for Shy1/23/2006 c1 
5Color Me Gray
Nicely done. You write as though you speak from experience? (Not sure if that is a question or an observation.) Either way, this is a good, solid poetry piece. Nice flow, good tempo, wonderful charecter vantage point. You give us just enough information to keep us hooked, but don't burden the poem with too much explanation (one of my biggest pet peeves is when people overanylize things in poetry)
In sum, good work and please keep writing. I'd love to see what you come up with next.
5Color Me GrayNicely done. You write as though you speak from experience? (Not sure if that is a question or an observation.) Either way, this is a good, solid poetry piece. Nice flow, good tempo, wonderful charecter vantage point. You give us just enough information to keep us hooked, but don't burden the poem with too much explanation (one of my biggest pet peeves is when people overanylize things in poetry)
In sum, good work and please keep writing. I'd love to see what you come up with next.
12/15/2005 c1 2yupinhere
Wow that was really good, I personally loved it. I was surprised to see noone was reviewing, but I figured into about the third verse that people were either being rude or were unfortunate enough to not have read it. I sure wish I could write poetry like you, it really flowed.
2yupinhereWow that was really good, I personally loved it. I was surprised to see noone was reviewing, but I figured into about the third verse that people were either being rude or were unfortunate enough to not have read it. I sure wish I could write poetry like you, it really flowed.