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8/15/2007 c1 94LuminousP
Hey! Do you remember me? You reviewed one of my stories a few years ago!

I was looking at some of my old reviews, and when I cam across your name, I decided to read your story!

I like the idea for the plot, but I felt like you should have revealed a little bit mroe for this chapter. I also think that you should use third person POV narration. This would let you get out the thoughts of everyone in the story without having to break up the story with the POV change warning.

Still, I liked it, and I will be putting it on my alert list.
12/22/2005 c1 24Murasahki-chan
Interesting start, looking forward to seeing how you develop this. Good job on the mechanics of grammar, punctuation, and spelling, by the way.

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