for Happy Birthday Junior!8/5/2006 c1 
4stained memories
lol XP dis is kyoot XP put in more enters and stuff between da lines...luks kinda crowded...but dats just to me...but gweat storie XP
4stained memorieslol XP dis is kyoot XP put in more enters and stuff between da lines...luks kinda crowded...but dats just to me...but gweat storie XP
12/29/2005 c1 Your sue hurts my brain
not bad, but mind you you really should space things better and put a little mre detail into stuff, though mind you its still a good story, keep writing.
not bad, but mind you you really should space things better and put a little mre detail into stuff, though mind you its still a good story, keep writing.
8/25/2005 c2 5CloudsLover
yay! give us another R.O.D yay i liked it it was cute and funny (hugs the story) cute and funny so please right another am sure it will be great as this one
5CloudsLoveryay! give us another R.O.D yay i liked it it was cute and funny (hugs the story) cute and funny so please right another am sure it will be great as this one
6/15/2005 c2 5sesslover101
Ok I love this one ! Plz Up date I want to know what happens!
sesslover101
5sesslover101Ok I love this one ! Plz Up date I want to know what happens!
sesslover101
6/12/2005 c2 Taraneh
Cute fic!
Along with knowing the other presents, maybe you could add a second version (covering the same material, bt up-graded, so to speak).
I noticed that this one seemed like it could work as a framework for a more detailed one-shot. In a second version you could add in Junior and Anita's thoughts (like what she was thinking during the party, what thoughts/ train of thoughts prompted him to be uncharacteristically forward and kiss her, so on). This would make the actions and overall feel of the story feel less empty/incomplete/rushed.
Of coarse, I also understand if this was just a little idea ficcie. In that case, you may want to use the above ideas in another fic that you want to elaborate on.
Can't wait for your next fic!
Cute fic!
Along with knowing the other presents, maybe you could add a second version (covering the same material, bt up-graded, so to speak).
I noticed that this one seemed like it could work as a framework for a more detailed one-shot. In a second version you could add in Junior and Anita's thoughts (like what she was thinking during the party, what thoughts/ train of thoughts prompted him to be uncharacteristically forward and kiss her, so on). This would make the actions and overall feel of the story feel less empty/incomplete/rushed.
Of coarse, I also understand if this was just a little idea ficcie. In that case, you may want to use the above ideas in another fic that you want to elaborate on.
Can't wait for your next fic!
6/7/2005 c1 2bad girl 666
I thought it was pretty good. I really liked it. I hope u write more R.O.D. Well bye.
2bad girl 666I thought it was pretty good. I really liked it. I hope u write more R.O.D. Well bye.
5/17/2005 c1 EmptyAccount2019
I thought this story was very cute. Although Michelle had to go and embarrase them. But if she didn't it just wouldn't be normal. Good story.
I thought this story was very cute. Although Michelle had to go and embarrase them. But if she didn't it just wouldn't be normal. Good story.
5/15/2005 c1 10LadyLeelee87
I thought it was a very good story the problem is you don't have it spaced out very good. The words look like they are all cramped together in the paragraphs. Also I would of liked to know what other presents he got. Other than that it was very good write more on Junior and Anita they make a good couple
10LadyLeelee87I thought it was a very good story the problem is you don't have it spaced out very good. The words look like they are all cramped together in the paragraphs. Also I would of liked to know what other presents he got. Other than that it was very good write more on Junior and Anita they make a good couple
5/7/2005 c1 3Spark the light master
hahahaahahahahhaha! That was nice so embarrasing, suspenseful, and beautiful. *sniff*
*sniff*
3Spark the light masterhahahaahahahahhaha! That was nice so embarrasing, suspenseful, and beautiful. *sniff*
*sniff*
5/1/2005 c2 6Era Daven
That was really cute, but I would have liked to have heard what the others gave him as gifts. Also, I think Anita would have freaked when she found out they saw her and Junior kiss. Still though, I liked it very much:)
6Era DavenThat was really cute, but I would have liked to have heard what the others gave him as gifts. Also, I think Anita would have freaked when she found out they saw her and Junior kiss. Still though, I liked it very much:)
4/30/2005 c1 13hazelfrost
this was pretty cute, and well written for a short fic of Juniour's surprise birthday
13hazelfrostthis was pretty cute, and well written for a short fic of Juniour's surprise birthday
4/29/2005 c1 PockyGirl of the Phoenix Souls
You should have wrote what everyone got Junior for his birthday. Like Nancy giving Junior his birth certificate.
You should have wrote what everyone got Junior for his birthday. Like Nancy giving Junior his birth certificate.
4/28/2005 c1 5jamey mack
oh yeah, that's kinda cute, heh...
I really need to throw one out for anita/hisami
5jamey mackoh yeah, that's kinda cute, heh...
I really need to throw one out for anita/hisami