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4/5/2013 c1 Guest
When are you gonna start the next chapter
4/19/2007 c1 32Lexie-H
Hey there, i want to congratulate you on your first fan fic! i have a few suggestions, however.

1. take extra care with your grammar, capitalisation and punctuation. For instance, James' retort doesn't exactly make sence because what he says (im assuming accidentally) supports what Lily said. So be extra careful!

2. had hagrid invented the Blast ended skrewt during the MWPP era?

Regardless, i like that Lily is flawed, like any normal ordinary person, and i like that she seems to concede to her mistake! Keep going with this, im curious as to who sent the Valentine! xx
6/8/2006 c1 TwilightFairy-x
Loved it, please update soon!

Can I just aske, what's a beta?

Liv
4/21/2006 c1 6Candy Cane Jones
You reviewed my story and so I found yours. I like the chapter, especially the mystery valentine =)
3/31/2005 c1 3Manapply
Cool story. Do you have a beta? I can beta for you. Email me if you're interested: everafterjune@
3/3/2005 c1 7passionflower24
nice start! cant wait until the next chapter! :)
3/3/2005 c1 2codswallop
Your story rocks, update soon! I can't wait to see what happens next. Make sure you make the next chapter longer because it's really short. Other than that well done for your first fanfic! UPDATE SOON!

Love Pink Lizard x

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