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for Letting You Go

7/17/2006 c1 18Melitza
Best read with Nara from the Unfaithful soundtrack playing in the background...

On another note, the sentiment was very sweet. A bit sappy, of course, but that's what we all are looking for when we look for pairing fics, right? The fic could be improved by "slowing it down" a bit - drawing on the agonization, and internalizing some of the torment. More vivid, painful description of the incident, and maybe more glossing over of the after (the years flew by and I lived - but my heart wasn't in it, or some suchness).

Love the Royai, though - you could always do an alternate version of the story where Riza _does_ take the bullet for him.
3/4/2006 c1 Nikki Hessner
I thought it was great...sad, but great. This may be because I'm addicted to Royai, or because I'm addicted to depression. I think it was kind of abrupt when Riza was dead, you built up to it, but it was kinda sudden.
2/5/2006 c1 100MoonStarDutchess
Lovely.
2/5/2006 c1 17cutemonic fox
YOU GOT ME CRYING OVER HERE THAT WAS SO SWEET (LITERALLY) I AM CRYING NO JOKE I PROMISE TO GOD! THIS WAS EXCELLENT WA!

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