for What a Joke!12/23/2005 c5 a certain someone
she's so mean! is that her real character?does she have to be that frank?
anyway, this is a short chapter.. nothing much happened.. so that's the only comment i can give.. well, just do better for the next chapter k?
she's so mean! is that her real character?does she have to be that frank?
anyway, this is a short chapter.. nothing much happened.. so that's the only comment i can give.. well, just do better for the next chapter k?
12/23/2005 c4 a certain someone
“Wow… I look great! I could fall for me if I’m gay…” hehehe.. nice line
isn't mitsui somewhat rude for calling the "welcome boy" a servant?
so it was really kaede's fault.. haha sorry for thinking that it was kaoru's..
i want that teddy bear kaede gave her.. she's so lucky..
oh.. there were also parts that again, i coulcn't distinguish who's talking... could you please write something like this.. “Easy as 1-2-3…” said Kaede.. this is just a suggestion, hope you don't mind..
“Wow… I look great! I could fall for me if I’m gay…” hehehe.. nice line
isn't mitsui somewhat rude for calling the "welcome boy" a servant?
so it was really kaede's fault.. haha sorry for thinking that it was kaoru's..
i want that teddy bear kaede gave her.. she's so lucky..
oh.. there were also parts that again, i coulcn't distinguish who's talking... could you please write something like this.. “Easy as 1-2-3…” said Kaede.. this is just a suggestion, hope you don't mind..
12/23/2005 c3 a certain someone
wow.. i guess kaede is the black sheep eh..
was it kaoru who gave kaede that invitation for mitsui? so it's kaoru's fault not kaede's.. am i getting it right?
well, some of the scenes made me laugh.. good job at that..
wow.. i guess kaede is the black sheep eh..
was it kaoru who gave kaede that invitation for mitsui? so it's kaoru's fault not kaede's.. am i getting it right?
well, some of the scenes made me laugh.. good job at that..
12/23/2005 c2 a certain someone
don't you think it's odd for a girl to ask a guy to come with her especially when she met him just once? uh.. i hope this can be explained in the next chapters..
“No sempai, just bisexual.” hahaha.. my friend, i think you're reading too much yaoi fics when you were writing this.. but i hope this wouldn't be a yaoi fic.. make sure huh..
don't you think it's odd for a girl to ask a guy to come with her especially when she met him just once? uh.. i hope this can be explained in the next chapters..
“No sempai, just bisexual.” hahaha.. my friend, i think you're reading too much yaoi fics when you were writing this.. but i hope this wouldn't be a yaoi fic.. make sure huh..
12/23/2005 c1 a certain someone
it's somewhat hard to distinguish who's talking.. anyway, i think this is something.. got to see another side of mitsui
it's somewhat hard to distinguish who's talking.. anyway, i think this is something.. got to see another side of mitsui
11/14/2005 c1 bohemiangirl
it's a good story.. lots of imagination.. and the setting changes slowly unlike other authors who switch their settings so fast your head spins.. but when you read the dialogues, it's not too clear who is really speaking.. and i noticed that there are too many unnecessary words, words that could be altered or removed from the text.. but in the whole, it is a great story and i'm a bit eager to read the part two of it.. it's definitely an improvement.. :)
it's a good story.. lots of imagination.. and the setting changes slowly unlike other authors who switch their settings so fast your head spins.. but when you read the dialogues, it's not too clear who is really speaking.. and i noticed that there are too many unnecessary words, words that could be altered or removed from the text.. but in the whole, it is a great story and i'm a bit eager to read the part two of it.. it's definitely an improvement.. :)
5/29/2005 c3 
3Setsuna Eleison
waa... is that meh? nyahaha... ermm.. okay... nothing much happened here... but I know you'd make a comeback in the next xhpater... write it well, okay? hehehe... ^^
3Setsuna Eleisonwaa... is that meh? nyahaha... ermm.. okay... nothing much happened here... but I know you'd make a comeback in the next xhpater... write it well, okay? hehehe... ^^
5/28/2005 c3 cutiedallie
hello kuya! hehehe... ganda ng story mo pati na rin yung old and new... cute itong story
hello kuya! hehehe... ganda ng story mo pati na rin yung old and new... cute itong story
5/26/2005 c3 magnus priestess
lol ang saya talaga... maling invitation pa kasi ang nakuha... nakow ano kaya ang mangyayari? update soon! anyway goodluck!
*ok i will read your other fic*
I'm Laughing My Ass Off!
lol ang saya talaga... maling invitation pa kasi ang nakuha... nakow ano kaya ang mangyayari? update soon! anyway goodluck!
*ok i will read your other fic*
I'm Laughing My Ass Off!
5/13/2005 c1 Missykay
i like this fic, its kinda cute. but plz update soon i am dying to know what happens next! may syra sa ulo ba si mitsui? haha.
i like this fic, its kinda cute. but plz update soon i am dying to know what happens next! may syra sa ulo ba si mitsui? haha.
5/13/2005 c2 magnus priestess
wah... ang saya ... wakokokokokoko ano kaya ang sasabihin ng ate ni rukawa kay mitsui... /hmm
update soon! bb este bye-bye pala...
good luck sa next chapter...
wah... ang saya ... wakokokokokoko ano kaya ang sasabihin ng ate ni rukawa kay mitsui... /hmm
update soon! bb este bye-bye pala...
good luck sa next chapter...
5/12/2005 c2 Setsuna Eleison
micchy's imouto! your sense of humor never cease to generate laughter out of me.. well, I sure like to laugh.. you know.. ^^ hehehe... anyway, about the plot, what I'm saying is that it lacks emphasis on the plot itself... it's like the story is sticking out in different directions... ^^ But hey, I have a suggestion, you can use the emphasis lack as added thrill to your fic.. ^^ the readers will die out guessing what's going to happen next... ne? Like me... I have absolutely no idea what's going to happen! I don't know if Rukawa is bi or what! Well,, UPDATE SOON PLEASE! I hope I was able to help you out with my suggestion... Godbless!
micchy's imouto! your sense of humor never cease to generate laughter out of me.. well, I sure like to laugh.. you know.. ^^ hehehe... anyway, about the plot, what I'm saying is that it lacks emphasis on the plot itself... it's like the story is sticking out in different directions... ^^ But hey, I have a suggestion, you can use the emphasis lack as added thrill to your fic.. ^^ the readers will die out guessing what's going to happen next... ne? Like me... I have absolutely no idea what's going to happen! I don't know if Rukawa is bi or what! Well,, UPDATE SOON PLEASE! I hope I was able to help you out with my suggestion... Godbless!
5/3/2005 c1 LadyTetsu tinatamad mag-log in
hey you! you! you over there...you...you...you...you...hay wla ako maicp.
Here’s another fic by M.E. ka pa jan ha! anong me! maggie esperanzate! :)
isa kang malaking pasaway.
buti at di mo gnawa ung nirerequest sayo ni kohkoh...dahil papatayin kita! *killer eys* akin lang c KILLUA. (pakisabi na rin un k KOHKOH)
at c happy-bday din pla.
at c kitamura...
at c tetsu..
at c MICCHY. ^_^
hey you! you! you over there...you...you...you...you...hay wla ako maicp.
Here’s another fic by M.E. ka pa jan ha! anong me! maggie esperanzate! :)
isa kang malaking pasaway.
buti at di mo gnawa ung nirerequest sayo ni kohkoh...dahil papatayin kita! *killer eys* akin lang c KILLUA. (pakisabi na rin un k KOHKOH)
at c happy-bday din pla.
at c kitamura...
at c tetsu..
at c MICCHY. ^_^
4/28/2005 c1 me one you're talking to
Hey! Not bad...You know, while i am reading your storie i imagining it and it so fun! especially to the part where Rukawa's sister knock at the door until Mitsui invites her to go out sometime. Just like what i said, you'll be a great writer! ;D gud luck!
Hey! Not bad...You know, while i am reading your storie i imagining it and it so fun! especially to the part where Rukawa's sister knock at the door until Mitsui invites her to go out sometime. Just like what i said, you'll be a great writer! ;D gud luck!
4/25/2005 c1 a reader
whew! i finished reading at last. i had a hard time reading it, esp. the flashback. maybe you can consider writing shorter paragraphs.
i like your plot though a MitOC isn't it? but there would also be a sibling-kind relationship between Rukawa and the OC. Wehehehe, i've already read something like this but on a diff site and w/ diff characters. anyway, continue this. it's kinda cute if u ask me.. Luck, luck!
whew! i finished reading at last. i had a hard time reading it, esp. the flashback. maybe you can consider writing shorter paragraphs.
i like your plot though a MitOC isn't it? but there would also be a sibling-kind relationship between Rukawa and the OC. Wehehehe, i've already read something like this but on a diff site and w/ diff characters. anyway, continue this. it's kinda cute if u ask me.. Luck, luck!