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12/24/2006 c2 Ra-Sama
Nice addition.

Rach
12/22/2006 c1 Kagome1
It was ok
5/10/2006 c1 Quinnie
A very good poem, Yami.

I really like it. :) It actually made me a bit teary, since I've been feeling a bit like that lately. Yeah. Anyway.

Write another!

Miko
5/10/2006 c1 Rach
Sad but sweet, yes.

I think the repetition in the last few lines is effective. I also liked the way you end-stopped the important lines so the sentences came to a very abrupt halt. My favourite example of that was:

"You are the one who saves me,

And I am grateful for your company

I know that I can not have your love,

But you have mine."

The first three lines run on into each other until they get to last one which gets up and kicks you in the face, in a manner of speaking. It really gets across that she loves him, even if she knows he'll never love her back.
5/8/2006 c1 mystery
that poem is soo cute yet so sad

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