for A New Beginning5/20/2015 c14 Guest
More please
More please
8/6/2014 c3 Guest
first off Naruto's mom has red hair not silver I mean really and his dad is named Minato
first off Naruto's mom has red hair not silver I mean really and his dad is named Minato
5/22/2013 c1 wesleycharles
Interesting first chapter...Hinata is right there with Naruto...the other voice could be the Fourth Hokage? The writing is easy to follow and well done.
Interesting first chapter...Hinata is right there with Naruto...the other voice could be the Fourth Hokage? The writing is easy to follow and well done.
3/29/2013 c4 tim lee1
Now the training mission begins. I have noticed that Naruto has not said much at all to Hinata...he does seem a little stiff and not quite as open with her here, eventhough Hinata seems close to her manga character. It is cool to go back and see them at an early stage here because as of the manga now they are together fighting . Hinata has not left Naruto's side for a while now (starting in ch# 611) and I don't think she will let him out of her sight.
Now the training mission begins. I have noticed that Naruto has not said much at all to Hinata...he does seem a little stiff and not quite as open with her here, eventhough Hinata seems close to her manga character. It is cool to go back and see them at an early stage here because as of the manga now they are together fighting . Hinata has not left Naruto's side for a while now (starting in ch# 611) and I don't think she will let him out of her sight.
3/29/2013 c3 tim lee1
So the mission will include Hinata and the Toad Sage along with Hana. I like the detail that you went into here to set things up so that the story will make sense. I wish you could bring Hinata and her POV in here soon.
So the mission will include Hinata and the Toad Sage along with Hana. I like the detail that you went into here to set things up so that the story will make sense. I wish you could bring Hinata and her POV in here soon.
3/29/2013 c2 tim lee1
Nice plot you are unfolding here! I like the fact that the 4th is in Naruto's mind...and that Hinata will be included on the training mission. It always seems silly in NaruHina stories when Naruto leaves her to be lonely for the time skip...I know at the time that this was written not much was known about Naruto's mother and father...so good job naming them too:)
Nice plot you are unfolding here! I like the fact that the 4th is in Naruto's mind...and that Hinata will be included on the training mission. It always seems silly in NaruHina stories when Naruto leaves her to be lonely for the time skip...I know at the time that this was written not much was known about Naruto's mother and father...so good job naming them too:)
3/29/2013 c1 tim lee1
The chapter is just the right length and it lays out the plot of your story very well. I like the story a lot so far and your writing is well done and is in an easy to read style. I will read on:)
The chapter is just the right length and it lays out the plot of your story very well. I like the story a lot so far and your writing is well done and is in an easy to read style. I will read on:)
8/6/2010 c5 
2Keeper of the Infinite Library
The Story is good, the plot is good, The length of the chapers is fine, Your Grammar and Punctuation Seems ok though I wasnt really paying all that much attention to it, I just cant seem to get into the story... I think it is just that it is the wrong Genre for me to get into... but still keep up the good work for those who like it better than me.
2Keeper of the Infinite LibraryThe Story is good, the plot is good, The length of the chapers is fine, Your Grammar and Punctuation Seems ok though I wasnt really paying all that much attention to it, I just cant seem to get into the story... I think it is just that it is the wrong Genre for me to get into... but still keep up the good work for those who like it better than me.