for I Have Feelings Too1/28/2020 c4 TKO
This was an awesome chapter, maybe the best in this fic (that's saying something because the fic as a whole is really good). Mai being mean to Bakura was funny, especially about imagining Bakura jumping on Ryou haha.
I was hoping that something would happen between Mai and Joey when she held his hand and lifted him up off the couch. You really described her emotions well, so much so that I felt them myself as I was reading this. C'mon Mai, that was a golden opportunity! Joey is single, just broke up with his girlfriend, he's at your home, and offered his hand to you.
As you can tell from my previous comments, I've already read Chapter 5 but I'm re-reading this story because it's my favorite Joey x Mai fic and I was hoping for Chapter 6. I know it's been a long time but I hope you finish this story.
This was an awesome chapter, maybe the best in this fic (that's saying something because the fic as a whole is really good). Mai being mean to Bakura was funny, especially about imagining Bakura jumping on Ryou haha.
I was hoping that something would happen between Mai and Joey when she held his hand and lifted him up off the couch. You really described her emotions well, so much so that I felt them myself as I was reading this. C'mon Mai, that was a golden opportunity! Joey is single, just broke up with his girlfriend, he's at your home, and offered his hand to you.
As you can tell from my previous comments, I've already read Chapter 5 but I'm re-reading this story because it's my favorite Joey x Mai fic and I was hoping for Chapter 6. I know it's been a long time but I hope you finish this story.
9/13/2017 c5 TKO
I know I'm double-posting, but I wanted to point out a few more things. I loved the suspense when Mai is considering whether to tell Joey of her interest for him, whether it be in her apartment when they're practicing for their play, or when she's telling him that she's going to LA. I wanted to kick Mai for each time she chickened out of confessing to Joey. After she chickened out of inviting Joey to travel with her to LA, Mai tells herself that she should do what makes her happy rather than what's good for her image (Serenity drives this point home to her later in this chapter). It was a really good life lesson, not just for Mai for me and many other people. I got inspiration from that.
I also enjoyed Bakura's humorous situation. Anyways, I hope you continue this story. I want to see the end and hope Mai and Joey hook up.
I know I'm double-posting, but I wanted to point out a few more things. I loved the suspense when Mai is considering whether to tell Joey of her interest for him, whether it be in her apartment when they're practicing for their play, or when she's telling him that she's going to LA. I wanted to kick Mai for each time she chickened out of confessing to Joey. After she chickened out of inviting Joey to travel with her to LA, Mai tells herself that she should do what makes her happy rather than what's good for her image (Serenity drives this point home to her later in this chapter). It was a really good life lesson, not just for Mai for me and many other people. I got inspiration from that.
I also enjoyed Bakura's humorous situation. Anyways, I hope you continue this story. I want to see the end and hope Mai and Joey hook up.
9/12/2017 c5 TKO
I love this story! Not a fan of the Serenity x Seto relationship but I am glad to see a Mai x Joey story. There are so many indicators of interest between Mai and Joey in the anime that it makes so much sense for them to get together. I hope you finish your story!
I love this story! Not a fan of the Serenity x Seto relationship but I am glad to see a Mai x Joey story. There are so many indicators of interest between Mai and Joey in the anime that it makes so much sense for them to get together. I hope you finish your story!
7/6/2011 c5 
74ClockworkHoenn
Can't wait for this to finish! I love this story! Update when you can!
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74ClockworkHoennCan't wait for this to finish! I love this story! Update when you can!
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7/24/2006 c4 ANBU penguin
You deserve the right to be proud of this chapter. I give you 20 out of 20. Congrats. I believe that this fic is truley beautiful. So please update.
You deserve the right to be proud of this chapter. I give you 20 out of 20. Congrats. I believe that this fic is truley beautiful. So please update.
7/22/2006 c4 2eclecticLibra
hahahahaha. that was funny! especially about the Bakura part. poor Mai though. so lost and confused. anyway, hope it all works out. i'd love to find out how Serenity asks Ryou. lol. k, update soon!
2eclecticLibrahahahahaha. that was funny! especially about the Bakura part. poor Mai though. so lost and confused. anyway, hope it all works out. i'd love to find out how Serenity asks Ryou. lol. k, update soon!
7/18/2006 c4 6Growing Pain
Hehe... Bakura's so lost in his ways it's hilarious when you think about it! :P
Anyhow; Happy you finally updated! *throws candy at you* Good little author! *pats head* ^.^
Liking Mai; she almost considered saving her body for Joey. Hahaha! AS IF! :D But she considered it, for the half second it was worth ^-^ Booyah!
And Jou's adorable. *hugs him* And he's single. Aww. Mai's gotta work her womanly charm on him and seduce the crap out of him. ^.^ yay!
Serenity's comment about Kaiba being pretty pathetic was hilarious! Loving their friendship here (Mai's and Serenity's that is) ^.^ Eventhough I am in no way a supporter of Kaiba/Serenity pairing, I'll just keep the thoughts of wanting to snatch Kaiba away to myself :P
And spelling wise... didn't catch any error, so if you have any they're probably not so apparent. :D
As far as constructive criticism goes...be wary of the usage of the first person point of view. I am in no way telling you to change POV since you now have chosen this one, and it'd only be weird to change, but like I said; be wary. It can get pretty awkward with it, especially in description and such. So just giving you a heads-up.
Now, update dang it! :P
6Growing PainHehe... Bakura's so lost in his ways it's hilarious when you think about it! :P
Anyhow; Happy you finally updated! *throws candy at you* Good little author! *pats head* ^.^
Liking Mai; she almost considered saving her body for Joey. Hahaha! AS IF! :D But she considered it, for the half second it was worth ^-^ Booyah!
And Jou's adorable. *hugs him* And he's single. Aww. Mai's gotta work her womanly charm on him and seduce the crap out of him. ^.^ yay!
Serenity's comment about Kaiba being pretty pathetic was hilarious! Loving their friendship here (Mai's and Serenity's that is) ^.^ Eventhough I am in no way a supporter of Kaiba/Serenity pairing, I'll just keep the thoughts of wanting to snatch Kaiba away to myself :P
And spelling wise... didn't catch any error, so if you have any they're probably not so apparent. :D
As far as constructive criticism goes...be wary of the usage of the first person point of view. I am in no way telling you to change POV since you now have chosen this one, and it'd only be weird to change, but like I said; be wary. It can get pretty awkward with it, especially in description and such. So just giving you a heads-up.
Now, update dang it! :P
2/3/2006 c2 Growing Pain
*looks around* Hey! Why is there no update? *pout* Me want update! Hardly any good Mai fics out there you know *bigger pout, hoping to win over authoress by looking cute* Pwease, update! *adds teary eyes*
I'll give you a cookie if ya do! :D
*looks around* Hey! Why is there no update? *pout* Me want update! Hardly any good Mai fics out there you know *bigger pout, hoping to win over authoress by looking cute* Pwease, update! *adds teary eyes*
I'll give you a cookie if ya do! :D
11/25/2005 c3 kiki
I really liked it! it took me FOREVER to read a mai/joey fanfic worth reading and it was by accedent i stumbled upon yours, but now im thinking it was some kinda faith!but yeah, i love it. you portraied Mai very,very well, her outward bitterness and inward pain, it was really quite brilliant!
I really liked it! it took me FOREVER to read a mai/joey fanfic worth reading and it was by accedent i stumbled upon yours, but now im thinking it was some kinda faith!but yeah, i love it. you portraied Mai very,very well, her outward bitterness and inward pain, it was really quite brilliant!
8/3/2005 c1 Foxy Cleopatra
hey I read all 3 chapters and it's good. I like Mai she's the coolest female character in yugioh and maybe ever because she's really strong i luv her. you've got her character down really well keep it up.
hey I read all 3 chapters and it's good. I like Mai she's the coolest female character in yugioh and maybe ever because she's really strong i luv her. you've got her character down really well keep it up.
8/1/2005 c3 6Dreammistress Jade
lol loved the old lady part. Poor Bakura. =) You have good music taste. I love Evanescence. And I think I must've sung My Immortal about 100 times by now. ^_^;; Anyhoos good luck to Mai and Bakura on their love problems! You're not going to update Complete Chaos soon? =( You make me sad. I'm going to go off and sulk somewhere.
~Toodles!~
6Dreammistress Jadelol loved the old lady part. Poor Bakura. =) You have good music taste. I love Evanescence. And I think I must've sung My Immortal about 100 times by now. ^_^;; Anyhoos good luck to Mai and Bakura on their love problems! You're not going to update Complete Chaos soon? =( You make me sad. I'm going to go off and sulk somewhere.
~Toodles!~
7/28/2005 c3 2Starinthenight
Lol, that's me ^^. And that's probably why only a few people read and review that story...:P I love your story! The BakuraxRyou part...lol, I feel sorry for Bakura, though that may be the point of it.
2StarinthenightLol, that's me ^^. And that's probably why only a few people read and review that story...:P I love your story! The BakuraxRyou part...lol, I feel sorry for Bakura, though that may be the point of it.
7/26/2005 c3 2anonymous Jewel
Good job on chapter 3! Give yourself a pat on the back! I'm glad you're writing a fic about Mai, since she's so underrepresented in fanfiction. As you might've guessed, she's my favorite character, maybe because she reminds me of myself, or maybe just because I wish I could be more like her, and less shy around people. I always hide my true self from people, because I'm afraid they'll judge me...now I'm rambling!anyways, update soon!
2anonymous JewelGood job on chapter 3! Give yourself a pat on the back! I'm glad you're writing a fic about Mai, since she's so underrepresented in fanfiction. As you might've guessed, she's my favorite character, maybe because she reminds me of myself, or maybe just because I wish I could be more like her, and less shy around people. I always hide my true self from people, because I'm afraid they'll judge me...now I'm rambling!anyways, update soon!
7/26/2005 c3 6Growing Pain
I like this story, it's hard to find good Mai stories around here. Update soon!
6Growing PainI like this story, it's hard to find good Mai stories around here. Update soon!