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2/12/2009 c2 Hennesey
Oh you have to write what happens next!
Oh you have to write what happens next!
11/19/2008 c2 
5TS3KayMarie
That was awesome! You should make a third chapter! If you do cant wait to find out what happens next!
5TS3KayMarieThat was awesome! You should make a third chapter! If you do cant wait to find out what happens next!
7/26/2006 c2 LunaBlack666
wait do all the babies have fangs because that would give the swich away easily unless they all have fangs and they are all hybrids now that would be confusing but other than that great love it
wait do all the babies have fangs because that would give the swich away easily unless they all have fangs and they are all hybrids now that would be confusing but other than that great love it
3/6/2006 c1 10Rakeesh
I hate to say it, but you seem to have largely discarded the relationships/natures of the people from Underworld (I don't know HP that well, so I won't comment on those).
The Underworld characters seem all out of character, ignoring the fact that half of them were dead but seem to have gotten better. I'm surprised to see Kraven standing in a room in one piece with Selene and Michael nearby. Selene and Michael are too wound up. Selene is the "you don't know I'm mad until I kill you" type, remember. And she'd be pretty mad at Kraven.
Basically, the emotions seem misplaced. Everyone is shiny and happy and married, until the characters who are least likely to get worked up start getting hissy.
Also, it might help if the summary was rewritten in English. I can see that you don't write your story in net-speak, but someone browsing the category might look at your summary and naturally assume it would be.
10RakeeshI hate to say it, but you seem to have largely discarded the relationships/natures of the people from Underworld (I don't know HP that well, so I won't comment on those).
The Underworld characters seem all out of character, ignoring the fact that half of them were dead but seem to have gotten better. I'm surprised to see Kraven standing in a room in one piece with Selene and Michael nearby. Selene and Michael are too wound up. Selene is the "you don't know I'm mad until I kill you" type, remember. And she'd be pretty mad at Kraven.
Basically, the emotions seem misplaced. Everyone is shiny and happy and married, until the characters who are least likely to get worked up start getting hissy.
Also, it might help if the summary was rewritten in English. I can see that you don't write your story in net-speak, but someone browsing the category might look at your summary and naturally assume it would be.
2/27/2006 c2 8Wingg-ed Wolf
Well there's a twist I wasn't expecting! "Lucius, look he's...smirking?" LOL! Also Uh I thought Hermione was a year older... still this is Fandom! I think you too are doing a fantastic job (If it were me the story would be messed up) still keep up the good work can't wait till Draco and Harry's reactions to being related...
8Wingg-ed WolfWell there's a twist I wasn't expecting! "Lucius, look he's...smirking?" LOL! Also Uh I thought Hermione was a year older... still this is Fandom! I think you too are doing a fantastic job (If it were me the story would be messed up) still keep up the good work can't wait till Draco and Harry's reactions to being related...
2/26/2006 c2 14CardboardCreative
HOLY SHIT! HOLY SHIT! WHAT A TWIST!
Excuse me, but this is just too cool. However did you two come up with the idea of this? It's absolutely great. And not to mention, very entertaining. I read up the first two chapters with such ease and complete interest.
I thought the writing style would be pretty crappy, sorry to say, but I liked the idea when I read the summary. You've proven me wrong, and managed to capture my complete attention with this story.
Although the characters are just a teeny WEENY bit out of original animation (*cough cough* Selene *cough cough*), I'm pretty sure you can carry the story through without discovering any problems. Because, she is pretty violent in some parts of the story, and a little soft in others. But I like that. It makes her unpredicable, and she needs that.
Teehee... Harry, Hermione, and Draco are siblings... to Selene and Macheal! I think my dreams have come true! Update as soon as you possibly can, because I'm going to die if I don't read more!
KUDOS for the killer plot! What will happen next?
14CardboardCreativeHOLY SHIT! HOLY SHIT! WHAT A TWIST!
Excuse me, but this is just too cool. However did you two come up with the idea of this? It's absolutely great. And not to mention, very entertaining. I read up the first two chapters with such ease and complete interest.
I thought the writing style would be pretty crappy, sorry to say, but I liked the idea when I read the summary. You've proven me wrong, and managed to capture my complete attention with this story.
Although the characters are just a teeny WEENY bit out of original animation (*cough cough* Selene *cough cough*), I'm pretty sure you can carry the story through without discovering any problems. Because, she is pretty violent in some parts of the story, and a little soft in others. But I like that. It makes her unpredicable, and she needs that.
Teehee... Harry, Hermione, and Draco are siblings... to Selene and Macheal! I think my dreams have come true! Update as soon as you possibly can, because I'm going to die if I don't read more!
KUDOS for the killer plot! What will happen next?
2/25/2006 c2 1P331
Wow, talk about a shocker! I cannot wait to read the next chapter, please update soon!
1P331Wow, talk about a shocker! I cannot wait to read the next chapter, please update soon!
2/25/2006 c2 TheNiceBlairWitch
you lilttle person, you left me hanging like that. your onw sister you did againg. ill let it slid this time. dont do it againg.
anyway back on subject. it was really good. update soon. :p
you lilttle person, you left me hanging like that. your onw sister you did againg. ill let it slid this time. dont do it againg.
anyway back on subject. it was really good. update soon. :p
2/23/2006 c1 TheNiceBlairWitch
AGAIN DARE I SAY IT, YOU LEAVING ME HANGING LIKE THAT! HOW DARE YOU. it really good. keep writing! ;p
AGAIN DARE I SAY IT, YOU LEAVING ME HANGING LIKE THAT! HOW DARE YOU. it really good. keep writing! ;p