for Return of the Lost11/11/2006 c4 
49MangaFreak15
Hehehe, Naruto looks like Yondaime, but he ain't, it's a jigger-waffle! Meaning that Naruto's Yondaime's son with i herited looks.
49MangaFreak15Hehehe, Naruto looks like Yondaime, but he ain't, it's a jigger-waffle! Meaning that Naruto's Yondaime's son with i herited looks.
11/7/2006 c14 17Silver Warrior
now this was cool. Your spelling is reasonably better, though there are still numerous errors. Overall, an entertaining story. Love the tormenting of Itachi-teme by Kyuubi and his mate. And Hiashi is a thoroughly disgusting pitiful excuse for a man.
17Silver Warriornow this was cool. Your spelling is reasonably better, though there are still numerous errors. Overall, an entertaining story. Love the tormenting of Itachi-teme by Kyuubi and his mate. And Hiashi is a thoroughly disgusting pitiful excuse for a man.
10/31/2006 c14 26Cloud-1-3-5 and Ame Emi Dai
Fantastic chapter once again ^_^ I practically tingled with excitement as Naruto and Hinata made their announcements!
As for story names... well, what about a kind of sequential "Of the lost" theme? Like, #1 being Tales of the Lost, #2 being Return of the Lost, #3 being Joining of the Lost, and a similar suitable title for #4, or something to that effect? The 'Return of the Lost' name is like this series' trademark now, so it'd be a shame to lose it.
26Cloud-1-3-5 and Ame Emi DaiFantastic chapter once again ^_^ I practically tingled with excitement as Naruto and Hinata made their announcements!
As for story names... well, what about a kind of sequential "Of the lost" theme? Like, #1 being Tales of the Lost, #2 being Return of the Lost, #3 being Joining of the Lost, and a similar suitable title for #4, or something to that effect? The 'Return of the Lost' name is like this series' trademark now, so it'd be a shame to lose it.
10/25/2006 c14 twerplified
I love this series you have written, it is so entertaining as well as far enough from the Naruto stroy that it feels very refreshing, thank you for writing exceptionally and also giving us chapters that continue to get better and better. Can't wait to see what happens next = )
I love this series you have written, it is so entertaining as well as far enough from the Naruto stroy that it feels very refreshing, thank you for writing exceptionally and also giving us chapters that continue to get better and better. Can't wait to see what happens next = )
10/24/2006 c14 2dragondancer123
I'm not really a writer, so I won't even try to give you ideas for the title except that I think that you should leave it be. Its only my honest opinion because it would just confuse the heck outa me if you changed it now. I just skip ove the R rated parts because I know that it's not a major part in the story, just the aftermath. That's just what I do. I will continue to read even then.
2dragondancer123I'm not really a writer, so I won't even try to give you ideas for the title except that I think that you should leave it be. Its only my honest opinion because it would just confuse the heck outa me if you changed it now. I just skip ove the R rated parts because I know that it's not a major part in the story, just the aftermath. That's just what I do. I will continue to read even then.
10/20/2006 c14 3VASHD1
very good chapter , except for a few spelling errors which i'm sure other reviewers have let you know about, lol i read other reviews first ,I dont know if you want to stay with - Return Of - in your next segment title but idea-New Begining- Dark Knight -White Light .. Dark Knight or Night being Naruto/Kyuubi and White Or Bright Light refering to Hinata and her new eerr powers , just something to awaken any ideas left in the dusty corner of your mind lol. Something for you to play arround with. I've enjoyed the whole story throught tho. and eerr KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK LLMMAAOO
3VASHD1very good chapter , except for a few spelling errors which i'm sure other reviewers have let you know about, lol i read other reviews first ,I dont know if you want to stay with - Return Of - in your next segment title but idea-New Begining- Dark Knight -White Light .. Dark Knight or Night being Naruto/Kyuubi and White Or Bright Light refering to Hinata and her new eerr powers , just something to awaken any ideas left in the dusty corner of your mind lol. Something for you to play arround with. I've enjoyed the whole story throught tho. and eerr KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK LLMMAAOO
10/20/2006 c14 conan98002
‘We can neither confirm, nor deny that Lord Uzumaki kicked the crap out of the 'old windbag' last night.’hehehe I loved that line.
great story
‘We can neither confirm, nor deny that Lord Uzumaki kicked the crap out of the 'old windbag' last night.’hehehe I loved that line.
great story
10/19/2006 c14 John Bellamy
something came to mind when you said you need a new name well i think it might work but here: Inheriting His Birthrights.(if the spelling is off please forgive me i cant spell to save my life). Also YAY! I've been waiting for the final part of this book for a while, i cant wait to finish reading this to the end.
something came to mind when you said you need a new name well i think it might work but here: Inheriting His Birthrights.(if the spelling is off please forgive me i cant spell to save my life). Also YAY! I've been waiting for the final part of this book for a while, i cant wait to finish reading this to the end.
10/19/2006 c14 pandamaestro
I still love this but I have a request. Some of us have a quite forgetful memory and they have alot of stories they read every day. So I was requesting that maybe(just maaybee?)that you could post a summary of the whole triology into a chapter if that is okay? PLEASEE! And I LUV how you make announcements! How you make characters of the story announce themselves in such honored dignified way it is SO DAMN AWESOME!
I still love this but I have a request. Some of us have a quite forgetful memory and they have alot of stories they read every day. So I was requesting that maybe(just maaybee?)that you could post a summary of the whole triology into a chapter if that is okay? PLEASEE! And I LUV how you make announcements! How you make characters of the story announce themselves in such honored dignified way it is SO DAMN AWESOME!
10/19/2006 c14 3Dragon Noir
so this close this book... well i think i already told you some of the ideas i had to rename the books, haven't think about something else so i'll let you decide and sort through
OMG hinata is turning into a new naruto, if she decides to launch her own prank-attacks konoha is doomed XD
pretty good with hinata and naruto though i would have like to see the witnessing ceremony (maybe naruto giving the elders a piece of his mind) and the speech was good though maybe a little too formal and impersonal, well we still have next time to see if some people will challenge naruto's lineage "damn demon brat trying to corrupt the memory of our revered yondaime by claiming his filiation" and what the hyuuga clan will do, especially with the 'hints' some jounins are spreading through the aprty to the villagers *grin maniacally*
3Dragon Noirso this close this book... well i think i already told you some of the ideas i had to rename the books, haven't think about something else so i'll let you decide and sort through
OMG hinata is turning into a new naruto, if she decides to launch her own prank-attacks konoha is doomed XD
pretty good with hinata and naruto though i would have like to see the witnessing ceremony (maybe naruto giving the elders a piece of his mind) and the speech was good though maybe a little too formal and impersonal, well we still have next time to see if some people will challenge naruto's lineage "damn demon brat trying to corrupt the memory of our revered yondaime by claiming his filiation" and what the hyuuga clan will do, especially with the 'hints' some jounins are spreading through the aprty to the villagers *grin maniacally*
10/19/2006 c14 Keiji-sama
Oi...You need to take a careful look at your writing before you publish it, because you miss certain spelling errors every chapter.
Firstly, there's Shinobi. You quite literally ALWAYS spell it Shinobe, despite the fact that it is not the correct spelling.
Secondly, there's Sannin. You spell it Sennin for some reason. While this is a-very-common mistake, it is still not correct. I don't know why people make this mistake, however they are the Three, which translates to sAnnin, not sennin.
Thirdly, there's Hyuuga Hiashi's name. It is Hiashi, not Haishi. The I comes BEFORE the A, not after it. You can verify this on ANY Naruto website out there, so long as it has character information on it.
Mikuhasi's name; if it was created in anything other than the Japanese naming style, disregard this portion. If it was, read on. The Japanese alphabet covers syllables, not individual letters-such as the English Alphabet-and they do not have a Si. The "Sa Line" of the Japanese alphabet contains the following: Sa, Shi, Su, Se, So. Note that instead of Si, there is Shi. It is because they do not HAVE "Si."
That should be it for now, but I must say, beyond that, you've done a pretty good job.
Oi...You need to take a careful look at your writing before you publish it, because you miss certain spelling errors every chapter.
Firstly, there's Shinobi. You quite literally ALWAYS spell it Shinobe, despite the fact that it is not the correct spelling.
Secondly, there's Sannin. You spell it Sennin for some reason. While this is a-very-common mistake, it is still not correct. I don't know why people make this mistake, however they are the Three, which translates to sAnnin, not sennin.
Thirdly, there's Hyuuga Hiashi's name. It is Hiashi, not Haishi. The I comes BEFORE the A, not after it. You can verify this on ANY Naruto website out there, so long as it has character information on it.
Mikuhasi's name; if it was created in anything other than the Japanese naming style, disregard this portion. If it was, read on. The Japanese alphabet covers syllables, not individual letters-such as the English Alphabet-and they do not have a Si. The "Sa Line" of the Japanese alphabet contains the following: Sa, Shi, Su, Se, So. Note that instead of Si, there is Shi. It is because they do not HAVE "Si."
That should be it for now, but I must say, beyond that, you've done a pretty good job.