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1611/16/2004 c1 jelite
Yes, she would miss them but she’d find someone to take that pain away VERY quickly if she wished. Hermione wasn’t a little girl anymore and she could get any guy in the whole school if she felt like it.
- that was a little out of place and sort of ruined the mood.I think that Hermione would be devestated itf her 'parents' were killed.she is very attached to them in the books.
Also the Flahback was a little hard to understand.
My advice for this chapter get beta and longer chapters.If you use M.Word to write then about 6 pages makes a good length chapter.
All in all this story is much better written than the last and with my help it only goes up from here!Update soon and good luck!
Yes, she would miss them but she’d find someone to take that pain away VERY quickly if she wished. Hermione wasn’t a little girl anymore and she could get any guy in the whole school if she felt like it.
- that was a little out of place and sort of ruined the mood.I think that Hermione would be devestated itf her 'parents' were killed.she is very attached to them in the books.
Also the Flahback was a little hard to understand.
My advice for this chapter get beta and longer chapters.If you use M.Word to write then about 6 pages makes a good length chapter.
All in all this story is much better written than the last and with my help it only goes up from here!Update soon and good luck!
11/15/2004 c1 lexiwithay
Ibut it's lexywithay but i'm havin trouble signin in
I love ur story please post soon i love twin stories i myself am a twin
Ibut it's lexywithay but i'm havin trouble signin in
I love ur story please post soon i love twin stories i myself am a twin