for Love and Promises5/31/2006 c1 Freya3
Okay...your whole story was pretty good but no offense...have you seriously ever learnt how to write paragraphs?
Okay...your whole story was pretty good but no offense...have you seriously ever learnt how to write paragraphs?
310/17/2005 c1 McTuve
I realy like your story! and I am informing every one on the ceres: celestial legend section that there was already a ceres section. I think it wasn't recognized cause it doesn't have the same name, I think it goes by the japanese or another language name...anyways its Ayashi no Ceres, if you wanted more attention for your fic, it could be posted there. It has over 300 stories so there might be a better chance of reviewing! Keep up the good work!
I realy like your story! and I am informing every one on the ceres: celestial legend section that there was already a ceres section. I think it wasn't recognized cause it doesn't have the same name, I think it goes by the japanese or another language name...anyways its Ayashi no Ceres, if you wanted more attention for your fic, it could be posted there. It has over 300 stories so there might be a better chance of reviewing! Keep up the good work!
9/21/2005 c1 viiruz
Itz sad u noe...howz therez onli THREE stori of ayashi no ceres...oh wellz...i guezz ill write one myself to make it 5! :D
Ur stori is pretti good. Full of fluff...but u should try to make them into paragraphz...cuz it getz a lil bit...irritating...one whole paragraph...itz seemz alots...
Update soonz
ForbiddenHeartz
Itz sad u noe...howz therez onli THREE stori of ayashi no ceres...oh wellz...i guezz ill write one myself to make it 5! :D
Ur stori is pretti good. Full of fluff...but u should try to make them into paragraphz...cuz it getz a lil bit...irritating...one whole paragraph...itz seemz alots...
Update soonz
ForbiddenHeartz
9/13/2005 c1 SC
Paragraphs? and if you notice that its repetitive, try to put a bit of variety in it. also remember that Toya has a few issues with show ing emotions that freely. Sure, he loves Aya, and will kiss her and everything, but as of the 7th volume of the manga he hasnt even said out loud that he loves her. Try to keep them in character? your rendition of Aya isnt bad. keep writing
Paragraphs? and if you notice that its repetitive, try to put a bit of variety in it. also remember that Toya has a few issues with show ing emotions that freely. Sure, he loves Aya, and will kiss her and everything, but as of the 7th volume of the manga he hasnt even said out loud that he loves her. Try to keep them in character? your rendition of Aya isnt bad. keep writing