for Team 83/18 c1 Rafael Vilas Boas
I know you've said the characters will probably be more OoC as time passes, but you truly, and I mean it, truly encapsulated their personalities.
Hinata specially, it's a pain to write someone so comically shy wich results in everyone just giving up and writing her from slightly to totally OoC as time passes.
But you did amazing, you truly understood their personalities and how to write around it.
I know you put this project aside, but amazing chapter.
Well done.
I know you've said the characters will probably be more OoC as time passes, but you truly, and I mean it, truly encapsulated their personalities.
Hinata specially, it's a pain to write someone so comically shy wich results in everyone just giving up and writing her from slightly to totally OoC as time passes.
But you did amazing, you truly understood their personalities and how to write around it.
I know you put this project aside, but amazing chapter.
Well done.
3/17 c1 Idkwhattoput here sothisisit
This story stopped getting updates a long while ago, and while not completely finished, ended at a satisfying point. Loved this one, very good read!
All the well wishes to the author and whomever was involved, even if they don't come back to it
This story stopped getting updates a long while ago, and while not completely finished, ended at a satisfying point. Loved this one, very good read!
All the well wishes to the author and whomever was involved, even if they don't come back to it
3/17 c1 Seanmc108
Hello! I like your take on if Naruto wasn't on the same team as sakura and Sasuke. I think the story works better when he is on a team with Sasuke as he has something he is always chasing after but I agree that Shino is his true best friend and that teaming up with him would have made naruto a lot happier. I think that your fan fiction would make Hinata and Naruto getting together, in the end, make a lot more sense as I think that, that part in the story was very rushed. I also like that you left Kurenai as the teacher because we never got a lot of information on her but she was an interesting character. Overall, very well done and I look forward to reading the rest!
Hello! I like your take on if Naruto wasn't on the same team as sakura and Sasuke. I think the story works better when he is on a team with Sasuke as he has something he is always chasing after but I agree that Shino is his true best friend and that teaming up with him would have made naruto a lot happier. I think that your fan fiction would make Hinata and Naruto getting together, in the end, make a lot more sense as I think that, that part in the story was very rushed. I also like that you left Kurenai as the teacher because we never got a lot of information on her but she was an interesting character. Overall, very well done and I look forward to reading the rest!
3/17 c1 Sean MC
Hello! I like your take on if Naruto wasn't on the same team as sakura and Sasuke. I think the story works better when he is on a team with Sasuke as he has something he is always chasing after but I agree that Shino is his true best friend and that teaming up with him would have made naruto a lot happier. I think that your fan fiction would make Hinata and Naruto getting together, in the end, make a lot more sense as I think that, that part in the story was very rushed. I also like that you left Kurenai as the teacher because we never got a lot of information on her but she was an interesting character. Overall, very well done and I look forward to reading the next chapters!
Hello! I like your take on if Naruto wasn't on the same team as sakura and Sasuke. I think the story works better when he is on a team with Sasuke as he has something he is always chasing after but I agree that Shino is his true best friend and that teaming up with him would have made naruto a lot happier. I think that your fan fiction would make Hinata and Naruto getting together, in the end, make a lot more sense as I think that, that part in the story was very rushed. I also like that you left Kurenai as the teacher because we never got a lot of information on her but she was an interesting character. Overall, very well done and I look forward to reading the next chapters!
3/13 c2 Uu
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3/9 c14 Albwin
"You were destined to be the Hyuuga failure from the day you were born," "...we all knew the truth, and you haven't changed at all."
He is absolutely right though. Every bit of extra training she did amounted to nothing because the author(god) wanted her fate to be the same as in canon; her job is to get beat up to motivate Naruto, like some kind of perverse emotional support dog.
"You were destined to be the Hyuuga failure from the day you were born," "...we all knew the truth, and you haven't changed at all."
He is absolutely right though. Every bit of extra training she did amounted to nothing because the author(god) wanted her fate to be the same as in canon; her job is to get beat up to motivate Naruto, like some kind of perverse emotional support dog.
3/8 c24 
7Scarlet Azalea
Would really like to know... Are you still updating at this time? I really hope so... I've come back to look at this story a couple of times over the years because the plot and character development have always stood up to time and distance and I'm sure many of us are still invested in finding out what happens.
7Scarlet AzaleaWould really like to know... Are you still updating at this time? I really hope so... I've come back to look at this story a couple of times over the years because the plot and character development have always stood up to time and distance and I'm sure many of us are still invested in finding out what happens.
3/7 c24 Guest
I see this fic hasn't been updated for a while, I hope you're doing well wherever you are!
I love your writing. if you're still continuing this, just know that I'm excited on how the chuunin exam in kumo will turn out!
I see this fic hasn't been updated for a while, I hope you're doing well wherever you are!
I love your writing. if you're still continuing this, just know that I'm excited on how the chuunin exam in kumo will turn out!
2/11 c16 16Luciendar
Not to be rude, but you keep harping on one of the tropes I hate the most. Hiashi being so strong politically for the Hokage to move against. It's just ridiculous. One clan, not even talking about support from Danzo or anything.
I'm kinda hoping Naruto performs an impression of the Green Arrow, from Arrow. Hiruzen has definitely "failed that city," with all of his soft spoken bullshit.
16LuciendarNot to be rude, but you keep harping on one of the tropes I hate the most. Hiashi being so strong politically for the Hokage to move against. It's just ridiculous. One clan, not even talking about support from Danzo or anything.
I'm kinda hoping Naruto performs an impression of the Green Arrow, from Arrow. Hiruzen has definitely "failed that city," with all of his soft spoken bullshit.
2/10 c5 Luciendar
Poor Hinata. Waaaaaah!
I was a bit surprised by Ayame asking if Naruto hurt her. Maybe you intended the question to seem more like, had Naruto gone too far during training. But it came of like, is he abusing you? If that's the case I'd think she'd have been uneasy or sick feeling than angry considering the Ichiraku's relationship with Naruto
Poor Hinata. Waaaaaah!
I was a bit surprised by Ayame asking if Naruto hurt her. Maybe you intended the question to seem more like, had Naruto gone too far during training. But it came of like, is he abusing you? If that's the case I'd think she'd have been uneasy or sick feeling than angry considering the Ichiraku's relationship with Naruto
2/10 c4 Luciendar
That was really cool.
I gotta say, many authors feel the need to add Sasuke or Kiba to keep a bit of angst in the team. They want Naruto to have someone to have conflict with. I've never agreed with this and your story proves it.
That was really cool.
I gotta say, many authors feel the need to add Sasuke or Kiba to keep a bit of angst in the team. They want Naruto to have someone to have conflict with. I've never agreed with this and your story proves it.
2/10 c1 Luciendar
I've always thought Naruto would've been a perfect addition to Kurenai's team. Better even than Kiba. I mean Kiba and Shino serve a very similar purpose.
Naruto's shadow clones bring a whole new potential.
Does Kurenai not know the secret of the shadow clones?
I've always thought Naruto would've been a perfect addition to Kurenai's team. Better even than Kiba. I mean Kiba and Shino serve a very similar purpose.
Naruto's shadow clones bring a whole new potential.
Does Kurenai not know the secret of the shadow clones?
1/28 c20 Guest
I think following up on killing Kurenai is what made this story die.
(It's been 8 years, and even with the glacial update pacing before that it's pretty obviously dead, now.)
Even on a second reading that plot point hits so hard that I imagine it hurt the author to write, enough that continuing this is less enjoyable to write.
I think following up on killing Kurenai is what made this story die.
(It's been 8 years, and even with the glacial update pacing before that it's pretty obviously dead, now.)
Even on a second reading that plot point hits so hard that I imagine it hurt the author to write, enough that continuing this is less enjoyable to write.