for Hikaru Runs Away rewrite2/16/2016 c25 EVERYONE IN THE
Please. I'm begging you. Finish this fic. I never beg. I'm begging you. Please finish this. I don't know what else to say. This fic is so deep and my ultimate favorite.
Please. I'm begging you. Finish this fic. I never beg. I'm begging you. Please finish this. I don't know what else to say. This fic is so deep and my ultimate favorite.
12/21/2015 c13 
4bloodyredfox
Are you truly American? This horrendous! I can't believe this is actually an rewrite...at least get a GOOD beta for gods sake. The plot is good, but the grammar shits on it.
4bloodyredfoxAre you truly American? This horrendous! I can't believe this is actually an rewrite...at least get a GOOD beta for gods sake. The plot is good, but the grammar shits on it.
6/26/2013 c25 LizTheFlyingDutchman
Hi, I really enjoyed your story! I hope that one day you will start writing it again! of course your grammar isn't perfect, but it isn't troublesome, I've read a lot of stories that were way worse in grammar, and if you feel not confident enough, because of reviews that only focus on that, then if you decide to start writing this again, you can contact me (if you want) and I will go through them for you.
Your Story is really good and I really want to know how it continues. So I really hope you will update it again!
Hi, I really enjoyed your story! I hope that one day you will start writing it again! of course your grammar isn't perfect, but it isn't troublesome, I've read a lot of stories that were way worse in grammar, and if you feel not confident enough, because of reviews that only focus on that, then if you decide to start writing this again, you can contact me (if you want) and I will go through them for you.
Your Story is really good and I really want to know how it continues. So I really hope you will update it again!
7/8/2012 c1 Guest
thanks.i cry and i lough...i miss hikaru so much
thanks.i cry and i lough...i miss hikaru so much
7/5/2012 c2 Guest
Ugh, while I am intrigued by the story and its potential, I just can't bring myself to continue reading this. I think you need to find a Beta, or just anyone who can read through your work and edit the grammar and plot flow.
Ugh, while I am intrigued by the story and its potential, I just can't bring myself to continue reading this. I think you need to find a Beta, or just anyone who can read through your work and edit the grammar and plot flow.
4/2/2012 c23 Chrysandra Luna
Are you going to continue this story? I really loved every character in this story. Every single one except Akira... Never been a big fan of him, but I'm pretty fine with him... Normally. Not in this story though, because he hurts Hikaru too much... :'(
Are you going to continue this story? I really loved every character in this story. Every single one except Akira... Never been a big fan of him, but I'm pretty fine with him... Normally. Not in this story though, because he hurts Hikaru too much... :'(
3/29/2011 c4 25Mikiri's Revenge
I'm sorry, I know this is a rewrite but in all honesty (And I'm not trying to flame) you desperately need a beta to go through this. Heck I'll even volunteer. It's just there are words missing, verb tenses wrongs, words capitalized that don't need to be, and very strange conversations and characters from nowhere. While I do the same sometimes, it is intentional. This looks like it was written by a teenager or a person using an online translation tool. Please, FIX IT! I'm sorry to say for all it's potential plot, I just can't read it with the errors in it. I'm sorry.
25Mikiri's RevengeI'm sorry, I know this is a rewrite but in all honesty (And I'm not trying to flame) you desperately need a beta to go through this. Heck I'll even volunteer. It's just there are words missing, verb tenses wrongs, words capitalized that don't need to be, and very strange conversations and characters from nowhere. While I do the same sometimes, it is intentional. This looks like it was written by a teenager or a person using an online translation tool. Please, FIX IT! I'm sorry to say for all it's potential plot, I just can't read it with the errors in it. I'm sorry.
6/18/2010 c23 1cheemiex
hi...
i love the plot and the flow of the story. however, try to check your grammar you have a lot of mistakes, especially, in the tenses...and your from U.S
love the story...update soon please
1cheemiexhi...
i love the plot and the flow of the story. however, try to check your grammar you have a lot of mistakes, especially, in the tenses...and your from U.S
love the story...update soon please
3/15/2010 c22 ichigohaatsu
update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update!
update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update update!
3/13/2010 c22 nequam-tenshi
Such possessiviness from Akira, I believe, it to strong for him.
Will Hikaru brake even more?
Such possessiviness from Akira, I believe, it to strong for him.
Will Hikaru brake even more?