for Graduation7/10/2005 c1 
1HalfDemonLuvr
YAY FOR YOUR GOOD STORY! Your story is really good! Please continue writing! Update Soon! - HalfDemonLuvr
1HalfDemonLuvrYAY FOR YOUR GOOD STORY! Your story is really good! Please continue writing! Update Soon! - HalfDemonLuvr
7/10/2005 c1 3Shadow Of A Lost Soul
I think it was really good. Can't wait for an update!
Later,
Shadow Of A Lost Soul
^_^
3Shadow Of A Lost SoulI think it was really good. Can't wait for an update!
Later,
Shadow Of A Lost Soul
^_^
7/10/2005 c1 7quirkyghostdelta
Inuluv,
There are definetly some word choice and spelling errors that if you have the time to fix, I would highly suggest doing so, but besides that this is a good start to a story. Description might be one of the strong points but it's used far too infrequently. I would also like to see more narration in between dialogue. I think it would make it spicier. Another thing that's good is the flow; no choppy waters in chapter one. A bit of advice: don't concentrate on getting it written and out there, but on imbuing your best effort into it so that it evinces your passion for writing.
Great Start,
EHB
7quirkyghostdeltaInuluv,
There are definetly some word choice and spelling errors that if you have the time to fix, I would highly suggest doing so, but besides that this is a good start to a story. Description might be one of the strong points but it's used far too infrequently. I would also like to see more narration in between dialogue. I think it would make it spicier. Another thing that's good is the flow; no choppy waters in chapter one. A bit of advice: don't concentrate on getting it written and out there, but on imbuing your best effort into it so that it evinces your passion for writing.
Great Start,
EHB