for Love lifts us up where we belong12/4/2005 c2 
5Dumbledor
Why - does molly have to come bursting into the room when Hermione and Ron were so obviously close to sharing a kiss? Didn't Molly see what was going on? Gee, when will they get to share an undisturbed moment?
5DumbledorWhy - does molly have to come bursting into the room when Hermione and Ron were so obviously close to sharing a kiss? Didn't Molly see what was going on? Gee, when will they get to share an undisturbed moment?
12/4/2005 c1 Dumbledor
Good story, and a good beginning. Shows that what they're going through is real, it's what we go through, being afraid to tell folks that you really love them.
Good story, and a good beginning. Shows that what they're going through is real, it's what we go through, being afraid to tell folks that you really love them.
5/29/2005 c1 2Accio Ron
Hey! You asked me to read your story and tell you what I thought. Sorry I haven't done so till now. My computer has been horrible and I haven't been able to submit one, but all is well now! :D
I really liked it and I think it is realistic to the books. The one thing that you might want to try doing, (which I myself do) is use a thesaurus to make your word choice more expansionistic. Also there are a few typos that you may want to correct. There were also some instances where you used past-tense verb form, when it really should have been in present, and vice versa. With all that said, though, the story is really good so far and has excellent potential.
Do me a favor though? PLEASE don't stop writting it. I believe that as we get more accustomed to writting and we become famieler with the flow of our own stories, they get better- I know mine did. So, if you are unsatisfied with the way it is going, just give yourself time to get use to your story and your own style of writting and you will become more and more pleased as the fic progresses.
Good luck!
~Accio Ron~
2Accio RonHey! You asked me to read your story and tell you what I thought. Sorry I haven't done so till now. My computer has been horrible and I haven't been able to submit one, but all is well now! :D
I really liked it and I think it is realistic to the books. The one thing that you might want to try doing, (which I myself do) is use a thesaurus to make your word choice more expansionistic. Also there are a few typos that you may want to correct. There were also some instances where you used past-tense verb form, when it really should have been in present, and vice versa. With all that said, though, the story is really good so far and has excellent potential.
Do me a favor though? PLEASE don't stop writting it. I believe that as we get more accustomed to writting and we become famieler with the flow of our own stories, they get better- I know mine did. So, if you are unsatisfied with the way it is going, just give yourself time to get use to your story and your own style of writting and you will become more and more pleased as the fic progresses.
Good luck!
~Accio Ron~
1/25/2005 c2 5MasochistandNarcissistFan
I'm glad you liked my story and just to let you know I really like yours so far too. Gotta love the ending of this chapter. I said , "Dang it!" Anyways, update soon plz!
5MasochistandNarcissistFanI'm glad you liked my story and just to let you know I really like yours so far too. Gotta love the ending of this chapter. I said , "Dang it!" Anyways, update soon plz!
1/14/2005 c2 1keepondreaming16
very good. i like the ending. leave it to mrs. weasley to ruin the momnet! please update soon!
1keepondreaming16very good. i like the ending. leave it to mrs. weasley to ruin the momnet! please update soon!
1/13/2005 c2 1AmyChris
Great second chapter! Really interesting! I like how you ended it! Update soon!
1AmyChrisGreat second chapter! Really interesting! I like how you ended it! Update soon!
1/10/2005 c1 AmyChris
This sounds very interesting so far! Good job! You're off to a great start! Please update soon!
This sounds very interesting so far! Good job! You're off to a great start! Please update soon!
1/10/2005 c1 1keepondreaming16
i think it's good. please write more. i have to know what happens next. very good; i love it! =)
1keepondreaming16i think it's good. please write more. i have to know what happens next. very good; i love it! =)