for Pweeease?2/5/2006 c1 Scan
In the act of registering, I found out that someone else on this site uses tha pen-name 'Scan' so now you know it ain't me. Ah well. Funny fic, never seen the show, but your fic was nicely written. All the best ;)
In the act of registering, I found out that someone else on this site uses tha pen-name 'Scan' so now you know it ain't me. Ah well. Funny fic, never seen the show, but your fic was nicely written. All the best ;)
2/4/2006 c1 
59Morrigan the Nightmare Queen
*shnerk*
Okay, DS was out of character. I can't see him begging. On the other hand, you have created a funny, funny little story here, and I can see Yoko wearing the pants in that relationship. (Relatively speaking. I'm sure DS still rocks her world on a regular basis, wink wink nudge nudge.)
Your punctuation was a little iffy in a couple of places, but . . . hey, I'm not the Fiction Police. This was a hilarious little tale, and I look forward to seeing more of the same. If you wanted to expand on this scenario, you could say that Yoko's so cranky because she's pregnant- and then run away with that. ("But I cast the protection spell, Yoko! Honestly!" "AND WHAT? I'M THE ONE HAVING THIS BABY, YOU BASTARD, AND IF ITS FATHER DOESN'T SHUT HIS MOUTH HE WON'T HAVE ONE!" and so forth.)
59Morrigan the Nightmare Queen*shnerk*
Okay, DS was out of character. I can't see him begging. On the other hand, you have created a funny, funny little story here, and I can see Yoko wearing the pants in that relationship. (Relatively speaking. I'm sure DS still rocks her world on a regular basis, wink wink nudge nudge.)
Your punctuation was a little iffy in a couple of places, but . . . hey, I'm not the Fiction Police. This was a hilarious little tale, and I look forward to seeing more of the same. If you wanted to expand on this scenario, you could say that Yoko's so cranky because she's pregnant- and then run away with that. ("But I cast the protection spell, Yoko! Honestly!" "AND WHAT? I'M THE ONE HAVING THIS BABY, YOU BASTARD, AND IF ITS FATHER DOESN'T SHUT HIS MOUTH HE WON'T HAVE ONE!" and so forth.)
1/17/2006 c1 manjy
hey a short story but really funny and humorous! keep up the good work! and i liked how you only revealed what dark schneider wanted towards the end. pretty comical reversal of expectations!
hey a short story but really funny and humorous! keep up the good work! and i liked how you only revealed what dark schneider wanted towards the end. pretty comical reversal of expectations!
12/27/2005 c1 Kumori-hime
I've never seen the anime or the manga or even pictures, but I still got a general sence of what was going on. I didn't get the impression of chocolate when the fic started... . (I wasn't thinking something perverted! o
I've never seen the anime or the manga or even pictures, but I still got a general sence of what was going on. I didn't get the impression of chocolate when the fic started... . (I wasn't thinking something perverted! o
12/19/2005 c1 boally
I've never even heard of this show, and you make it sound so interesting..I think it's really good keep writing i want more
I've never even heard of this show, and you make it sound so interesting..I think it's really good keep writing i want more
11/11/2005 c1 doragon
that was the first fic that i
have ever read thats about the
show Bastard.and it was funny!
that was the first fic that i
have ever read thats about the
show Bastard.and it was funny!
9/19/2005 c1 brittany
i thought this story was very interesting. i thought it was a good over all story.
i thought this story was very interesting. i thought it was a good over all story.
9/11/2005 c1 Dar Sel'La
The thought of Dark Schnider giving anyone "puppydog eyes" has got to be one of the most hilarious things I have ever heard of. I love it.
The thought of Dark Schnider giving anyone "puppydog eyes" has got to be one of the most hilarious things I have ever heard of. I love it.
7/15/2005 c1 Kango
Lol! Very good story! Dark Shnieder was a little OOC, but its all good.
Lol! Very good story! Dark Shnieder was a little OOC, but its all good.
4/17/2005 c1 11J-Nettie Spaghetti
Cute. Worth a grin. Over all outcome I felt was predictable. Yoko and Gara were well in character. Felt Dark should have slipped a little into his angrier pouting IC, but him humbling himself so was funny. Felt story was a bit rushed and more comedic bits could have been realized.
11J-Nettie SpaghettiCute. Worth a grin. Over all outcome I felt was predictable. Yoko and Gara were well in character. Felt Dark should have slipped a little into his angrier pouting IC, but him humbling himself so was funny. Felt story was a bit rushed and more comedic bits could have been realized.
2/23/2005 c1 neko
The story is really good for a one-shot. funny and characters weren't out of character.
The story is really good for a one-shot. funny and characters weren't out of character.