for Dreaming About You3/24/2005 c2 Voshira
Hey! Thanks for reviewing! Lemmi give you a tipp kindly (very) put double spaces so... your story wont be hard to read!
Hey! Thanks for reviewing! Lemmi give you a tipp kindly (very) put double spaces so... your story wont be hard to read!
3/16/2005 c2 
7lovehinalover
Not bad, seems like you have an interesting idea beginning on your hands. Please continue with this! My only thing to point out was that there were a few spelling mistakes. Try using some kind of spell check in the future and those little errors will be cleared right up.
The other thing I noticed is that it seems like people will get confused when you use, 'nodded' to mean someone is disagreeing. If someone is saying 'no' try to use 'shook their head' instead and if they are saying 'yes' use 'nod'. It isn't a big deal but I noticed it twice in the first chapter.
Keep up the good work!
7lovehinaloverNot bad, seems like you have an interesting idea beginning on your hands. Please continue with this! My only thing to point out was that there were a few spelling mistakes. Try using some kind of spell check in the future and those little errors will be cleared right up.
The other thing I noticed is that it seems like people will get confused when you use, 'nodded' to mean someone is disagreeing. If someone is saying 'no' try to use 'shook their head' instead and if they are saying 'yes' use 'nod'. It isn't a big deal but I noticed it twice in the first chapter.
Keep up the good work!
2/16/2005 c2 lovie-9
Hey motosuwa-hideki,
This is pretty good...i like it! I havn't really read chapter 2, but i have to go to bed now that 's why :'(...but keep it up! -Hey i'm just a beginner and i'm only 13 too...and i'm doing not very very well...but it's going good though!
Hey, do you know Fushigi Yugi?
-Anyway g2g now, but keep it up-later.
Hey motosuwa-hideki,
This is pretty good...i like it! I havn't really read chapter 2, but i have to go to bed now that 's why :'(...but keep it up! -Hey i'm just a beginner and i'm only 13 too...and i'm doing not very very well...but it's going good though!
Hey, do you know Fushigi Yugi?
-Anyway g2g now, but keep it up-later.
1/16/2005 c1 5JessicaKittyDemon
hi ^_^ I love your story it's cute... PLEASE tell me that the next chapter will be up soon! update please! I wanna find out what happens!
5JessicaKittyDemonhi ^_^ I love your story it's cute... PLEASE tell me that the next chapter will be up soon! update please! I wanna find out what happens!
12/7/2004 c1 1Caboose RvB
Hi i do not have much experience in writing but i have read many story's i too have started one of mine own but my sister helps me in writing them now one thing that bothers me is you keep the whole thing in paragraph form make it some what like a script use the paragraph form when telling there actions and thinking when they talk put each person on there own line but you don't have to keep putting there name with it once you have stated who is talking you can just continue and the person will know who is talking if you need a little more idea of what I'm talking about look at my story it may not be the same subject but can help you a little and have you read the books cause i was reading you story and it made me confused of chii getting updated which was impossible and the jumping also but i really have no say in that for being this is your story and it can be your choice but some people may not like it and stay with the characters personality many people hate it when you don't follow them if you need any more help you can e-mail me back and if its something that i don't know then i will just ask my sister and the last thing is try and make the story longer and be more descriptive
1Caboose RvBHi i do not have much experience in writing but i have read many story's i too have started one of mine own but my sister helps me in writing them now one thing that bothers me is you keep the whole thing in paragraph form make it some what like a script use the paragraph form when telling there actions and thinking when they talk put each person on there own line but you don't have to keep putting there name with it once you have stated who is talking you can just continue and the person will know who is talking if you need a little more idea of what I'm talking about look at my story it may not be the same subject but can help you a little and have you read the books cause i was reading you story and it made me confused of chii getting updated which was impossible and the jumping also but i really have no say in that for being this is your story and it can be your choice but some people may not like it and stay with the characters personality many people hate it when you don't follow them if you need any more help you can e-mail me back and if its something that i don't know then i will just ask my sister and the last thing is try and make the story longer and be more descriptive