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4/14/2005 c1 dead deleted closed
HAHAHAHAHA! It's such a stupid situation it's absolutely hilarious. More please!
4/12/2005 c1 bluish black dolphin
awesome! more!
4/12/2005 c1 2AlejandraGurl08
OMG! that's awesome, i didn't even see that coming, plz keep writing. just so u know, i don't like to wait long, and i hate cliffy's lol, see ya l8tr.

-allison
4/12/2005 c1 IDoNotJudge
Omg! HE forgot to change back! ::Smacks head:: Danny ur so stupid sometimes...POST SOON!
4/12/2005 c1 konijnemans
Jazz didn't tell, did she? did she?
4/12/2005 c1 21Billie Jukes
*snerks* Well, Danny was bound to do it sooner or later. Still *laughs* Can't wait for more
4/11/2005 c1 1Catnip070
Danny, Danny, Danny. It's always better to listen to your older sister!

*Great* dialogue, and a definite cliffy, there!

You may want to work on your description a bit (ie. describing Jazz reading, how worn out Danny looked, the expressions on his parents' faces etc). It would make the chapter feel a little more fleshed out and polished that way...

Anyhow, you have strong dialogue, and it is clear what is going on. Don't mind me, rambling... (I do like this concept!)
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