
5/21/2005 c1 anonymous
excellent, but make the chapters a little longer, beginning seemed a little too short it needed more to pull a reader in. but great story line. it just needs reason about why shes tearing away from her friends. and more about whats happening to her. just longer chapters would be better.
excellent, but make the chapters a little longer, beginning seemed a little too short it needed more to pull a reader in. but great story line. it just needs reason about why shes tearing away from her friends. and more about whats happening to her. just longer chapters would be better.