for Nightmare12/9/2005 c1 
5Perentie Fan
Quite frankly I think it could have been a good deal longer, unless it was meant to be some kind of prologue.
Secondly, Starfire and Robin seemed quite out of character. Starfire knows that Silkie explodes after morphing and that it doesn't harm him. She is also the last person on Earth to blame anyone for anything without hearing an explanation. Heck when BB pranked her in "Forces of Nature" her first assumption was that SHE had done something wrong and was being punished for it.
And while Robin is certainly likely to take Starfire's side in most things, he also knows Raven better than anyone (note I am for the BB/Raven pairing, but one has to admit to Raven and Robin's special bond) and it would take quite a bit for him to even think of turning on Raven like that. He didn't even accuse her after she nearly killed Dr. Light, only making sure that she stopped.
Then there's Cyborg, who normally would be a voice of reason in these things, doing almost nothing...
I suggest you rethink the plot to make it more believable. I know you want to set up a romance for BB and Raven, but I don't like it when stories sacrifice the rest of the characters for it.
5Perentie FanQuite frankly I think it could have been a good deal longer, unless it was meant to be some kind of prologue.
Secondly, Starfire and Robin seemed quite out of character. Starfire knows that Silkie explodes after morphing and that it doesn't harm him. She is also the last person on Earth to blame anyone for anything without hearing an explanation. Heck when BB pranked her in "Forces of Nature" her first assumption was that SHE had done something wrong and was being punished for it.
And while Robin is certainly likely to take Starfire's side in most things, he also knows Raven better than anyone (note I am for the BB/Raven pairing, but one has to admit to Raven and Robin's special bond) and it would take quite a bit for him to even think of turning on Raven like that. He didn't even accuse her after she nearly killed Dr. Light, only making sure that she stopped.
Then there's Cyborg, who normally would be a voice of reason in these things, doing almost nothing...
I suggest you rethink the plot to make it more believable. I know you want to set up a romance for BB and Raven, but I don't like it when stories sacrifice the rest of the characters for it.
12/9/2005 c1 2Malaysianprimeminister
oh Raven versus Starfire i think you did pretty well Starfire overreacted for silkie and robin took her side but i think cy would have spoken a little more for Rae keep going please want to see where you take it from here (please don't make Rae runaway it's such a cop out)
2Malaysianprimeministeroh Raven versus Starfire i think you did pretty well Starfire overreacted for silkie and robin took her side but i think cy would have spoken a little more for Rae keep going please want to see where you take it from here (please don't make Rae runaway it's such a cop out)