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7/4/2007 c1 1rock climbing DIAMONDZ
interesting... But very short. You should definately make a longer version.
4/26/2006 c1 5Acy Yua
I admire your style. You really managed to capture the feel of the times although I'm not too certain that this story fits in the fairy tale category. I like your setting though. I haven't read too many fics set during the Depression and you seem to have gotten most of your history down well.

However, there are a few shaky bits in your story. First of all, I found it hard to believe that your main character would actually say 'Hey! Hey you!' to call a police officer. Kids back then were taught a little more respect than that. Also, the fact that none of the kids tried to get back to town in those months seems a rather big plot hole.

Overall, I think this story was really well done. I could tell it was an English assignment by the lack of spelling mistakes and the presence of good grammar.*wink* Keep writing!
12/23/2005 c1 31Aedyn Star
aww that a nice story. and i like teh twist on the stories. very ncie!
12/21/2005 c1 82Bittersweet x
A very VERY intersting story. I had a feeling it was Emily from the beginning, but the suspense kept building.. REALY good job on this, keep it up!
12/20/2005 c1 25La'Ruelia
Wow Drew, another good one! I liked it a lot!

Continue on with writing!

~Naomi

(PS: This is a gay review, but I is getting a little tired)

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