for Death, Mercy and the Sea8/1/2008 c1 
79KrisEleven
Wow. I didn't expect this from the summary. It was quite sad, but very well written. I like how you describe the gods, and how they have their little conversation.
The only thing I can say with any critisism at all is that Elsren's dialogue is so repetitive. I understand that he'd be calling to his mother, but you could have cut out a couple of times. Also, using 'um' in written dialogue always seems awakward (maybe only to me).
Good job, overall.
KrisEleven~
79KrisElevenWow. I didn't expect this from the summary. It was quite sad, but very well written. I like how you describe the gods, and how they have their little conversation.
The only thing I can say with any critisism at all is that Elsren's dialogue is so repetitive. I understand that he'd be calling to his mother, but you could have cut out a couple of times. Also, using 'um' in written dialogue always seems awakward (maybe only to me).
Good job, overall.
KrisEleven~
6/7/2006 c1 6Dolphindreamer
It's really good, I loved how you expanded that section of Trickster's Queen. Nice work the thing with the two god's was unique.
~Dolphin Dreamer
6DolphindreamerIt's really good, I loved how you expanded that section of Trickster's Queen. Nice work the thing with the two god's was unique.
~Dolphin Dreamer
3/3/2006 c1 6BrilliantCrescentStar
Interesting idea. Um, apart from that, there's not much else to say about it. Good fic, good writing.
6BrilliantCrescentStarInteresting idea. Um, apart from that, there's not much else to say about it. Good fic, good writing.
1/16/2006 c1 17Madame-S-Butterfly
Poor Elsren. Did he die in the storm? I should go reread TQ... If his death really did happen like that, it would havae been so sweet, at least it would have been peaceful...
17Madame-S-ButterflyPoor Elsren. Did he die in the storm? I should go reread TQ... If his death really did happen like that, it would havae been so sweet, at least it would have been peaceful...
1/15/2006 c1 maker of da flames
hehe i wanna flame someone but urs is good-meanie. elsren is so cute. me and sarah almost cried while we were reading this. lol u writer u
write a story about srah because she thinks u r hot
hehe i wanna flame someone but urs is good-meanie. elsren is so cute. me and sarah almost cried while we were reading this. lol u writer u
write a story about srah because she thinks u r hot
1/14/2006 c1 1Zerrin of the Wind
Wow, very good! i have always loved the version of the goddess as wave walker. You did that very well. Kudos to you!
1Zerrin of the WindWow, very good! i have always loved the version of the goddess as wave walker. You did that very well. Kudos to you!