for Phantom Of The Opera: The Real Story1/18/2015 c21 
6ClaryF
This was an amazing story. I love how Erik and Kim didn't immediately get the happy ending but had to suffer a lot before they realised how much they meant to one another.
6ClaryFThis was an amazing story. I love how Erik and Kim didn't immediately get the happy ending but had to suffer a lot before they realised how much they meant to one another.
1/16/2013 c1 melton
well it first started out with me and my husband and then the phantom went and took me away from him and now i am lock in a basment with him -phantom
well it first started out with me and my husband and then the phantom went and took me away from him and now i am lock in a basment with him -phantom
9/9/2012 c7 Cindy
Lol funny end to the chapter! Can't wait to see what happens at the prom!
Lol funny end to the chapter! Can't wait to see what happens at the prom!
9/9/2012 c5 Cindy
I liked her reaction to seeing Erik in his tux. It's so fun that they're going to prom together. This chapter was a bit confusing for me. It was difficult at times to distinguish who was speaking and it seemed odd to me that they told Connie's father Erik was the "opera ghost" and he was like oh, okay... it seems out of character for Erik to be so willing to go out in public like this and reveal his secrets...
I liked her reaction to seeing Erik in his tux. It's so fun that they're going to prom together. This chapter was a bit confusing for me. It was difficult at times to distinguish who was speaking and it seemed odd to me that they told Connie's father Erik was the "opera ghost" and he was like oh, okay... it seems out of character for Erik to be so willing to go out in public like this and reveal his secrets...
9/9/2012 c4 Cindy
I love her reaction to seeing his face. The disfigurement simply didn't matter. That's how it should be. The only thing that took me a little out of the moment was that you mentioned his eyes were crystal blue but in a previous chapter you said they were green. Other than this it was wonderful.
I love her reaction to seeing his face. The disfigurement simply didn't matter. That's how it should be. The only thing that took me a little out of the moment was that you mentioned his eyes were crystal blue but in a previous chapter you said they were green. Other than this it was wonderful.
9/9/2012 c3 Cindy
Very Sad and touching story of her mothers death. I like the pace that this story is moving at and that we don't have to wait forever for the relationship to start between her and Erik or to find out important details of the past.
Very Sad and touching story of her mothers death. I like the pace that this story is moving at and that we don't have to wait forever for the relationship to start between her and Erik or to find out important details of the past.
9/9/2012 c2 Cindy
Wow, the description of their first kiss and feelings towards each other were electrifying. I really felt like I was there. Great writing!
Wow, the description of their first kiss and feelings towards each other were electrifying. I really felt like I was there. Great writing!
9/9/2012 c1 Cindy
Very intriguing and interesting story. I like the idea of Erik being with someone other than Christine. It also is very fun to imagine them in current times and young as well! I really enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading the next! Thank you!
Very intriguing and interesting story. I like the idea of Erik being with someone other than Christine. It also is very fun to imagine them in current times and young as well! I really enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading the next! Thank you!
8/18/2011 c22 E.Cullen1901
ohmygosh! that was so sweet and sad and beautiful and romantic! i loved every chapter:)
ohmygosh! that was so sweet and sad and beautiful and romantic! i loved every chapter:)
1/11/2008 c7 LetYourFantasiesUnwind
whoa two years have passed in 7 chapters? When did THAT happen? You have to let your readers in on the passage of time. The way the story was written it seemed as though only days or weeks were passing. Too fast my dear.
whoa two years have passed in 7 chapters? When did THAT happen? You have to let your readers in on the passage of time. The way the story was written it seemed as though only days or weeks were passing. Too fast my dear.
1/10/2008 c4 LetYourFantasiesUnwind
You leave out a lot of description. A story should not be TOLD per say. It should be communicated through FEELING. If the reader doesn't FEEL intense passionate joy/lust/sorrow/hate/peace etc. when the emotions come up in the story, then they are no more than words on paper.
Don't misunderstand, you have a wonderful story here, it just lacks the connection of emotion from words to reader. Part of this is because so much happens so quickly, (the meeting, the trust, the unveiling of the mask) the things that should be climaxes in the plotline are downplayed almost to be overlooked. Draw the events out, linger on each breath, every slight touch that gives you a spark heartbeat, describe the flush of heat, the burning of tears, the joining of hearts graphically.
When a writer truly succeeds in tying together all these elements into the story, the reader actually experiences the emotion being described in the story. They laugh, cry, sigh, or pant. Lol!
You leave out a lot of description. A story should not be TOLD per say. It should be communicated through FEELING. If the reader doesn't FEEL intense passionate joy/lust/sorrow/hate/peace etc. when the emotions come up in the story, then they are no more than words on paper.
Don't misunderstand, you have a wonderful story here, it just lacks the connection of emotion from words to reader. Part of this is because so much happens so quickly, (the meeting, the trust, the unveiling of the mask) the things that should be climaxes in the plotline are downplayed almost to be overlooked. Draw the events out, linger on each breath, every slight touch that gives you a spark heartbeat, describe the flush of heat, the burning of tears, the joining of hearts graphically.
When a writer truly succeeds in tying together all these elements into the story, the reader actually experiences the emotion being described in the story. They laugh, cry, sigh, or pant. Lol!
8/12/2006 c1 montaquecat
nice start. got my attention. (attention always peaks when erik is in first few chapters.) how old is erik? we know kimberlee is 16. thx debra
nice start. got my attention. (attention always peaks when erik is in first few chapters.) how old is erik? we know kimberlee is 16. thx debra
6/15/2006 c2 montaquecat
madame giry should just let kimberlee and erik do what they want. so what that her dayy wants her to proably hook up with raoul or that type of person. i just want erik to be happy. dd
madame giry should just let kimberlee and erik do what they want. so what that her dayy wants her to proably hook up with raoul or that type of person. i just want erik to be happy. dd