4/8/2005 c3 7DreamingToBePetra
Wow! I am really excited about this story! It seems really great... And I'm glad that you're taking your time to set things up... A lot of people don't really develop a story from the start.
My only confusion is that you started the prologue out saying that is was a very small group of wizards who had done this, but then Merlin say "many"...I was hoping you could clarify, or streamline it...it only seems super-special if he is one of 4-5 people...also...the other one? Ginny? Not sure I like the idea of another one...again...it ruins the "specialness"...I like Harry being set apart from the rest of the world...with people to listen and comfort him...but not really understand...
Eh, it's your fic though, and it's begun beautifully...I'll just have to trust you I suppose...
Can't wait for more..
Rae
Wow! I am really excited about this story! It seems really great... And I'm glad that you're taking your time to set things up... A lot of people don't really develop a story from the start.
My only confusion is that you started the prologue out saying that is was a very small group of wizards who had done this, but then Merlin say "many"...I was hoping you could clarify, or streamline it...it only seems super-special if he is one of 4-5 people...also...the other one? Ginny? Not sure I like the idea of another one...again...it ruins the "specialness"...I like Harry being set apart from the rest of the world...with people to listen and comfort him...but not really understand...
Eh, it's your fic though, and it's begun beautifully...I'll just have to trust you I suppose...
Can't wait for more..
Rae
4/8/2005 c3 1thephantom114
hey
this is good and all but you need to write it in the past tense not the present
e.g
Harry sees the one Hedwig brought was from Ron: is wrong
Harry saw the one that hedwig brought was from Ron.
the phantom
hey
this is good and all but you need to write it in the past tense not the present
e.g
Harry sees the one Hedwig brought was from Ron: is wrong
Harry saw the one that hedwig brought was from Ron.
the phantom
4/6/2005 c2 Tronishere
So far - so good! I like the beginning of your story. In other words, I'm hooked! I await the next chapter with anticipation.
Well, we know that Ron and Hermione have both reached the age of 16 and nothing unusual happened. Maybe Ginny will have a power boost. Remember when Fred and George talked about size being no indicator of power in reference to Ginny? She must be a powerful person to have the twins making statements about it.
Please update soon!
So far - so good! I like the beginning of your story. In other words, I'm hooked! I await the next chapter with anticipation.
Well, we know that Ron and Hermione have both reached the age of 16 and nothing unusual happened. Maybe Ginny will have a power boost. Remember when Fred and George talked about size being no indicator of power in reference to Ginny? She must be a powerful person to have the twins making statements about it.
Please update soon!