for Akumu12/30/2013 c1 
21CDR. Grae
the love of frag- THIS IS ONE COOL STORY! It almost made me bawl my eyes out! T_T THE HELL?! How can you write so awesomely?!
At the start of the story, it seems that Donnie was the one she was with. However, when I got to the sentence 'he had dropped by for a visit at the end of his nightly patrol', I was starting to think it was Raph. I mean, who else would have a nightly patrol? Leo maybe, but Don and Mike? Nah. they would most likely just stay in the lair. It was Raph who was fond of nightly patrols. And the way he speaks... the language and the curse (yes, I believe that 'holy christ!' was a curse) I only know was suiting for Raph to say, was what also set me off into believing it was him. I don't know, it was a big mystery to all of the readers. Can you please tell me who it really was?
PS please update 'Fade'! I was addicted to the story and I couldn't handle the cliffhanger!
21CDR. Graethe love of frag- THIS IS ONE COOL STORY! It almost made me bawl my eyes out! T_T THE HELL?! How can you write so awesomely?!
At the start of the story, it seems that Donnie was the one she was with. However, when I got to the sentence 'he had dropped by for a visit at the end of his nightly patrol', I was starting to think it was Raph. I mean, who else would have a nightly patrol? Leo maybe, but Don and Mike? Nah. they would most likely just stay in the lair. It was Raph who was fond of nightly patrols. And the way he speaks... the language and the curse (yes, I believe that 'holy christ!' was a curse) I only know was suiting for Raph to say, was what also set me off into believing it was him. I don't know, it was a big mystery to all of the readers. Can you please tell me who it really was?
PS please update 'Fade'! I was addicted to the story and I couldn't handle the cliffhanger!
8/21/2013 c1 cantbesaved
Wow girl, you can write! I literally cried my eyeballs out. But what I don't get is why did April die? I understand the blindness, but the seizure and death? Could you explain that to us, maybe?
Wow girl, you can write! I literally cried my eyeballs out. But what I don't get is why did April die? I understand the blindness, but the seizure and death? Could you explain that to us, maybe?
6/11/2013 c1 3Strawberryladybug
*HEAVING SOBS*
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
I hate it so much.
Absolutely Awesome Writing.
:)
3Strawberryladybug*HEAVING SOBS*
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
I hate it so much.
Absolutely Awesome Writing.
:)
4/14/2013 c1 3Elysium-Rose-Petals
God, that was amazing. The detail was descriptive and *drool* I tried to figure out on my own who the turtle with her was, and I figured it was Donnie, but the language the turtle used like "gonna" didn't sound like typical Donnie things, unless he talks like that when he's fatigued. So my questions for you, which turtle was with our dear April, and what exactly happened to cause a seizure, blindness and death? I get the glass would probably blind her, but I'm not sure exactly what happened, so please explain. This was such an amazing story. :3
3Elysium-Rose-PetalsGod, that was amazing. The detail was descriptive and *drool* I tried to figure out on my own who the turtle with her was, and I figured it was Donnie, but the language the turtle used like "gonna" didn't sound like typical Donnie things, unless he talks like that when he's fatigued. So my questions for you, which turtle was with our dear April, and what exactly happened to cause a seizure, blindness and death? I get the glass would probably blind her, but I'm not sure exactly what happened, so please explain. This was such an amazing story. :3
1/25/2013 c1 106Scotia Daniel
Nice...but I couldn't tell which turtle this was. I'm guessing Don cause of his crush on April...but you kept using "he." Try using the turtle's name. It'd help us as the audience who the heck you're talking about.
106Scotia DanielNice...but I couldn't tell which turtle this was. I'm guessing Don cause of his crush on April...but you kept using "he." Try using the turtle's name. It'd help us as the audience who the heck you're talking about.
12/7/2009 c1 88StarryFeathers
"sniff"...I...this was really good...made me cry.
-Lon
ps. when will you be updating "Fade"?
88StarryFeathers"sniff"...I...this was really good...made me cry.
-Lon
ps. when will you be updating "Fade"?
11/10/2009 c1 Storm
Wonderful! Tragedy, angst...but I loved how you wrote it!
I´d like to read more...
Just...perfect!
Wonderful! Tragedy, angst...but I loved how you wrote it!
I´d like to read more...
Just...perfect!
9/28/2008 c1 7Rosalind du Coudray
That was great! Just out of curiosity... What posessed you to title it, 'Akumu?' By the way, which turtle was with April?
7Rosalind du CoudrayThat was great! Just out of curiosity... What posessed you to title it, 'Akumu?' By the way, which turtle was with April?
6/30/2008 c1 1isimplylovett
Wow, I really like your writing style. You've really hit a mark with one of my favorite genres, angst-romance. I hope you have plans for some more stories of this nature, maybe even chapter stories. Will you be writing more?
1isimplylovettWow, I really like your writing style. You've really hit a mark with one of my favorite genres, angst-romance. I hope you have plans for some more stories of this nature, maybe even chapter stories. Will you be writing more?
12/5/2007 c1 117princessebee
Ya know... I REALLY thought I had reviewed this... huh... well, I think the reason I didn't was cos I got to the end and was so emotionally traumatised I had to hit the back button quickly!
Anyway... to do my duty as I should've a long time ago... wow, this story. Wow. What makes it exceptional is the build-up. It's incredible. It's just... agonising the way April is observing what's happening to her, as though from a distance. The incredibly masterful, gut-wrenching, suspensful escalation... we have a sense of what is happening, but her comparative disassociation from it, her almost-indifference makes it all the more awful and agonising to "watch". It's like HOW CAN YOU DO THIS TO US AND BE SO DAMN CASUAL ABOUT IT!
It's like a train wreck. Just can't look away, but want to. You can't be doing this to us, no please stop! But oh god, how beautifully and mesmerisingly you do it.
I did go through a couple of times but can't find anything that identifies which Turtle it is, so unelss I have missed something this is FANTASTIC technique, it really illustrates April's importance to the turtles as a whole. Her observations of his agony further exemplifies this and her comment that she has never felt so safe... DIES. I'm a fangirl of the whole Turtles/April relationship, that they are all so critically important to each other and this story just gets it, so simply and so beautifully.
I could gush all day about this one... it's quite remarkable. Tears in my eyes!
117princessebeeYa know... I REALLY thought I had reviewed this... huh... well, I think the reason I didn't was cos I got to the end and was so emotionally traumatised I had to hit the back button quickly!
Anyway... to do my duty as I should've a long time ago... wow, this story. Wow. What makes it exceptional is the build-up. It's incredible. It's just... agonising the way April is observing what's happening to her, as though from a distance. The incredibly masterful, gut-wrenching, suspensful escalation... we have a sense of what is happening, but her comparative disassociation from it, her almost-indifference makes it all the more awful and agonising to "watch". It's like HOW CAN YOU DO THIS TO US AND BE SO DAMN CASUAL ABOUT IT!
It's like a train wreck. Just can't look away, but want to. You can't be doing this to us, no please stop! But oh god, how beautifully and mesmerisingly you do it.
I did go through a couple of times but can't find anything that identifies which Turtle it is, so unelss I have missed something this is FANTASTIC technique, it really illustrates April's importance to the turtles as a whole. Her observations of his agony further exemplifies this and her comment that she has never felt so safe... DIES. I'm a fangirl of the whole Turtles/April relationship, that they are all so critically important to each other and this story just gets it, so simply and so beautifully.
I could gush all day about this one... it's quite remarkable. Tears in my eyes!
7/12/2007 c1 37ladycordelia17
Poor April. ;_;
Who was her rescuer, anyway? Most people seem to be saying it was Donatello...
37ladycordelia17Poor April. ;_;
Who was her rescuer, anyway? Most people seem to be saying it was Donatello...
6/23/2007 c1 Storm
Wonderful! I´d like to read more.
Wonderful! I´d like to read more.