for Beryl's child6/7/2012 c2 Janissasonic.net
I fully support your stance on material that is MA.
I fully support your stance on material that is MA.
3/23/2008 c1 FalseExact
Like the story so far, can not wait to read more. Your story could use some polishing, check the grammar and possibly extend your story with more description or just writing more of the scene. (ex. Instead of ending when attack starts, finish when youma, daemon, or whatever there called is destroyed). You should get a pre-reader if you can, to help smooth over problems you might not notice.
Like the story so far, can not wait to read more. Your story could use some polishing, check the grammar and possibly extend your story with more description or just writing more of the scene. (ex. Instead of ending when attack starts, finish when youma, daemon, or whatever there called is destroyed). You should get a pre-reader if you can, to help smooth over problems you might not notice.
12/6/2007 c1 iceland
it is a good story and wonder what happens next to ranma in the next chapter. it would be nice to see how ranma got yuki and sayuri together as a couple.
it is a good story and wonder what happens next to ranma in the next chapter. it would be nice to see how ranma got yuki and sayuri together as a couple.
2/2/2007 c1 
12genhoss
i must of missed this when you first posted it, it's a little rough but interesting and overal pretty good. you just need o patch up the grammer and spelling a bit and perhaps even get a bit more descriptive, i'm only saying that cause it was a bit short.
anyway i hope you update this and if you're still looking for some one to help you proof read send me a email
12genhossi must of missed this when you first posted it, it's a little rough but interesting and overal pretty good. you just need o patch up the grammer and spelling a bit and perhaps even get a bit more descriptive, i'm only saying that cause it was a bit short.
anyway i hope you update this and if you're still looking for some one to help you proof read send me a email
11/1/2006 c1 26Ozzallos
It's a tad rough. Need some work on the grammar and defintely a proof reader if you can manage one. Still, the setup was intriguing enough to stick around and see where you take this one.
[x] Add story to my Story Alert list
26OzzallosIt's a tad rough. Need some work on the grammar and defintely a proof reader if you can manage one. Still, the setup was intriguing enough to stick around and see where you take this one.
[x] Add story to my Story Alert list
12/26/2005 c1 3Strawberry Pepper
interesting start... by the way, i think you meant 'death' not 'dearth' (whatever that is...) when ranma introduced herself to hotaru.
well, i would love to see more.
till next...
3Strawberry Pepperinteresting start... by the way, i think you meant 'death' not 'dearth' (whatever that is...) when ranma introduced herself to hotaru.
well, i would love to see more.
till next...
10/17/2005 c1 115dogbertcarroll
You need to get a beta to go over your work before
posting it. Technical fouls are all over the place.
Well enough about that.
I liked reading it. I'd say you're off to a good start.
May want to tone down the fanatical hatred of the
fiancées tho'. It weakens the story. Finding a way to
move them out of the fic without vilifying them is
difficult but necessary.
115dogbertcarrollYou need to get a beta to go over your work before
posting it. Technical fouls are all over the place.
Well enough about that.
I liked reading it. I'd say you're off to a good start.
May want to tone down the fanatical hatred of the
fiancées tho'. It weakens the story. Finding a way to
move them out of the fic without vilifying them is
difficult but necessary.
10/17/2005 c1 Reaper2040
Great start.
Always like seeing a new Ranma 1/2 and Sailor Moon crossover. Plus a Ranma and Hotaru pairing is never being written enough, and like the idea of the first chapter. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE smash Akane +or fiances+ and Genma.
Great start.
Always like seeing a new Ranma 1/2 and Sailor Moon crossover. Plus a Ranma and Hotaru pairing is never being written enough, and like the idea of the first chapter. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE smash Akane +or fiances+ and Genma.
10/15/2005 c1 MingShun
Oh neat, Ranma and Hotaru is a great pairing. However...Ranma as a sailor scout got boring after a while. Hnn...what can you do to make it more interesting?
Oh neat, Ranma and Hotaru is a great pairing. However...Ranma as a sailor scout got boring after a while. Hnn...what can you do to make it more interesting?
10/15/2005 c1 A.Nonymous
Ack... I've just got to say it. It's Costume, not Custom.
As to why ALL crossovers put Ranma in the Silver Millennium as a girl...well, just look at flower-boy and you'll figure it out. There WERE NO MEN in the Silver Millennium...why do you think they fought the war, hm? If Ranma had been a "guy" in the Silver Millennium he'd be tossing flowers at Saffron and...well...be dead.
I've always pictured Ranma in the Crystal Tokyo Underground... fighting against "Queen Serenity" and her mind-controlled zombies of Utopia.
Ack... I've just got to say it. It's Costume, not Custom.
As to why ALL crossovers put Ranma in the Silver Millennium as a girl...well, just look at flower-boy and you'll figure it out. There WERE NO MEN in the Silver Millennium...why do you think they fought the war, hm? If Ranma had been a "guy" in the Silver Millennium he'd be tossing flowers at Saffron and...well...be dead.
I've always pictured Ranma in the Crystal Tokyo Underground... fighting against "Queen Serenity" and her mind-controlled zombies of Utopia.