullY! update soon! -waiting in anticipation! :)
hey good work! I love shikaino fluff... :) and you seem to be writing it well so no worries. :) more fluff hopefullY! update soon! -waiting in anticipation! :)
12/6/2004 c3 Red Crow
...my log-in's not working. And the name's changed now, from Crow-Sensei. Didn't like it anymore.
So, constructive criticizm, hmm?
-well, I think it'd be a good idea to take it a little slow, as just tossing your characters into bed got old about four thousand fics ago.
-you need dividers between your journal entries. It's not that confusing, but I was just disoriented for a moment, and all around it'd be neater.
-never admit you're nervous and/or beg for reviews. I've done it, I admit it, but it's just not...stylish. If your story's good, people will tell you. If it's not good and you want reviews anyway, it's sorta pathetic.
-go to the ff_anbu community on livejournal. Not only will you laugh your ass off, but you will also get a crash course on how not to write a fic
-never, ever, ever add in authors notes except in clearly marked areas. I'm guilty of not marking out my areas, but I feel bad afterward. You haven't done so yet, I was pleased to notice.
Not-constructive praise:
-great characterization
-bad idea (sleepover +diary) pulled off very well
-funny and clever
-wonderfully proofread.
...my brother's attemtping to wrestle me off the com. I must go before I get a thumb in my eye.
...my log-in's not working. And the name's changed now, from Crow-Sensei. Didn't like it anymore.
So, constructive criticizm, hmm?
-well, I think it'd be a good idea to take it a little slow, as just tossing your characters into bed got old about four thousand fics ago.
-you need dividers between your journal entries. It's not that confusing, but I was just disoriented for a moment, and all around it'd be neater.
-never admit you're nervous and/or beg for reviews. I've done it, I admit it, but it's just not...stylish. If your story's good, people will tell you. If it's not good and you want reviews anyway, it's sorta pathetic.
-go to the ff_anbu community on livejournal. Not only will you laugh your ass off, but you will also get a crash course on how not to write a fic
-never, ever, ever add in authors notes except in clearly marked areas. I'm guilty of not marking out my areas, but I feel bad afterward. You haven't done so yet, I was pleased to notice.
Not-constructive praise:
-great characterization
-bad idea (sleepover +diary) pulled off very well
-funny and clever
-wonderfully proofread.
...my brother's attemtping to wrestle me off the com. I must go before I get a thumb in my eye.
11/25/2004 c3 Wrathchylde
Definitely an original idea and I love the way you write the characters. Shikamaru's entries are dead on for what I see him writing. I also see Ino and Sakura writing rather long entries because they are quite long winded themseleves. I'd just like to see Hinata's entry. I think it'd be hilarious if she wrote like Naruto acts. That's just me though.
Definitely an original idea and I love the way you write the characters. Shikamaru's entries are dead on for what I see him writing. I also see Ino and Sakura writing rather long entries because they are quite long winded themseleves. I'd just like to see Hinata's entry. I think it'd be hilarious if she wrote like Naruto acts. That's just me though.
11/20/2004 c2 35Roach Patrol
I loved it. Which of the tow is under the illusion that the relationship's platonic? It'd be funnier if at least one did, and viewed the other as 'just' an old friend. Until Shikamaru almost dies in the ANBU exams, of course! Actualy, it's your story. Do as you like, but update!
And the journal entries are really cute and in character. You should totaly switch them off. Maybe an entry for every character that's going to be in the next one?
And I loved all your little quips on your main page. Not offended at all, even by the guy-bashing ones. I was cracking up: I really would rather fall in chocolate than in love. By the way, did you know that the chemicals in chocolate mimic the hormones released by your body after sex? It's why people feel so happy after eating them.
Not that has anything to do with Naruto... hope you'll forgive me. Update as soon as you can, please!
35Roach PatrolI loved it. Which of the tow is under the illusion that the relationship's platonic? It'd be funnier if at least one did, and viewed the other as 'just' an old friend. Until Shikamaru almost dies in the ANBU exams, of course! Actualy, it's your story. Do as you like, but update!
And the journal entries are really cute and in character. You should totaly switch them off. Maybe an entry for every character that's going to be in the next one?
And I loved all your little quips on your main page. Not offended at all, even by the guy-bashing ones. I was cracking up: I really would rather fall in chocolate than in love. By the way, did you know that the chemicals in chocolate mimic the hormones released by your body after sex? It's why people feel so happy after eating them.
Not that has anything to do with Naruto... hope you'll forgive me. Update as soon as you can, please!
11/17/2004 c2 2Smiter
Quite an interesting update. ^_^ I know that your excuse was a little weak, but don't worry I can forgive you for that. ;)
Liked the NaruSaku part. :D I think it would be very interesting to carry on with the journal entries, if they can continue to shed new light on the story - perhaps such as Sakura's entry on Naruto staying over and Ino's interruption. Or even Shikamaru's thoughts on Ino coming over!
2SmiterQuite an interesting update. ^_^ I know that your excuse was a little weak, but don't worry I can forgive you for that. ;)
Liked the NaruSaku part. :D I think it would be very interesting to carry on with the journal entries, if they can continue to shed new light on the story - perhaps such as Sakura's entry on Naruto staying over and Ino's interruption. Or even Shikamaru's thoughts on Ino coming over!