for The Newcomer9/12/2009 c1 
2ApplePie777
Mione? Herms? what's up with the nicknames? ;D
and you have to wear Hogwarts robes while at the school.
just trying to help. :)
*Pie to the izzle*
2ApplePie777Mione? Herms? what's up with the nicknames? ;D
and you have to wear Hogwarts robes while at the school.
just trying to help. :)
*Pie to the izzle*
5/28/2005 c2 9Sharap'n
Yeah... her ability is that she can read minds. Duh.
Too bad if it's like, a totally different ability and I'm just dumb.
Yeah.
~SP
9Sharap'nYeah... her ability is that she can read minds. Duh.
Too bad if it's like, a totally different ability and I'm just dumb.
Yeah.
~SP
2/17/2005 c2 13Ronhermione13
Come on girl! When you gonna update! If you start a story you gotta stick with it! E-mail me cause I have an idea for a story and I need your help with a title! K?
13Ronhermione13Come on girl! When you gonna update! If you start a story you gotta stick with it! E-mail me cause I have an idea for a story and I need your help with a title! K?
2/13/2005 c2 fieldhockeyismylover
Nice. Very nice. But you did point out that Ron has a sister. Who is really awesome. You MUST include my Ginny. She is awesome.
Nice. Very nice. But you did point out that Ron has a sister. Who is really awesome. You MUST include my Ginny. She is awesome.
2/13/2005 c1 lily-evans07
hm interesting i think claire may have something special about her...ya know...lol
~lily-evans07
hm interesting i think claire may have something special about her...ya know...lol
~lily-evans07
1/28/2005 c2 Hermy-luvs-Draco
LOL!
I like your story-it's SO funny and really good. Your wrong; it not boring at all. I think it was really funny how Chris sassed Malfoy: absolutely hilarious. Keep writing!...Please?
LOL!
I like your story-it's SO funny and really good. Your wrong; it not boring at all. I think it was really funny how Chris sassed Malfoy: absolutely hilarious. Keep writing!...Please?
1/13/2005 c2 5Lady Sikerra
Ha-ha! In the words of Ron, that was bloody brilliant. I love how she sassed Malfoy. And you, miss person who can't spell diamond right, listne to the CD I gave you. It is very happy and has the song about the truffle on it. I love George Harrison! Ha-ha!
5Lady SikerraHa-ha! In the words of Ron, that was bloody brilliant. I love how she sassed Malfoy. And you, miss person who can't spell diamond right, listne to the CD I gave you. It is very happy and has the song about the truffle on it. I love George Harrison! Ha-ha!
12/30/2004 c1 8morning-flower
well, i couldn't find the hint, lol. avril's last name is lavigne :P this was a good start, but too much description will have people telling you she's a mary sue; i know, it's stupid, but there are nutters out there who just love flaming. [mary sue is a perfect oc character who is too good to be true] so if you hint at it, people will assume. the dialogue was realistic, which is great! but remember each new speaker starts on a new paragraph, but i saw that you started doing that, just not at the start. overall, good start to your first fanfic!
8morning-flowerwell, i couldn't find the hint, lol. avril's last name is lavigne :P this was a good start, but too much description will have people telling you she's a mary sue; i know, it's stupid, but there are nutters out there who just love flaming. [mary sue is a perfect oc character who is too good to be true] so if you hint at it, people will assume. the dialogue was realistic, which is great! but remember each new speaker starts on a new paragraph, but i saw that you started doing that, just not at the start. overall, good start to your first fanfic!
12/27/2004 c1 13Ronhermione13
That was very good you really make me want to read more, and find out what Chris's "secret" is! All I can say is to check for punctuation errors and make sure that they don't interrupt with the "flow" of the story. Other than that this seems like an original and very well thought out story, UPDATE SOON! P.S. I'm adding you to my author alert list so it will be easier to find your story : )! P.S.S. Are those the bands you like or just the characters'? Because if they are then you like EVERY band that I like!
13Ronhermione13That was very good you really make me want to read more, and find out what Chris's "secret" is! All I can say is to check for punctuation errors and make sure that they don't interrupt with the "flow" of the story. Other than that this seems like an original and very well thought out story, UPDATE SOON! P.S. I'm adding you to my author alert list so it will be easier to find your story : )! P.S.S. Are those the bands you like or just the characters'? Because if they are then you like EVERY band that I like!