for Cybernectic Epiphany12/7/2006 c8 MorganaMorhighan
Aie! Schro and Lumen!
XD I know those names! XD
Schro reminds me of the Hellsing schro. _
Aie! Schro and Lumen!
XD I know those names! XD
Schro reminds me of the Hellsing schro. _
11/27/2006 c8 
9Tylec Asroc
Great to have you back, Steeple! It's been a while since the last update, so I'm a little shaky remembering all of Morganna's friends. Luckly, they all have there own unique style of speech to keep their voices distinct during conversations, from over-the-top Piros expressions, awkward Japanese, the shy -domo fellow, and the "sweetheart" werewolf.
I wonder if I'm correct in sensing the influence of the Hellsing manga with your introduction of a militant German werewolf who seemingly teleports?
And it is a good chapter for introductions - the sysadmin, the hacker queen; more and more factions are going after Morganna. Things look like they'll turn very epic in the future installments!
9Tylec AsrocGreat to have you back, Steeple! It's been a while since the last update, so I'm a little shaky remembering all of Morganna's friends. Luckly, they all have there own unique style of speech to keep their voices distinct during conversations, from over-the-top Piros expressions, awkward Japanese, the shy -domo fellow, and the "sweetheart" werewolf.
I wonder if I'm correct in sensing the influence of the Hellsing manga with your introduction of a militant German werewolf who seemingly teleports?
And it is a good chapter for introductions - the sysadmin, the hacker queen; more and more factions are going after Morganna. Things look like they'll turn very epic in the future installments!
11/21/2006 c8 5imkikyo
Very interesting, and although I know it's not as frequent as it was in earlier chapters, one thing that really gets on my nerves is when people alternate between Japanese and English. I understand what you're saying, but it's kind of annoying to read a bunch of English and then suddenly be faced with a few words in Japanese.
If the story's in English, write in English. If it's in Japanese, write in Japanese. No matter what the speech pattern is, there's always a way to translate it completely and effectively, you just have to be creative about it.
5imkikyoVery interesting, and although I know it's not as frequent as it was in earlier chapters, one thing that really gets on my nerves is when people alternate between Japanese and English. I understand what you're saying, but it's kind of annoying to read a bunch of English and then suddenly be faced with a few words in Japanese.
If the story's in English, write in English. If it's in Japanese, write in Japanese. No matter what the speech pattern is, there's always a way to translate it completely and effectively, you just have to be creative about it.
11/13/2006 c8 Tasogare
All the world know about Morganna and I put the blame on Nezumi. Well, someone sent a mail to CC anyway.
You included to Schrödinger! I am a Hellsing fan too. ^^ Now Schrödinger is other guy in the world and he is a hacker! maybe anyone will shoot him but he still can suffer.
All the world know about Morganna and I put the blame on Nezumi. Well, someone sent a mail to CC anyway.
You included to Schrödinger! I am a Hellsing fan too. ^^ Now Schrödinger is other guy in the world and he is a hacker! maybe anyone will shoot him but he still can suffer.
8/2/2006 c7 NegativeKarma
w00t! An update and a Great Chapter! *hands a Texas-sized cookie to the author*
This chapter has reminded me of Jak 2 & 3 with extreme anger or related emotion results into the transformation of a demon/monster/whatever.
If you can spice up the next chapter with some action!
w00t! An update and a Great Chapter! *hands a Texas-sized cookie to the author*
This chapter has reminded me of Jak 2 & 3 with extreme anger or related emotion results into the transformation of a demon/monster/whatever.
If you can spice up the next chapter with some action!
7/10/2006 c7 Tasogare
NEW CHAPTER!
I am so happy!
Wait, SORA? Well, It was weird but It is not bad. Sora is a child and Morganna is 5 years old (hack/quarantine) so really he would be elder :)
Maybe she will understand that to feel butterflies for someone don`t mean love.
For this line
QUOTE: “You may use the name, even if it is… different.”
I thought in my last review and I must leave of read this or I will finish to talking like her but I will run the risk.
Wow, now she is creepy. It will be very interesting since she transformed in Evil Morganna and perhaps she will kill everybody. (it is only a joke, sorry)
A great chapter
NEW CHAPTER!
I am so happy!
Wait, SORA? Well, It was weird but It is not bad. Sora is a child and Morganna is 5 years old (hack/quarantine) so really he would be elder :)
Maybe she will understand that to feel butterflies for someone don`t mean love.
For this line
QUOTE: “You may use the name, even if it is… different.”
I thought in my last review and I must leave of read this or I will finish to talking like her but I will run the risk.
Wow, now she is creepy. It will be very interesting since she transformed in Evil Morganna and perhaps she will kill everybody. (it is only a joke, sorry)
A great chapter
7/6/2006 c7 Morgana
Hey there!
I LOVED Chapter 6!
WOW :D
I really want to see your versions of the characters, becuase I want to draw them, but I'm afraid I'll screw up.
Morgana is SO cool! XD
Same with Sora, I lurv them both.
Contact me sometime, I'm always online.(gaia)
Hey there!
I LOVED Chapter 6!
WOW :D
I really want to see your versions of the characters, becuase I want to draw them, but I'm afraid I'll screw up.
Morgana is SO cool! XD
Same with Sora, I lurv them both.
Contact me sometime, I'm always online.(gaia)
7/6/2006 c7 Chaos009
Great chapter. Even though I've read it before, I like it! See ya sometime, okay?
Great chapter. Even though I've read it before, I like it! See ya sometime, okay?
7/6/2006 c7 8Spanner
Wonderful to see that this interesting story is still going! I'm enjoying watching Morganna come into her own as an individual, and the way she interacts with the people she's coming to regard as her friend. I'll admit that her love for Sora seemed to come a bit out of the blue, but I was happy to see that Sora's response when Morgana introduced herself was very appropriate. If I were him, I'd be scared spitless, too! I look forward to seeing how Morganna ultimately deals with this rejection.
Please, keep writing!
8SpannerWonderful to see that this interesting story is still going! I'm enjoying watching Morganna come into her own as an individual, and the way she interacts with the people she's coming to regard as her friend. I'll admit that her love for Sora seemed to come a bit out of the blue, but I was happy to see that Sora's response when Morgana introduced herself was very appropriate. If I were him, I'd be scared spitless, too! I look forward to seeing how Morganna ultimately deals with this rejection.
Please, keep writing!
7/5/2006 c7 9Tylec Asroc
Ah, so Morganna embraces her heritage as the Queen of Battle and Death, no longer the woman, but the hooded crow! Though when you began describing her stiched-up zombie/rag-doll avatar, for a second I thought we were getting an early sighting of TriEdge.
Whoa - Morganna's feelings for the kid who called her obachan/auntie came as a surprise, but her interest has been well planted with little mentions of concern ("The players could exist without her. Sora could-"). At first I thought this was demonstraing how low she'd sunk: even the antisocial, wacko PKer didn't need her around, but I should have seen it coming. Heck, the first scene is all about introducing the odd couple.
Sora's fear is absolutely tangible in that scene, and poor Morganna can't help but do all the wrong things and bring up all the wrong memories as she tries to connect with the kid. It's a lamentable direction they take, but there's something truthful about being unable to obtain the one you desire.
Continuity check: in chapter five Sora rants about the removal of PKing, although the option is later available in this chapter.
Looking at symbolism, Morganna's personal field mirrors the growth of her more gentle character with the growth of plant life and the calming sky - it still has a long road to recovery, but it's starting. I'd like to say she's also the red 'n white caterpillar, but who's she munching on? Aura, Rin - the fruits of The World?
9Tylec AsrocAh, so Morganna embraces her heritage as the Queen of Battle and Death, no longer the woman, but the hooded crow! Though when you began describing her stiched-up zombie/rag-doll avatar, for a second I thought we were getting an early sighting of TriEdge.
Whoa - Morganna's feelings for the kid who called her obachan/auntie came as a surprise, but her interest has been well planted with little mentions of concern ("The players could exist without her. Sora could-"). At first I thought this was demonstraing how low she'd sunk: even the antisocial, wacko PKer didn't need her around, but I should have seen it coming. Heck, the first scene is all about introducing the odd couple.
Sora's fear is absolutely tangible in that scene, and poor Morganna can't help but do all the wrong things and bring up all the wrong memories as she tries to connect with the kid. It's a lamentable direction they take, but there's something truthful about being unable to obtain the one you desire.
Continuity check: in chapter five Sora rants about the removal of PKing, although the option is later available in this chapter.
Looking at symbolism, Morganna's personal field mirrors the growth of her more gentle character with the growth of plant life and the calming sky - it still has a long road to recovery, but it's starting. I'd like to say she's also the red 'n white caterpillar, but who's she munching on? Aura, Rin - the fruits of The World?
7/5/2006 c7 Ignis Workman
YAY! You aren't dead *maniacal laughter* Poor Morgonna-chan. Sora you baka! *throws a bomb at him* Go back and apologize you stupid fourth grader *cries* Morgonna-chan is going to get deleted now...*sobbing*
YAY! You aren't dead *maniacal laughter* Poor Morgonna-chan. Sora you baka! *throws a bomb at him* Go back and apologize you stupid fourth grader *cries* Morgonna-chan is going to get deleted now...*sobbing*
5/22/2006 c6 Tasogare
You are a great writer, a story about Morganna is very hard if you think in the character we don't know many details and sometimes or almost all the time we don't understand her reasons for do the things. Morganna in your FF is a little...different but for do her better.
suggestions
please if you want romance be careful because remember she is not a candy, don't use too much honey
thank you.
You are a great writer, a story about Morganna is very hard if you think in the character we don't know many details and sometimes or almost all the time we don't understand her reasons for do the things. Morganna in your FF is a little...different but for do her better.
suggestions
please if you want romance be careful because remember she is not a candy, don't use too much honey
thank you.
5/19/2006 c6 Anonymous Coward
I'll really like the plot and the story itself so update soon!
~~Suggestions~~
Add some romance in real soon. :D
Keep writing the story.
I'll really like the plot and the story itself so update soon!
~~Suggestions~~
Add some romance in real soon. :D
Keep writing the story.
4/21/2006 c6 HelbaFan
Plese update!
This fic is my favorite of hack sign and i can`t wait for other chapter. Good work.
Plese update!
This fic is my favorite of hack sign and i can`t wait for other chapter. Good work.