for Nightmare3/31/2008 c30 countryvamp
this is a very good story, what about slade? i am looking forward to reading more, this is a very adicting story
this is a very good story, what about slade? i am looking forward to reading more, this is a very adicting story
3/27/2008 c30 
15Agent of the Divine One
Woo! That was intense! And it is good to see that there is such joy surrounding the baby's birth.
But Slade is sure to know of this somehow. And then it will come time for action.
15Agent of the Divine OneWoo! That was intense! And it is good to see that there is such joy surrounding the baby's birth.
But Slade is sure to know of this somehow. And then it will come time for action.
12/13/2007 c29 khakfsdukgd
Dunno about you guys but I'm getting tired of Raven and Beastboy arguing and all the cheesy mushy apologetic bull they constantly spew out. The parts of this story I like are when Beastboy isn't in it. I seriously hope that if you do plan on continuing this that you kill him off once and for all. Just how many times are you going to make him "break his promise" anyways? It's getting really old. Make Raven cut herself some more that's always fun. Do SOMETHING interesting. Nothing like waiting a few months for a chapter in which nothing important happens. Cut out the BS and the filler and start moving the plot along please. If you're going to put in a bunch of useless filler chapters at least update more. And don't reply to this review because I won't answer. It's in your best interest to spice this %#^& up.
Dunno about you guys but I'm getting tired of Raven and Beastboy arguing and all the cheesy mushy apologetic bull they constantly spew out. The parts of this story I like are when Beastboy isn't in it. I seriously hope that if you do plan on continuing this that you kill him off once and for all. Just how many times are you going to make him "break his promise" anyways? It's getting really old. Make Raven cut herself some more that's always fun. Do SOMETHING interesting. Nothing like waiting a few months for a chapter in which nothing important happens. Cut out the BS and the filler and start moving the plot along please. If you're going to put in a bunch of useless filler chapters at least update more. And don't reply to this review because I won't answer. It's in your best interest to spice this %#^& up.
10/22/2007 c29 hamsterlover
PLEASE MAKE MORE P.U (PLEASE UPDATE)
PLEASE MAKE MORE P.U (PLEASE UPDATE)
9/5/2007 c29 Agent of the Divine One
Another bump and making up. Just another day in the life of Beast Boy and Raven. :D
Another bump and making up. Just another day in the life of Beast Boy and Raven. :D
7/17/2007 c28 vindr
gah i want more! even though it is a little out of character for raven it is good...
gah i want more! even though it is a little out of character for raven it is good...
4/21/2007 c8 amanda soto
wow, i can't belive got raped in this chapter and all the other chapters were great too. i am a BIG fan of raven and beast boy paring the are the best couple in teen titans to me
wow, i can't belive got raped in this chapter and all the other chapters were great too. i am a BIG fan of raven and beast boy paring the are the best couple in teen titans to me
4/5/2007 c28 5cratbro
Hmm... as noted by others, the grammar in this piece needs work. The structure was not clear and the words could have flowed better. When BB was talking to Serene about how he got burned, he mentioned Mumbo Jumbo and that he was forced to hop rings, which would be fine if Serene knew who Mumbo Jumbo was. But, considering the many similar things you showed that she didn't know, we can't assume that.
As far as the structure and flow, I would like to go into more detail about this chapter:
A good amount of the dialog, especially when Raven was involved, was very jerky. To put it another way, think of a story as something built with components, and you can use either generic pre-fabricated parts that were not built to fit exactly, or you can pour the concrete yourself and make each piece fit and support its neighbors. You used a lot of pre-fab parts here.
5cratbroHmm... as noted by others, the grammar in this piece needs work. The structure was not clear and the words could have flowed better. When BB was talking to Serene about how he got burned, he mentioned Mumbo Jumbo and that he was forced to hop rings, which would be fine if Serene knew who Mumbo Jumbo was. But, considering the many similar things you showed that she didn't know, we can't assume that.
As far as the structure and flow, I would like to go into more detail about this chapter:
A good amount of the dialog, especially when Raven was involved, was very jerky. To put it another way, think of a story as something built with components, and you can use either generic pre-fabricated parts that were not built to fit exactly, or you can pour the concrete yourself and make each piece fit and support its neighbors. You used a lot of pre-fab parts here.
4/5/2007 c28 15Agent of the Divine One
I do hope that Raven was being playful when she smacked him. :)
Cool. I look forward to what you have in mind for the next chapter. :)
15Agent of the Divine OneI do hope that Raven was being playful when she smacked him. :)
Cool. I look forward to what you have in mind for the next chapter. :)
4/5/2007 c28 58beautifulpurpleflame
Hmm... I tried to like this chapter, but I kept getting distracted and brought out of the story by a few things. Raven is very OC, Beast Boy is using very big words, and apparently everyone in the Titan's world uses perfect grammar. As an example, no one says "it's" everyone says "it is". Dang, this is coming off too harsh. I really just wanted to point these things out, that's all. Anyway, the chapter didn't work for me, personally. Good luck on the next one! ^_^
-beautifulpurpleflame
58beautifulpurpleflameHmm... I tried to like this chapter, but I kept getting distracted and brought out of the story by a few things. Raven is very OC, Beast Boy is using very big words, and apparently everyone in the Titan's world uses perfect grammar. As an example, no one says "it's" everyone says "it is". Dang, this is coming off too harsh. I really just wanted to point these things out, that's all. Anyway, the chapter didn't work for me, personally. Good luck on the next one! ^_^
-beautifulpurpleflame