for Slothful10/4/2006 c1 
11September's Nobara
What an accurate monologue; you covered quite well the aspect of her past mother-hood, and current conflicting emotions; I really like the paragraph on Winry; cute, then dark, and rather sweet. Nice work, there! The only error I see is a misspelled word: "I find it painful to be around the[m], in some peculiar way." Aside from that, this is one of the most well-written works I've read in the FMA category, and the opening sentences were great, as well as the rest of the short story.
All in all, very, very nice work, and a big thanks for posting!
11September's NobaraWhat an accurate monologue; you covered quite well the aspect of her past mother-hood, and current conflicting emotions; I really like the paragraph on Winry; cute, then dark, and rather sweet. Nice work, there! The only error I see is a misspelled word: "I find it painful to be around the[m], in some peculiar way." Aside from that, this is one of the most well-written works I've read in the FMA category, and the opening sentences were great, as well as the rest of the short story.
All in all, very, very nice work, and a big thanks for posting!
2/14/2006 c1 20riversrunthroughme
Hee! Lovely, lovely Sloth thoughts. It's so hard to find a good bit of fiction involving the homunculus who mimics the Elric's mother. I'm glad. You've done a fabulous job here. I loved the line 'insignificant, bothersome, wonderful boys'. It's so very...dead motherly.
20riversrunthroughmeHee! Lovely, lovely Sloth thoughts. It's so hard to find a good bit of fiction involving the homunculus who mimics the Elric's mother. I'm glad. You've done a fabulous job here. I loved the line 'insignificant, bothersome, wonderful boys'. It's so very...dead motherly.
12/16/2005 c1 578Nelja
I like it, especially the last sentence, which is... almost cute, almost funny, but not exactly...
578NeljaI like it, especially the last sentence, which is... almost cute, almost funny, but not exactly...
12/12/2005 c1 82Domenic
Gah, going straight to my favorite stories list.
A really awesome anime Sloth-centric fic, which I find there aren't enough of; hope to see more though.
Definitely keep writing, and perhaps more on Sloth? You have a really good interpretation of her...
82DomenicGah, going straight to my favorite stories list.
A really awesome anime Sloth-centric fic, which I find there aren't enough of; hope to see more though.
Definitely keep writing, and perhaps more on Sloth? You have a really good interpretation of her...
12/12/2005 c1 Otomeza
Yay! First to leave a review. ^^
Nice work. You got Sloth's character down really well. This is better than a few others I've read. I guess you could say Sloth is one of my favorite charcters.
Yay! First to leave a review. ^^
Nice work. You got Sloth's character down really well. This is better than a few others I've read. I guess you could say Sloth is one of my favorite charcters.