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6/30/2009 c2 Byebyei4gothisexisted
8/5/2006 c1 4stained memories
lol XP dis is kyoot XP put in more enters and stuff between da lines...luks kinda crowded...but dats just to me...but gweat storie XP
12/29/2005 c1 Your sue hurts my brain
not bad, but mind you you really should space things better and put a little mre detail into stuff, though mind you its still a good story, keep writing.
8/25/2005 c2 5CloudsLover
yay! give us another R.O.D yay i liked it it was cute and funny (hugs the story) cute and funny so please right another am sure it will be great as this one
6/15/2005 c2 5sesslover101
Ok I love this one ! Plz Up date I want to know what happens!

6/12/2005 c2 Taraneh
Cute fic!

Along with knowing the other presents, maybe you could add a second version (covering the same material, bt up-graded, so to speak).

I noticed that this one seemed like it could work as a framework for a more detailed one-shot. In a second version you could add in Junior and Anita's thoughts (like what she was thinking during the party, what thoughts/ train of thoughts prompted him to be uncharacteristically forward and kiss her, so on). This would make the actions and overall feel of the story feel less empty/incomplete/rushed.

Of coarse, I also understand if this was just a little idea ficcie. In that case, you may want to use the above ideas in another fic that you want to elaborate on.

Can't wait for your next fic!
6/7/2005 c1 2bad girl 666
I thought it was pretty good. I really liked it. I hope u write more R.O.D. Well bye.
5/17/2005 c1 EmptyAccount2019
I thought this story was very cute. Although Michelle had to go and embarrase them. But if she didn't it just wouldn't be normal. Good story.
5/15/2005 c1 10LadyLeelee87
I thought it was a very good story the problem is you don't have it spaced out very good. The words look like they are all cramped together in the paragraphs. Also I would of liked to know what other presents he got. Other than that it was very good write more on Junior and Anita they make a good couple
5/7/2005 c1 3Spark the light master
hahahaahahahahhaha! That was nice so embarrasing, suspenseful, and beautiful. *sniff*

5/2/2005 c1 kitty-81090
great chappie and i will be wating for ur next fic. okay
5/1/2005 c2 6Era Daven
That was really cute, but I would have liked to have heard what the others gave him as gifts. Also, I think Anita would have freaked when she found out they saw her and Junior kiss. Still though, I liked it very much:)
4/30/2005 c1 13hazelfrost
this was pretty cute, and well written for a short fic of Juniour's surprise birthday
4/29/2005 c1 PockyGirl of the Phoenix Souls
You should have wrote what everyone got Junior for his birthday. Like Nancy giving Junior his birth certificate.
4/28/2005 c1 5jamey mack
oh yeah, that's kinda cute, heh...

I really need to throw one out for anita/hisami
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