for Dangerous Times Lead To Wonderful Memories10/15/2009 c4 
8dinopoodle
Okay, what happened? You know you should not leave a poor reader in the dark here. Good job!
8dinopoodleOkay, what happened? You know you should not leave a poor reader in the dark here. Good job!
3/18/2006 c3 Inwe
Nice chapter! Though I agree with Luthien (Allora) about the 'not too surprised' Kayla. I think if something like that happened to me, I'd probably, literally, give myself a nice whack on the head to make sure I wasn't dreaming. :)
Nice chapter! Though I agree with Luthien (Allora) about the 'not too surprised' Kayla. I think if something like that happened to me, I'd probably, literally, give myself a nice whack on the head to make sure I wasn't dreaming. :)
3/18/2006 c3 Bein-edhel
I really like the direction you are taking this, some of you language is a little out of place, but its really good!
I can't wait for an update!
happy writting
I really like the direction you are taking this, some of you language is a little out of place, but its really good!
I can't wait for an update!
happy writting
3/17/2006 c3 16Lady Elora
Again, you're showing great potential here story-telling wise. But I think since the tale is told mainly though the girls' viewpoint, you could have introduced the main characters of LotR with a little more mystery and perhaps a bit more shock. I think I'd believe I was insane if I woke up one day and saw Aragorn training an arrow at me. :) Just keep tidbits like that in mind as you continue your story to avoid falling into the mary-sue pit...trust me...it is something you want to avoid. :)
I look forward to another chapter!
**Allora**
16Lady EloraAgain, you're showing great potential here story-telling wise. But I think since the tale is told mainly though the girls' viewpoint, you could have introduced the main characters of LotR with a little more mystery and perhaps a bit more shock. I think I'd believe I was insane if I woke up one day and saw Aragorn training an arrow at me. :) Just keep tidbits like that in mind as you continue your story to avoid falling into the mary-sue pit...trust me...it is something you want to avoid. :)
I look forward to another chapter!
**Allora**
3/16/2006 c2 Lady Elora
Hello Tish, my name's Allora (Formerly known as Luthien) and I'm a former member of the LotR guild on neopets. :) Kiann recommended your story to me and I've decided to review. :) I think you've got a great start here, writing a refreshing 'girl into Middle-earth' story can be challenging...especially with all other stories out there. But I think you've added a fresh twist to a not so fresh idea. I know my first LotR stories were...to put it bluntly...crap...and this work shows promise!
I'll be keeping an eye out for updates. Just one suggestion, I know this is one the first two chapters, but I think giving your characters some backround might give this story a tad more depth and just make it over all more interesting. For example, how Sarah and Kayla became friends...if they even know what LotR is...any and all of that sort of thing can do wonders for a plot. Now you probably have big plans for rest of the story anyway, but I thought I'd throw out some ideas since you requested them. :)
Anyway, great job and I look forward to an update! :)
**Allora**
Hello Tish, my name's Allora (Formerly known as Luthien) and I'm a former member of the LotR guild on neopets. :) Kiann recommended your story to me and I've decided to review. :) I think you've got a great start here, writing a refreshing 'girl into Middle-earth' story can be challenging...especially with all other stories out there. But I think you've added a fresh twist to a not so fresh idea. I know my first LotR stories were...to put it bluntly...crap...and this work shows promise!
I'll be keeping an eye out for updates. Just one suggestion, I know this is one the first two chapters, but I think giving your characters some backround might give this story a tad more depth and just make it over all more interesting. For example, how Sarah and Kayla became friends...if they even know what LotR is...any and all of that sort of thing can do wonders for a plot. Now you probably have big plans for rest of the story anyway, but I thought I'd throw out some ideas since you requested them. :)
Anyway, great job and I look forward to an update! :)
**Allora**
3/15/2006 c2 Inwe
Very nice, Tish! I love the plot so far, and the two characters! I can't wait to read more! Keep it coming! :D
Very nice, Tish! I love the plot so far, and the two characters! I can't wait to read more! Keep it coming! :D