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1/11 c6 not a fan
Tenkichi? worst possible name, honestly that has killed my interest in your story, not how poorly written it is, not how meaningless it is, not the useless tsunade, a fucking shitty name, the story was good until now, congratulations, although knowing that it already You haven't written for 10 years, I know that either you won't read this or you won't care... I'm glad you don't write anymore.
1/11 c5 not a fan
I can understand the change in hair color (although black and white shouldn't be there)

but the marks on the cheeks should not have changed color so I will ignore that, as if you had not written it

Tsunade is Naruto's ba-chan, not the one-chan... although in each chapter you seem to put a different one, so I won't even bother reading the honorifics anymore... they are all wrong

Apparently Tsunade is useless, because she has not done anything against the woman who destroyed Naruto's clothes and apparently she has not lifted the ban on foxes in Konoha either... honestly she seems more useless to me than in the cannon and that is say a lot
1/11 c3 not a fan
It should be noted that you write almost any word in Japanese wrong, and why does Sakura need a dagger when she has KUNAIS? (not kuni as you have written) and why do you need kunai or daggers when you could get explosive notes that would work better?

god and tsunade seems mentally retarded when speaking in the last paragraph... yuma... what is yuma? demon isn't akuma?
1/11 c2 not a fan
I think you don't know how to use honorifics and I'm not going to correct them... I find less and less sense in this story
1/11 c1 not a fan
I'm going to try to give this story a chance, but it's poorly written and the fact that you say that Sasuke with the cursed seal level 2 is as strong as the Kyuubi... it's nonsense, if it were like that anyone from Sound 4 would have swept it the floor with everyone who went to try to catch Sasuke when he committed betrayal
4/26/2023 c1 anonymous
Almost... you almost had me thinking this was the best fic i've read, I'm sorry but i can't tolerate Sasuke's death, I agree, he's a total teme, but with him dying throws the entire flipping universe out of whack, as long as an Ashura reincarnation exists, there must be an Inra too, you may not have watched that far but hey, that's what Google's for.
6/19/2022 c10 WTF
I’m so glad I usually read the ending before even starting the story. PSA to anyone interested. This is NOT a complete fiction. Idk why ppl mark stories as complete knowing it’s not complete.
Don’t waste your time.
11/12/2020 c1 4iacopo.passerini
Ah ottimo! una nuova storia interresante!
10/30/2020 c5 OuchBouch
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10/22/2020 c5 Dracoessa Draga
yes on the hybrid form.
7/17/2020 c9 Bluewarrior3
Your story is kinda all over the place. First there use to be foxes? Now there banished because of what the kyubbi did. Theres a random wolf demon showing up out of no where.. And some random girl who is half wolf or something just attacks kiba because thats her mate? At first i liked your story but now im not really understanding it. Im not bashing on your story, i hope it doesnt seem like it. There are alot of others who like it, its just not for me. Goodluck and keep writing
10/7/2013 c1 favian.rojas.33
okay this might be one of the best intro chapters that i have read if anything it is the best chapter ive ever read and ive read alot so i hope its a good story
12/13/2012 c10 ranbo neal
Cool chapter...I wish the story had been concluded. Excellent writing and a fun read:)
12/13/2012 c9 ranbo neal
It is a little tough to follow here...I guess you lost me...I will try reading this chapter again.
12/13/2012 c8 ranbo neal
This is some superb writing...you are a wonderful writer of fanfics. In this chapter you even delve into Tolkin and his work to lay the background for the festival...really well done. Also, the last part here with Naruto and Hinata is fantastic and romantic...your style just makes their conversation seem so natural. Great and shocking cliffhanger at the end.
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