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12/20/2005 c7 Megan Consoer
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
11/18/2005 c6 aki tari nai
This story is... original. That's all I can say. Who knew Robin was a stoner?

I think you've done a nice job, but you have been making the same errors throughout the story; Misspellings and sentence fragments. For example: "Amon murmered. Remembering the events earlier that day." If anything, I'd throw a comma in there instead of a period. It really does look better.

I'm glad that you have a beta, even if he didn't come out until the seventh chapter. They can really help you out; typo fixes, for example.

Usually, OCs are useless and annoying, but I don't think of Lenore and co. like that. You've written them in well. Surprisingly, no matter how OOC the idea of Amon or Robin lighting up a bong is, they aren't at all. Robin seems Robin-like, and Amon seems... stoic and stoned. Kind of.

You're also pretty good with lemons. Very good. Have you written them before, or was that your first?

I think, that if you could work on writing your sentences out more smoothly, and those misspellings, that you could have a great story. Good job. :D
11/3/2005 c5 Megan Consoer
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
10/27/2005 c5 LynGreenTea
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10/23/2005 c4 LynGreenTea
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