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5/17/2006 c1 Michael
Hey, your story is cool! I haven't actually seen any of the Ring movies yet but I want to so Badly! Anyhoo, keep writing!
Hey, your story is cool! I haven't actually seen any of the Ring movies yet but I want to so Badly! Anyhoo, keep writing!
12/20/2005 c3 
20let.me.cry
wow, I'm very flattered you asked me for your opinion on your ringu fic in person, well not really more like in a PM, but thats close enough right ^^;;, NOTE: This is going to a helpful critism to help you improve in writing, it may sound mean. Sorry about that.
The beginning started off with a load of original charachters, which is unfortunatly very cliche in the Ring/Ringu fandom. Céléna sounds very much like Rachel Keller/Reiko Asakawa (Céléna is a wonderful name by the way) and Aurore is very much like Aidan/Yoichi, being able to communicate Sadako/Samara to Céléna. This was a rocky start. The story also seems to move quickly, there isn't many descriptive scenes or expressing of the charachters emotions. The haunting doesn't show the reader and make the reader feel like they are there but more like they are being told. The introduction of Ryuji Takayama was a very good idea, because a story made up of OCs galore is set up for failure. You were just about to lose me, but adding in charachters(yes I cannot spell that word i'm very sorry VV;;) the readers can directly relate grabs the readers attention better. If you're going to use alot of OCs, you need to descibe their personalities better so the reader can feel as though they understand the charchters. You have the makings of a good story, but you need to throw in some suprises, be a little bit crazier, from what I understand from all I know about Ringu/The Ring every haunting is different, get excited and creative! I have faith in you and this is going somewhere!
~Morgue *let-me-cry*
20let.me.crywow, I'm very flattered you asked me for your opinion on your ringu fic in person, well not really more like in a PM, but thats close enough right ^^;;, NOTE: This is going to a helpful critism to help you improve in writing, it may sound mean. Sorry about that.
The beginning started off with a load of original charachters, which is unfortunatly very cliche in the Ring/Ringu fandom. Céléna sounds very much like Rachel Keller/Reiko Asakawa (Céléna is a wonderful name by the way) and Aurore is very much like Aidan/Yoichi, being able to communicate Sadako/Samara to Céléna. This was a rocky start. The story also seems to move quickly, there isn't many descriptive scenes or expressing of the charachters emotions. The haunting doesn't show the reader and make the reader feel like they are there but more like they are being told. The introduction of Ryuji Takayama was a very good idea, because a story made up of OCs galore is set up for failure. You were just about to lose me, but adding in charachters(yes I cannot spell that word i'm very sorry VV;;) the readers can directly relate grabs the readers attention better. If you're going to use alot of OCs, you need to descibe their personalities better so the reader can feel as though they understand the charchters. You have the makings of a good story, but you need to throw in some suprises, be a little bit crazier, from what I understand from all I know about Ringu/The Ring every haunting is different, get excited and creative! I have faith in you and this is going somewhere!
~Morgue *let-me-cry*