for If Only11/9/2013 c5 
1I-Love-Trunks1
I hope Muraki doesn't end up finding out where Hisoka is. Hisoka is my favorite character! I love submissive Hisoka!
I love this story so much!
Cant wait for more!
1I-Love-Trunks1I hope Muraki doesn't end up finding out where Hisoka is. Hisoka is my favorite character! I love submissive Hisoka!
I love this story so much!
Cant wait for more!
9/10/2010 c5 Midori Me Beriidansaa
Why did you apologize for the ending? I can´t see anything wrong about it. It reminds me of most of the movie/anime/book chapter endings. ^_^
Why did you apologize for the ending? I can´t see anything wrong about it. It reminds me of most of the movie/anime/book chapter endings. ^_^
9/10/2010 c4 Midori Me Beriidansaa
Mmm...´Sex toy´? O.O Wow, that made ma seriously shiver... I truly love when writers put thoughts of the characters in their stories. Readers (especially me) can understand the characters better then. And I also find it funny when you comment some of the situations and phrases you used. Someone could consider it annoying, because it somehow disturbs their concentration on the plot though YOUR comments are not disturbing at all. They´re not forcible, affected and they seem to blend in the story. I´m just saying this because I´ve already read fanfictions where their writers put up so many comments in the stories that it was REALLY disturbing. Definitely not your case. ^^
Mmm...´Sex toy´? O.O Wow, that made ma seriously shiver... I truly love when writers put thoughts of the characters in their stories. Readers (especially me) can understand the characters better then. And I also find it funny when you comment some of the situations and phrases you used. Someone could consider it annoying, because it somehow disturbs their concentration on the plot though YOUR comments are not disturbing at all. They´re not forcible, affected and they seem to blend in the story. I´m just saying this because I´ve already read fanfictions where their writers put up so many comments in the stories that it was REALLY disturbing. Definitely not your case. ^^
9/10/2010 c2 Midori Me Beriidansaa
I don´t think that this chapter sucks. What would make you say that? O.o Every story´s beginning is rather hard to get through. Everything in the beginning has to be explained and the writer needs to bestir the story further on. Personally, I like this chapter. ^^
I don´t think that this chapter sucks. What would make you say that? O.o Every story´s beginning is rather hard to get through. Everything in the beginning has to be explained and the writer needs to bestir the story further on. Personally, I like this chapter. ^^
5/8/2008 c5 8Cumcakesxxxx
Cute. Adorable.
I like it. I love it.
Keep on going! Things are heating up! -rubs palms together- I can't WAIT to see what happens! Tsuzuki and Hisoka-chan are getting pretty lovey-lovey! Very adorably portrayed to! You have talent in fluff!
-runs up during his laughing scene and bitchs slaps Muraki- WHY DO YOU ALWAYS HAVE TO RUIN EVERYTHING! -runs away sobbing-
Muraki...so evil.
Please PLEASE don't leave me hanging! If I don't find out what happens, I'll slit my throat with a spork! D: Please cotinue soon, you are very much awesome, no go! GO!
8CumcakesxxxxCute. Adorable.
I like it. I love it.
Keep on going! Things are heating up! -rubs palms together- I can't WAIT to see what happens! Tsuzuki and Hisoka-chan are getting pretty lovey-lovey! Very adorably portrayed to! You have talent in fluff!
-runs up during his laughing scene and bitchs slaps Muraki- WHY DO YOU ALWAYS HAVE TO RUIN EVERYTHING! -runs away sobbing-
Muraki...so evil.
Please PLEASE don't leave me hanging! If I don't find out what happens, I'll slit my throat with a spork! D: Please cotinue soon, you are very much awesome, no go! GO!
5/8/2008 c4 Cumcakesxxxx
THAT.WAS.SO.CUTE!
I love seeing Tsuzuki and Hisoka do children-ish things. It feels like I'm witnessing Hisoka reedming part of his stolen childhood. -sigh- so sweet!
Hehe, Tsuzuki is getting a little ahead of himself... Even though I'm secretly crossing my fingers too! Only one seat, please!
'Soka chan is so adorable, I love him! :D
Oh, I see.
Muraki is a pedophile!
That he is, I hate the bastard. :D
Tsuzuki better protect 'Soka-chan with his life! I wonder what will happen when Muraki finds him!
THAT.WAS.SO.CUTE!
I love seeing Tsuzuki and Hisoka do children-ish things. It feels like I'm witnessing Hisoka reedming part of his stolen childhood. -sigh- so sweet!
Hehe, Tsuzuki is getting a little ahead of himself... Even though I'm secretly crossing my fingers too! Only one seat, please!
'Soka chan is so adorable, I love him! :D
Oh, I see.
Muraki is a pedophile!
That he is, I hate the bastard. :D
Tsuzuki better protect 'Soka-chan with his life! I wonder what will happen when Muraki finds him!
5/7/2008 c3 Cumcakesxxxx
Uh-huh, that's what I mean about insight, I want to know why Tsuzuki was so compelled to share the news with a starnger he just met! But seeing as how this chapter was written befor the adivce, it's all good! I'm very much enjoying this story and I found Hisoka's withdrawl very cute! But, I mean, what more could you expect? Hisoka is such a total cutie pie!
Totally adorable, but I wonder why Hisoka didn't eat? He's so skinny already, the boy needs food! (lol) ^-^
Seriously, you're doing great. Don't worry and stop putting yourself down. If think your fic isn't coming out how you'd want, stop and think about it. You're not an author getting paid for this, no deadlines to meet. Go at your own pace and relax. Check your chapters over, maybe even get a beta-reader. Hell, I'd be more than happy to do it for you, since from your ANs you seem very likable, and not stuck-up at all. So just chill, take things at your own pace. If people aren't liking it, change things around a bit, better yourself little at a time. And if they don't appreciate your efforts? They can just go screw themselves. Have confidence in yourself and in your writing and things will pan out smoothly. Everybody needs work and time befor they become a prodigy. Like I said, just cool down, and think things out. What you want in your story, what you need. I love working with out-lines, especially those circle diagrams for writing and stuff!
Uh-huh, that's what I mean about insight, I want to know why Tsuzuki was so compelled to share the news with a starnger he just met! But seeing as how this chapter was written befor the adivce, it's all good! I'm very much enjoying this story and I found Hisoka's withdrawl very cute! But, I mean, what more could you expect? Hisoka is such a total cutie pie!
Totally adorable, but I wonder why Hisoka didn't eat? He's so skinny already, the boy needs food! (lol) ^-^
Seriously, you're doing great. Don't worry and stop putting yourself down. If think your fic isn't coming out how you'd want, stop and think about it. You're not an author getting paid for this, no deadlines to meet. Go at your own pace and relax. Check your chapters over, maybe even get a beta-reader. Hell, I'd be more than happy to do it for you, since from your ANs you seem very likable, and not stuck-up at all. So just chill, take things at your own pace. If people aren't liking it, change things around a bit, better yourself little at a time. And if they don't appreciate your efforts? They can just go screw themselves. Have confidence in yourself and in your writing and things will pan out smoothly. Everybody needs work and time befor they become a prodigy. Like I said, just cool down, and think things out. What you want in your story, what you need. I love working with out-lines, especially those circle diagrams for writing and stuff!
5/7/2008 c2 Cumcakesxxxx
After your AN in the beginning, I decided to check up on the reviews.
Well, first I noticed m review was cute short... FANFICTION ALWAYS FnCKS UP MY REVIEWS! D
After your AN in the beginning, I decided to check up on the reviews.
Well, first I noticed m review was cute short... FANFICTION ALWAYS FnCKS UP MY REVIEWS! D
5/7/2008 c1 Cumcakesxxxx
A dream, huh? I LOVE when dreams give me story ideas! Of course, sometimes a dream that seems like it would be a great story for me...well, my dreams never really make the best of sense. So they always end up with tons of holes, and weird things, so...I don't use them! Hehe (if that ramble made any sense at all!)
Interesting premise! Who was Hisoka running from? I have my guesses! *punches Muraki and kicks him repeatidly* TOUCH MY-ER, TSUZUKI'S ADORABLE HISOKA-CHAN AGAIN AND THE NEXT TIME, I'LL DROWN YOU IN A RIVER AFTER LETTING SEXUALLY FRUSTERATED SUPER SEMES "RELEASE" THEIR FRUSTERATION ON YOU IN AN UNCOMFORTABLE PICK-UP TRUCK! D
A dream, huh? I LOVE when dreams give me story ideas! Of course, sometimes a dream that seems like it would be a great story for me...well, my dreams never really make the best of sense. So they always end up with tons of holes, and weird things, so...I don't use them! Hehe (if that ramble made any sense at all!)
Interesting premise! Who was Hisoka running from? I have my guesses! *punches Muraki and kicks him repeatidly* TOUCH MY-ER, TSUZUKI'S ADORABLE HISOKA-CHAN AGAIN AND THE NEXT TIME, I'LL DROWN YOU IN A RIVER AFTER LETTING SEXUALLY FRUSTERATED SUPER SEMES "RELEASE" THEIR FRUSTERATION ON YOU IN AN UNCOMFORTABLE PICK-UP TRUCK! D
8/5/2007 c4 Die in a hole with Penguins
Oh I Like The Story So Much Please Please Please Hurry Up With The Next Chapter!
Oh I Like The Story So Much Please Please Please Hurry Up With The Next Chapter!
5/19/2007 c4 7catgrl106
Aw... that's so cute! I am guessing that Muraki is after Hisoka, huh? Please continue soon!
7catgrl106Aw... that's so cute! I am guessing that Muraki is after Hisoka, huh? Please continue soon!
10/4/2006 c4 Sakura Yamazaki
Hoy nya~
my earlier reviews were 4 other chapters.i also 4got dat i had already reviewed this fic at least once before-i think-.not that its a bad thing izit?:P u get more reviews
-notreviewersbutstill-
Ja Ne
Hoy nya~
my earlier reviews were 4 other chapters.i also 4got dat i had already reviewed this fic at least once before-i think-.not that its a bad thing izit?:P u get more reviews
-notreviewersbutstill-
Ja Ne
10/4/2006 c2 Sakura Yamazaki
Hoy nya~
THIS CHAPTER WAS SOO SHORT!
ne, to make up 4 how stinking short this thing was, u better make sure they make (L) at least once. :P
Ja Ne
Hoy nya~
THIS CHAPTER WAS SOO SHORT!
ne, to make up 4 how stinking short this thing was, u better make sure they make (L) at least once. :P
Ja Ne
10/4/2006 c1 Sakura Yamazaki
Hoy nya..
ur right she does seem like a bitch -or maybe u were focusing on my personality of course 'Ruka' -couz- isn't...
aah~let Tsu 4get about her n focus on 'the beaten-looking teenage boy' that might as well be Ronald McDonald if noone managed to guess who he was/is.
-so far- ii no fic.
Ja Ne
Hoy nya..
ur right she does seem like a bitch -or maybe u were focusing on my personality of course 'Ruka' -couz- isn't...
aah~let Tsu 4get about her n focus on 'the beaten-looking teenage boy' that might as well be Ronald McDonald if noone managed to guess who he was/is.
-so far- ii no fic.
Ja Ne