for Pokegate5/9/2014 c2 
22Kingdark
You know, you could at least make sure you write the names of your characters properly. It's not oneal but O'Neill two l's as the man says over the series several times.
22KingdarkYou know, you could at least make sure you write the names of your characters properly. It's not oneal but O'Neill two l's as the man says over the series several times.
8/6/2012 c2 1imachrismoose
I must say, I like the concept for your story, and I like how the prologue opened. However, I believe that you should find somebody to proofread your stories before you post them. This chapter (CH:1 A what?) is poorly written and contains many run-on sentences. Also, I think you should do some research about how the Air Force chain of command works. The reason I say this is because you have General O'Neill and General Hammond commanding the same base. In the real world, the SGC would only have one General, in order to reduce the chances for conflicting orders. Other than that, good job!
1imachrismooseI must say, I like the concept for your story, and I like how the prologue opened. However, I believe that you should find somebody to proofread your stories before you post them. This chapter (CH:1 A what?) is poorly written and contains many run-on sentences. Also, I think you should do some research about how the Air Force chain of command works. The reason I say this is because you have General O'Neill and General Hammond commanding the same base. In the real world, the SGC would only have one General, in order to reduce the chances for conflicting orders. Other than that, good job!
9/23/2011 c9 5thepantsaredead
I'm sorry, I just can't stop laughing at the nuns being at an international nun convention out of town. ;D
5thepantsaredeadI'm sorry, I just can't stop laughing at the nuns being at an international nun convention out of town. ;D
9/15/2011 c1 Hollow emotions
Ummmm... cool idea, but seriously, dude! Is spelling really that much of an issue? And a tad too many deaths for something concerning pokemon...
Ummmm... cool idea, but seriously, dude! Is spelling really that much of an issue? And a tad too many deaths for something concerning pokemon...
4/12/2009 c18 Person who hates bad writers
OMGOMGOMGOMG!BAD!BAD!BAD!BAD! This started good and then you messed everything up! go read a good fanfic where they don't completely change everything in the original shows and make up all these absurd things just to keep the absurd plot going!
P.S. ADD THE GRAMMAR AND CORRECT SPELLING!
OMGOMGOMGOMG!BAD!BAD!BAD!BAD! This started good and then you messed everything up! go read a good fanfic where they don't completely change everything in the original shows and make up all these absurd things just to keep the absurd plot going!
P.S. ADD THE GRAMMAR AND CORRECT SPELLING!
2/19/2007 c17 Remiel
(wipes tear from eye)
ha, heh, heh, aw man, this is rich. This is way too funny. Pokemon and Stargate! Jeez, how do you come up with this stuff. This is pure gold! Just finish the story so i can laugh some more.
(wipes tear from eye)
ha, heh, heh, aw man, this is rich. This is way too funny. Pokemon and Stargate! Jeez, how do you come up with this stuff. This is pure gold! Just finish the story so i can laugh some more.