for Fate is Sealed7/15/2009 c1 
1savvyjewel7
I think you are good. This is very good, great actually. It had a nice flow to it. =)
1savvyjewel7I think you are good. This is very good, great actually. It had a nice flow to it. =)
3/14/2007 c1 119Rickmanlover24601
With watermelons? Oh no.
Oh my goodness... I told you your other poem was the best I've ever written, but this one's just as good. Ha ha.
I love it! I love the imagery you've used - how they are dancing, laughing, etc without moving a muscle, without saying a word.
So much talent and such a wonderful deep expression of their feelings and hurt. *sigh*
Lovely my friend! Lovely!
119Rickmanlover24601With watermelons? Oh no.
Oh my goodness... I told you your other poem was the best I've ever written, but this one's just as good. Ha ha.
I love it! I love the imagery you've used - how they are dancing, laughing, etc without moving a muscle, without saying a word.
So much talent and such a wonderful deep expression of their feelings and hurt. *sigh*
Lovely my friend! Lovely!
6/24/2006 c1 12Jehove
great work! :) and you definatly don't suck. :) and thanks for your time taken for reviewing my work. :)keep it up!
12Jehovegreat work! :) and you definatly don't suck. :) and thanks for your time taken for reviewing my work. :)keep it up!
5/25/2006 c1 15PiperLeoEternally
I love to write poetry..unfortunatly none on here...this is really good! i enjoyed it. dont be so hard on yourself you deff. dont sux.
15PiperLeoEternallyI love to write poetry..unfortunatly none on here...this is really good! i enjoyed it. dont be so hard on yourself you deff. dont sux.
5/12/2006 c1 grimeldaakadd
as always really good work but i was almost tempted not to reveiw so that i can see how you would hunt me down with watermelons hm please keep submitting works for me to read thanks
as always really good work but i was almost tempted not to reveiw so that i can see how you would hunt me down with watermelons hm please keep submitting works for me to read thanks
5/11/2006 c1 27Droxy
It's lovely and sweet, but it needs to be tweaked.
The words so fine.
Yet some spelling is undivine.
Spell check has proven it is untrue,
for word context is what is due.
27DroxyIt's lovely and sweet, but it needs to be tweaked.
The words so fine.
Yet some spelling is undivine.
Spell check has proven it is untrue,
for word context is what is due.
5/11/2006 c1 Petite Little Ann
Hey! This one was cool! Your rimes are cool, I would love it if you continued this story... well, I don-t know really, but out of it, I really think it was great. By the way, please, please, please I beg you on my knees.. Post The Aprenticeship! Anyway, its always good to read your stories.
Little Ann
Hey! This one was cool! Your rimes are cool, I would love it if you continued this story... well, I don-t know really, but out of it, I really think it was great. By the way, please, please, please I beg you on my knees.. Post The Aprenticeship! Anyway, its always good to read your stories.
Little Ann
5/11/2006 c1 27SweetWillowTree
Liar! You really don't suck at poetry. Trust me, I've read some pretty bad stuff in my time. Good job with the emotions though. I really found that the poem mixed sadness with joy. Way to go. :)
27SweetWillowTreeLiar! You really don't suck at poetry. Trust me, I've read some pretty bad stuff in my time. Good job with the emotions though. I really found that the poem mixed sadness with joy. Way to go. :)
5/11/2006 c1 2So Bitter
Watermellon is c00l, and so is your story! I hope you make more chapters. Is the whole story going to be in poetic form (if you make more chapters...)? It would be c00l either ways. This is great, keep it up!
::ngh-is-hot::
2So BitterWatermellon is c00l, and so is your story! I hope you make more chapters. Is the whole story going to be in poetic form (if you make more chapters...)? It would be c00l either ways. This is great, keep it up!
::ngh-is-hot::
5/11/2006 c1 venus pudica
that was really excellent! i love how it all takes place in one single glance. it is just a slightly different view point, which makes the story that much more enjoyable. also you do NOT suck at poetry! :) when i was in highschool my teacher made us write poems, but we were not allowed to write them rhyming because it is actually harder that free verse... i now have an apreatation for anyone who can write rhyming verse that does not suck, and you managed to do it!
that was really excellent! i love how it all takes place in one single glance. it is just a slightly different view point, which makes the story that much more enjoyable. also you do NOT suck at poetry! :) when i was in highschool my teacher made us write poems, but we were not allowed to write them rhyming because it is actually harder that free verse... i now have an apreatation for anyone who can write rhyming verse that does not suck, and you managed to do it!
5/11/2006 c1 25goldenbubbles
I was scared of the watermelons so i thought i'd better review hehe. Great poem and much more creative than anything you would have done if you were wourking like you were supposed to be surely? Some of the lines are really well chosen and sweet. Is it about Hermione and Snape? Anyway, awesome poem! Keep writing and you don't suck at poetry.
25goldenbubblesI was scared of the watermelons so i thought i'd better review hehe. Great poem and much more creative than anything you would have done if you were wourking like you were supposed to be surely? Some of the lines are really well chosen and sweet. Is it about Hermione and Snape? Anyway, awesome poem! Keep writing and you don't suck at poetry.
5/11/2006 c1 4Tobias Potter
It's good. Even a little creepy thinking that Snape would love Hermione. I can't ever see it happeneing in the actual series, but for an AU story its good.
4Tobias PotterIt's good. Even a little creepy thinking that Snape would love Hermione. I can't ever see it happeneing in the actual series, but for an AU story its good.