for Black Coffee3/1/2007 c1 
4InkandPaper
This was brilliant! Really well written, and the (hehe) 'Ravenpuff' has a very clear personality even though she only exists for ... erm ... *counts quickly* - thirteen paragraphs!
But you mean it wasn't DEFINITELY about Tom Riddle? It seemed to fit him pefectly! Oh and I certainly did enjoy the 'coffeeTR analogies' *grins*
Ah, unrequited love...or unrequited caffeine addiction (not sure it's quite so romantic, but hey) how heartbreaking *sighs dramatically* But really, Mr Riddle, how unfeeling you are! To lock eyes and melt her heart then go off and chat up the Black girl...pfft.
I'll stop my random rambling now :) and sum it up in two words and lots of exclamation marks - great job!
4InkandPaperThis was brilliant! Really well written, and the (hehe) 'Ravenpuff' has a very clear personality even though she only exists for ... erm ... *counts quickly* - thirteen paragraphs!
But you mean it wasn't DEFINITELY about Tom Riddle? It seemed to fit him pefectly! Oh and I certainly did enjoy the 'coffeeTR analogies' *grins*
Ah, unrequited love...or unrequited caffeine addiction (not sure it's quite so romantic, but hey) how heartbreaking *sighs dramatically* But really, Mr Riddle, how unfeeling you are! To lock eyes and melt her heart then go off and chat up the Black girl...pfft.
I'll stop my random rambling now :) and sum it up in two words and lots of exclamation marks - great job!
8/20/2006 c1 joey the ripper
awesome style... i like coffee i lik TR but that's a different story...
well actually it's my random fan fic that i'm too embaressed to put on the site.
awesome style... i like coffee i lik TR but that's a different story...
well actually it's my random fan fic that i'm too embaressed to put on the site.
5/21/2006 c1 37MidnightBlue88
This was an interesting perspective, one that I've never seen before. I enjoyed the coffee metaphor, and the climax of the story, when he just looked at her, was well done. Good one-shot.
37MidnightBlue88This was an interesting perspective, one that I've never seen before. I enjoyed the coffee metaphor, and the climax of the story, when he just looked at her, was well done. Good one-shot.
5/20/2006 c1 5lnbear2004
o, this is really good. It's a little poetic too. I guess if you spend that much time thinking about someone you'll be a bit poetic/ insane sounding. I just can't figure out who the girl is... Maybe i haven't actually read HP recently and i didn't pick up on some clue you gave about her...
5lnbear2004o, this is really good. It's a little poetic too. I guess if you spend that much time thinking about someone you'll be a bit poetic/ insane sounding. I just can't figure out who the girl is... Maybe i haven't actually read HP recently and i didn't pick up on some clue you gave about her...
12/20/2005 c1 Will
Dunno if you've abandoned your account ( I kind of have) but I was cruising around looking for quality writing on Tom Riddle- let's face it, he's a heavy character to work with- and I sifted through about 20 before I struck your fic. It's beautiful and you clearly have a writer's flair, thanks for "capturing the essence" as they say
Dunno if you've abandoned your account ( I kind of have) but I was cruising around looking for quality writing on Tom Riddle- let's face it, he's a heavy character to work with- and I sifted through about 20 before I struck your fic. It's beautiful and you clearly have a writer's flair, thanks for "capturing the essence" as they say
12/14/2005 c1 2Deb-lil
Wow, Kwob...I'm...shocked. (And yes, I'm reverting to Kwob because I see QoB written at the bottom of the story). This is such a powerful story. Wellwritten, almost melodic...hm, I don't use the word melodic a lot because I always think of melons..but your story was definately melodic.
The poor "ravenpuff" has quite an intense cruse, doesn't she? It was pretty sweet how hers and tom's eyes locked that one time. Aww. But then, being Tom, he inadvertanly crushed her dreams by talking to the other girl. Tom! Blast you and your little pointy nose!
Whew. As the authoress Cap'n Scoff once said to me, "put down the chainsaw Deb-lil"...and I believe I used that one on Bagge, I can't remember.
Alright, enough of my musings as you're probably getting sick of 'em. Hell, you might have already clicked the exit box, in which case you are no longer reafding this review...therefore, I should cease to type, but I'm not going to.
I liked the way the story followed the girl's routine by time. For someone who isn't much of a routine person, you did one helluva job with this awesome story!
Finally, I liked how the girl in it was of the OCish variety. And if it was a self-insert, who's gonna know? I won't. As an OC, the story is more unique..at least it wasn't moaning myrtle ah! However, when I first started reading this, I thought, "Hu-wuh? Who is this girl?" Needless to say, I wasn't feeling very articulate. Now I know she's a Ravenpuff, or more amusingly still...a Huffleclaw.
Huffleclaw...damn, that sounds stupid.
Signing off,
~Deb-lil
2Deb-lilWow, Kwob...I'm...shocked. (And yes, I'm reverting to Kwob because I see QoB written at the bottom of the story). This is such a powerful story. Wellwritten, almost melodic...hm, I don't use the word melodic a lot because I always think of melons..but your story was definately melodic.
The poor "ravenpuff" has quite an intense cruse, doesn't she? It was pretty sweet how hers and tom's eyes locked that one time. Aww. But then, being Tom, he inadvertanly crushed her dreams by talking to the other girl. Tom! Blast you and your little pointy nose!
Whew. As the authoress Cap'n Scoff once said to me, "put down the chainsaw Deb-lil"...and I believe I used that one on Bagge, I can't remember.
Alright, enough of my musings as you're probably getting sick of 'em. Hell, you might have already clicked the exit box, in which case you are no longer reafding this review...therefore, I should cease to type, but I'm not going to.
I liked the way the story followed the girl's routine by time. For someone who isn't much of a routine person, you did one helluva job with this awesome story!
Finally, I liked how the girl in it was of the OCish variety. And if it was a self-insert, who's gonna know? I won't. As an OC, the story is more unique..at least it wasn't moaning myrtle ah! However, when I first started reading this, I thought, "Hu-wuh? Who is this girl?" Needless to say, I wasn't feeling very articulate. Now I know she's a Ravenpuff, or more amusingly still...a Huffleclaw.
Huffleclaw...damn, that sounds stupid.
Signing off,
~Deb-lil
12/8/2005 c1 97Bagge
I enjoy this fic a lot. The calm resigned rituals of this girl. She knows that she will never reach Tom, but she is content with those incredibly small glimpses in the great hall. Black coffee and Tom Riddle.
The climax of the story, the few seconds of a looking into each others eyes, was masterly written. As an event it was next to nothing, but to this girl it was everything. It was what she had hoped for, dreamt about, feared and what finally comfirmed that her cause what a hopeless one. "then he looked away, breaking the connection and her heart."
This fic is short, but somehow it feels longer. It makes me want to read it again and again (something I have done) to make sure I have not missed anything.
Ah, and of course the last sentence "...leaving her now cold cup of coffee behind her on the table." - there is really nothing more to say about it. Really, really good fic. Keep it up!
97BaggeI enjoy this fic a lot. The calm resigned rituals of this girl. She knows that she will never reach Tom, but she is content with those incredibly small glimpses in the great hall. Black coffee and Tom Riddle.
The climax of the story, the few seconds of a looking into each others eyes, was masterly written. As an event it was next to nothing, but to this girl it was everything. It was what she had hoped for, dreamt about, feared and what finally comfirmed that her cause what a hopeless one. "then he looked away, breaking the connection and her heart."
This fic is short, but somehow it feels longer. It makes me want to read it again and again (something I have done) to make sure I have not missed anything.
Ah, and of course the last sentence "...leaving her now cold cup of coffee behind her on the table." - there is really nothing more to say about it. Really, really good fic. Keep it up!
12/5/2005 c1 benjaminbeep
it s half nice half boring but whic story u wrote first that i reviewed. i would give u 3/5 .bye the way tom was fair infact vary fair
it s half nice half boring but whic story u wrote first that i reviewed. i would give u 3/5 .bye the way tom was fair infact vary fair
12/4/2005 c1 7sebfish
I really liked this story. Actually, at first I thought this fic was about Ginny, although I realized it wouldn't work on the time continuum. Your character kind of reminded me of myself, although I'd never become obsessed over any one person, because personally I don't think that sort of thing is healthy. A very good story though.
7sebfishI really liked this story. Actually, at first I thought this fic was about Ginny, although I realized it wouldn't work on the time continuum. Your character kind of reminded me of myself, although I'd never become obsessed over any one person, because personally I don't think that sort of thing is healthy. A very good story though.
12/3/2005 c1 10harrypottermagic32
Nicely written. I liked it. Tom Riddle is a very interesting character and I always enjoy reading things about him, good job.
10harrypottermagic32Nicely written. I liked it. Tom Riddle is a very interesting character and I always enjoy reading things about him, good job.
12/3/2005 c1 6Ardentine
Ah, very nice; you make it like I can actually feel her pain. Freaky, I'm getting goosebumps!
6ArdentineAh, very nice; you make it like I can actually feel her pain. Freaky, I'm getting goosebumps!
12/3/2005 c1 finalfantasy
this fic was EXELLENT! extremely well written, wonderful anaologie *the whole cofee/riddle thing lool( i just wish it weren't a one shot :( but its always up 2 u in the end ;) i really hope 2 read more from you, ur a truly talented writer ::applause::
this fic was EXELLENT! extremely well written, wonderful anaologie *the whole cofee/riddle thing lool( i just wish it weren't a one shot :( but its always up 2 u in the end ;) i really hope 2 read more from you, ur a truly talented writer ::applause::