
4/14/2008 c8 michelle
awesome job i love it ^-^! omg whats hecka messed up kagome didn't do anything and she gets arrested stupid mall guard lol. please update soon!
awesome job i love it ^-^! omg whats hecka messed up kagome didn't do anything and she gets arrested stupid mall guard lol. please update soon!
7/13/2007 c8 raraland
AHH! PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY! I LOVE IT! although, it WOULD be nice if there was a little more romance between inu and kags, dont ya think ;)
Update soon!
Kimiko
AHH! PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY! I LOVE IT! although, it WOULD be nice if there was a little more romance between inu and kags, dont ya think ;)
Update soon!
Kimiko
6/17/2007 c8 bubbles
good chappy! please update soon!
good chappy! please update soon!
6/16/2007 c8 Miko kagome archer
absolutely love it. Poor Kagome. life really sucks for her
absolutely love it. Poor Kagome. life really sucks for her
6/16/2007 c8 aradow
How shallow are the people Inuyasha and Kagome hang out with?
"Hiro is suffering from seperation anxioty, so lets take him shopping." "Oh look, poor Kagome is depressed. She needs a manicure!" =P
Sorry, just something I found reather silly, the belief that all major life crisises can be sloved with just a little time at the mall. I was never really one to go shopping myself, and I would have about the attention span of Hiro in the clothing store. Its only going to make the problem worse.
I'm not ranting at you of course. YOu kinda made it known that this doesn't work for big problems like when Hiro was board. Sorry to tell Rin, but taking little kids shopping is a nightmare most of the time.
Good chapter, I hope you update sometime soon. Just maybe spend some time to proof read a bit more. A number of your sentenses sound very awkward and hard to understand. Maybe try to cut down the number of words you use to discribe actions and such. Such as: "couldn’t believe what her eyes were seeing." Try just using: "She couldn't beleive her eyes." Now granted that's a bit cliche, but the extra words just tend to bog the sentence down. Its just little things like that. I hope I'm not being overly critical, just some friendly advice.
Take care and good luck writing!
How shallow are the people Inuyasha and Kagome hang out with?
"Hiro is suffering from seperation anxioty, so lets take him shopping." "Oh look, poor Kagome is depressed. She needs a manicure!" =P
Sorry, just something I found reather silly, the belief that all major life crisises can be sloved with just a little time at the mall. I was never really one to go shopping myself, and I would have about the attention span of Hiro in the clothing store. Its only going to make the problem worse.
I'm not ranting at you of course. YOu kinda made it known that this doesn't work for big problems like when Hiro was board. Sorry to tell Rin, but taking little kids shopping is a nightmare most of the time.
Good chapter, I hope you update sometime soon. Just maybe spend some time to proof read a bit more. A number of your sentenses sound very awkward and hard to understand. Maybe try to cut down the number of words you use to discribe actions and such. Such as: "couldn’t believe what her eyes were seeing." Try just using: "She couldn't beleive her eyes." Now granted that's a bit cliche, but the extra words just tend to bog the sentence down. Its just little things like that. I hope I'm not being overly critical, just some friendly advice.
Take care and good luck writing!
6/16/2007 c8 Loved Forever
OMG i just read al the chapters in your story and they are awesome please continue the story i love it its so good !
OMG i just read al the chapters in your story and they are awesome please continue the story i love it its so good !
6/16/2007 c8
23Hououza
Excellent chapter.
So, Kagome gave him up but Inuyasha still refused to accept it...I wonder what more trouble there will be for them now. Hopefully Inuyasha can get this straightened out, and perhaps at the same time find a job for himself...perhaps one that allows him and Hiro to spent time with Kagome.
Good luck & best wishes,
Hououza

Excellent chapter.
So, Kagome gave him up but Inuyasha still refused to accept it...I wonder what more trouble there will be for them now. Hopefully Inuyasha can get this straightened out, and perhaps at the same time find a job for himself...perhaps one that allows him and Hiro to spent time with Kagome.
Good luck & best wishes,
Hououza
4/28/2007 c7
23Hououza
Excellent chapter.
So, he won the battle, but it seems that he no longer has the heart for it...perhaps he needs to consider a different route rather than the one thigns have taken that would allow Kagome to continue in the role she has already been holding all this time. Still, at this stage I suspect it will all be for Hiro, and that for themselves will perhaps wait until they know each other a little better and both we and Kagome know what Inuyasha did...
I look forwards to finding out and seeing how it develops.
Good luck & best wishes,
Hououza

Excellent chapter.
So, he won the battle, but it seems that he no longer has the heart for it...perhaps he needs to consider a different route rather than the one thigns have taken that would allow Kagome to continue in the role she has already been holding all this time. Still, at this stage I suspect it will all be for Hiro, and that for themselves will perhaps wait until they know each other a little better and both we and Kagome know what Inuyasha did...
I look forwards to finding out and seeing how it develops.
Good luck & best wishes,
Hououza