for Silence and the Void6/17/2007 c1 FalseExact
this would be a great story if it was finished, but I enjoyed what was written so far
this would be a great story if it was finished, but I enjoyed what was written so far
4/13/2006 c1 Kou
Are you a native English speaker? Your story was very fragmentary and I could not follow the character motivations. For instance, why would a Sith Lord care about some girl? Why would the Queen immediately give a total stranger that appeared in her throne room a job?
What does Ranma care if Ryoga screws Akane if he hates her enough to make him fall to the dark side?
This was like some rambling stream of consciousness thing.
Are you a native English speaker? Your story was very fragmentary and I could not follow the character motivations. For instance, why would a Sith Lord care about some girl? Why would the Queen immediately give a total stranger that appeared in her throne room a job?
What does Ranma care if Ryoga screws Akane if he hates her enough to make him fall to the dark side?
This was like some rambling stream of consciousness thing.
11/24/2006 c1 Unoviento
good idea...
nice settings..
original...
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I know i have no real bases to critizice your work, i´ve just written a fic, incomplete and unposted.. but anyway i have a suggestion. When Pluto is telling their story to the Senshi, Haruka asks something. I don`t think it`s a valid question sounds too forced, maybe you can try to find another way to explain that. See ya and i hope to read from you soon
Unov
good idea...
nice settings..
original...
...
I know i have no real bases to critizice your work, i´ve just written a fic, incomplete and unposted.. but anyway i have a suggestion. When Pluto is telling their story to the Senshi, Haruka asks something. I don`t think it`s a valid question sounds too forced, maybe you can try to find another way to explain that. See ya and i hope to read from you soon
Unov