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8/17/2007 c3 7lordmasterkris
This is good. Got a bit confusing though, hard to follow in some places but I think I got the gist of it.

Chapter 2 was quite dull though, not a lot of description, very basic descriptions of actions at times. Might be an idea to re-write a bit, varying the vocabulary and such.

Overall very good though, I like.
2/24/2006 c1 lordmasterkris
Good POV, good insight into your character's mind, nice reference to your other story. Overall well done.

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