for Nightmare3/24/2007 c27 
20BWBeeDubs
aww...that was so sweet.No problems what so ever with the writing that i saw in this chapter at all.very well done!please update soon!
20BWBeeDubsaww...that was so sweet.No problems what so ever with the writing that i saw in this chapter at all.very well done!please update soon!
3/22/2007 c27 15Agent of the Divine One
I thought it was good to get some insight into why Serene seemed so uptight.
The only mystery=ies that remain are "When will Serene and Edward be together?" And "Will Beast Boy ever finish those lines?" :)
Post when you can. :)
15Agent of the Divine OneI thought it was good to get some insight into why Serene seemed so uptight.
The only mystery=ies that remain are "When will Serene and Edward be together?" And "Will Beast Boy ever finish those lines?" :)
Post when you can. :)
3/13/2007 c26 Agent of the Divine One
The length is fine. The update gap is rather large however. But in the end just do what you can and I'll be waiting. :)
The length is fine. The update gap is rather large however. But in the end just do what you can and I'll be waiting. :)
3/11/2007 c26 20BWBeeDubs
dude...totally and sweet awesomeness.everything seems fine except for a few grammar errors tis all.please update soon!
20BWBeeDubsdude...totally and sweet awesomeness.everything seems fine except for a few grammar errors tis all.please update soon!
3/11/2007 c26 5cratbro
This isn't too "draggy" at all! While all readers like it when an author updates quickly, you should care more about writing a chapter you are satisfied with. After all, we, your readers, aren't doing the hard job of coming up with all these wonderful ideas. Could you explain why midwives have to be virgins in your story? In our world, most midwives are experienced mothers, since that gives them the ability to understand what the mother-to-be is going through. This isn't a criticism, I am just saying it might be a good idea to expand that point. You could say that her 'midwife powers' (psychic scans, etc, like the one she just did on Raven) only function if she is a virgin. Excellent job, keep writing!
5cratbroThis isn't too "draggy" at all! While all readers like it when an author updates quickly, you should care more about writing a chapter you are satisfied with. After all, we, your readers, aren't doing the hard job of coming up with all these wonderful ideas. Could you explain why midwives have to be virgins in your story? In our world, most midwives are experienced mothers, since that gives them the ability to understand what the mother-to-be is going through. This isn't a criticism, I am just saying it might be a good idea to expand that point. You could say that her 'midwife powers' (psychic scans, etc, like the one she just did on Raven) only function if she is a virgin. Excellent job, keep writing!
12/12/2006 c24 15Agent of the Divine One
It's good to see joy return to the Tower after so much time spent in despair and mourning. But there is still the question of what Slade will do in the future. I just hope that the Titans are prepared for the coming storm.
15Agent of the Divine OneIt's good to see joy return to the Tower after so much time spent in despair and mourning. But there is still the question of what Slade will do in the future. I just hope that the Titans are prepared for the coming storm.
10/30/2006 c23 15Agent of the Divine One
Actually, I think that Aqualad meeting a girl should be something that happens after this whole ordeal is over.
It's good to see that there is some hope in the middle of all this mess. I just hope that Slade doesn't snuff it out.
15Agent of the Divine OneActually, I think that Aqualad meeting a girl should be something that happens after this whole ordeal is over.
It's good to see that there is some hope in the middle of all this mess. I just hope that Slade doesn't snuff it out.
10/27/2006 c23 33Moving Mountains
Ah he woke up! He finally woke up! That was such a lovely chapter. I'm glad that they can be together again and that Aqualad has realised that Raven is 'out of his league'. Great work... update soon! x
33Moving MountainsAh he woke up! He finally woke up! That was such a lovely chapter. I'm glad that they can be together again and that Aqualad has realised that Raven is 'out of his league'. Great work... update soon! x
10/25/2006 c23 2Genic
aww sweet chap ...sniff...sniffy...i cant wait to the next one yay
read ya later
2Genicaww sweet chap ...sniff...sniffy...i cant wait to the next one yay
read ya later
10/12/2006 c22 15Agent of the Divine One
TWO WEEKS! You're going to prolong the torture for two weeks!
SIGH, very well, but it better be a good chapter!
15Agent of the Divine OneTWO WEEKS! You're going to prolong the torture for two weeks!
SIGH, very well, but it better be a good chapter!