for Fallen7/18/2006 c1 jakkat
"order of inflammable pigeon"...::snigger:: Good job, interesting and all that, you're a good writer, but was it really nessesary to kill *everyone*? oh well, good start, nonetheless.
"order of inflammable pigeon"...::snigger:: Good job, interesting and all that, you're a good writer, but was it really nessesary to kill *everyone*? oh well, good start, nonetheless.
7/16/2006 c2 oldmagic
I know where you took this idea from and unfortunatly the guy stopped writing right after 2 chapters...i think.
Just to give you a little advice, don't give too much of harry past all in one shot. it would easer and soo much better for you if you give snippets of harry past that would intreague the readers and would want for more.
Harry is strong. pretty strong but after all those years harry SHOULD have had more friends he MADE along the years then just the once he knew from school. Harry should also became stronger in magically. because after all he is harry potter. the main character. lol.
People change. it's invitable. but you don't seem to do that much with harrys personal life other than altering the way he thinks. It had been two years, i don't think i would stay stay like that without making any new friends. i don't think anyone would.
also, it's hard being original. really hard. But PLEASE PLEASE be creative at least. i saw many good authors out there that do the same thing over and over again with harry that it became soo damn unreadiable. this is why i only go on atleast once a week.
Also harry should be able to do wandless magic without a wand. it's stupid if they can't. I suppose this would be a good place for harry to get stronger in magic.
Anyway it would be obvious that harry would learn to use a sword or something when it comes to LOTR. but from the looks of it harry only learned how to use daggers, which is cool. actually when you think about it, harry is quick on his feet and although skinny he's fast and flexable and his instincts for survival out weighs his griffonder side and his slitherin side takes over. so if he uses a broad sword he would only have a shorter life span because of obvious reasons. but if he uses 2 or 1 daggers the can be like a wannabe powerful assassins like Artemis Entreri or Hitman.
good luck.
I'm interested in where your going with the story. also if you need any help in anything then ask me.
I know where you took this idea from and unfortunatly the guy stopped writing right after 2 chapters...i think.
Just to give you a little advice, don't give too much of harry past all in one shot. it would easer and soo much better for you if you give snippets of harry past that would intreague the readers and would want for more.
Harry is strong. pretty strong but after all those years harry SHOULD have had more friends he MADE along the years then just the once he knew from school. Harry should also became stronger in magically. because after all he is harry potter. the main character. lol.
People change. it's invitable. but you don't seem to do that much with harrys personal life other than altering the way he thinks. It had been two years, i don't think i would stay stay like that without making any new friends. i don't think anyone would.
also, it's hard being original. really hard. But PLEASE PLEASE be creative at least. i saw many good authors out there that do the same thing over and over again with harry that it became soo damn unreadiable. this is why i only go on atleast once a week.
Also harry should be able to do wandless magic without a wand. it's stupid if they can't. I suppose this would be a good place for harry to get stronger in magic.
Anyway it would be obvious that harry would learn to use a sword or something when it comes to LOTR. but from the looks of it harry only learned how to use daggers, which is cool. actually when you think about it, harry is quick on his feet and although skinny he's fast and flexable and his instincts for survival out weighs his griffonder side and his slitherin side takes over. so if he uses a broad sword he would only have a shorter life span because of obvious reasons. but if he uses 2 or 1 daggers the can be like a wannabe powerful assassins like Artemis Entreri or Hitman.
good luck.
I'm interested in where your going with the story. also if you need any help in anything then ask me.
7/16/2006 c2 
5Siri02
This story intrigues me. A whole lot. Can't wait to see what you have up your sleeve!
Siri
5Siri02This story intrigues me. A whole lot. Can't wait to see what you have up your sleeve!
Siri
7/15/2006 c2 8lildevil425
this is an interestin story and i hope u'll update soon and dont have any writer's block for any of ur stories.
8lildevil425this is an interestin story and i hope u'll update soon and dont have any writer's block for any of ur stories.
7/10/2006 c2 21Cryselephantine
Oh no! Wher is the ext chapter! Please! I wanna read itt! Poor lil' Harry, despressed and practically suicidal! XD I like this! Everyone is dead but he must keep fighting even if he's tired of it! ç_ç
Please another chapter before the summer fall! XD Duh... but don't do it too fast, it must be good and the best and... and... er... sorry, i'm overreacting! ^^
Well, really, your story is quite interesting and I like it very much! So... keep writting like this mate! ;)
Kiss
L.G.
PS : Sorry for my english, i'm french so it's sucks i think! T_T
21CryselephantineOh no! Wher is the ext chapter! Please! I wanna read itt! Poor lil' Harry, despressed and practically suicidal! XD I like this! Everyone is dead but he must keep fighting even if he's tired of it! ç_ç
Please another chapter before the summer fall! XD Duh... but don't do it too fast, it must be good and the best and... and... er... sorry, i'm overreacting! ^^
Well, really, your story is quite interesting and I like it very much! So... keep writting like this mate! ;)
Kiss
L.G.
PS : Sorry for my english, i'm french so it's sucks i think! T_T
7/10/2006 c2 14CatClawz
So are you reposting this then? That would be awesome, I really liked this story when I first read it but it hadn't been updated in ages. Keep up the good work! ^_^
14CatClawzSo are you reposting this then? That would be awesome, I really liked this story when I first read it but it hadn't been updated in ages. Keep up the good work! ^_^
7/10/2006 c2 18XinnLajgin
Get on with it already, I don't mind comtemplaitive chappies but it has to move the story forward
18XinnLajginGet on with it already, I don't mind comtemplaitive chappies but it has to move the story forward
7/7/2006 c2 11Kaaera
"He could have landed in a situation that was even worse than war-torn wizarding Britain. Trust it to happen to him. It always did." Ah, Harry, Harry Harry... XD
I'm really liking this. :) The song was nice (though I don't know the tune), and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens when Harry meets the group! Keep up the great work, I'm looking forward to it!
11Kaaera"He could have landed in a situation that was even worse than war-torn wizarding Britain. Trust it to happen to him. It always did." Ah, Harry, Harry Harry... XD
I'm really liking this. :) The song was nice (though I don't know the tune), and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens when Harry meets the group! Keep up the great work, I'm looking forward to it!
7/6/2006 c1 1Lady-Elizabeth4242
I really liked your old one. I thought it was funny and original. Though your writing seems to have matured since then, the story itself (or the little of it I saw) was good. I like this too.
Harry seems to have more dimention here than your last story, too. I hope to see more of this. I'd honestly thought you had forgotten this.
1Lady-Elizabeth4242I really liked your old one. I thought it was funny and original. Though your writing seems to have matured since then, the story itself (or the little of it I saw) was good. I like this too.
Harry seems to have more dimention here than your last story, too. I hope to see more of this. I'd honestly thought you had forgotten this.