for To be Human Mistys Sister7/13/2006 c1 
1Lost Yoshi
Sorry about my last reveiw, for some reason only two sentances of what I typed made it in.
Okay now, there are many things I don't really like about this fanfic, not the least of which is how it regards women. It seems that all the characters in this story seem to regard women only as "love toys." And worse, the females seem unoffended by this. Most women don't have sex on the brain twenty-four-seven. (Though I suppose since Violet is a Pokemon, (and Misty was turned into one) she (they) may regard love as simply a way to keep the species going. But still, it's wrong in my point of veiw. Human love should be more than just physical.)
And now to point this story's many plot-holes.
First off, there is only one Mewtwo in any version of the Pokemon story, and Mewtwo is a genderless Pokemon. And, with the exception of nidoran, there are no Pokemon that have significant differences in appearance between genders.
Second why would Misty's parents, who already have four children, adopt a fifth of another species? And how did they get a Mewtwo?
Why would Proffesser Oak make a machine that turns Pokemon into people?
If Misty was turned into a Pokemon, how did she manage to make a hologram of herself in human form and leave in Ash's house. And futhermore, why did no-one attempt to rescue her?
And, I don't know about anyone else, but if I were turned into a clone of the most powerful Pokemon in the world, I would consider it a blessing rather than a punishment. If Jessie mastered even a portion of her new abilities she could easily overthrow Team Rocket.
Overall I'd say that this story is rather poorly written, and should've had a lot more thought put into it before it was put on the internet.
1Lost YoshiSorry about my last reveiw, for some reason only two sentances of what I typed made it in.
Okay now, there are many things I don't really like about this fanfic, not the least of which is how it regards women. It seems that all the characters in this story seem to regard women only as "love toys." And worse, the females seem unoffended by this. Most women don't have sex on the brain twenty-four-seven. (Though I suppose since Violet is a Pokemon, (and Misty was turned into one) she (they) may regard love as simply a way to keep the species going. But still, it's wrong in my point of veiw. Human love should be more than just physical.)
And now to point this story's many plot-holes.
First off, there is only one Mewtwo in any version of the Pokemon story, and Mewtwo is a genderless Pokemon. And, with the exception of nidoran, there are no Pokemon that have significant differences in appearance between genders.
Second why would Misty's parents, who already have four children, adopt a fifth of another species? And how did they get a Mewtwo?
Why would Proffesser Oak make a machine that turns Pokemon into people?
If Misty was turned into a Pokemon, how did she manage to make a hologram of herself in human form and leave in Ash's house. And futhermore, why did no-one attempt to rescue her?
And, I don't know about anyone else, but if I were turned into a clone of the most powerful Pokemon in the world, I would consider it a blessing rather than a punishment. If Jessie mastered even a portion of her new abilities she could easily overthrow Team Rocket.
Overall I'd say that this story is rather poorly written, and should've had a lot more thought put into it before it was put on the internet.
6/20/2006 c3 Lost Yoshi
Ho boy... Where to begin.
This story has more holes in it than a slice of swiss cheese.
Ho boy... Where to begin.
This story has more holes in it than a slice of swiss cheese.
6/12/2006 c3 Lavabear
Wow... Wow... Wow... did I already say wow? Uerm, that was very forward and quick with the VioletXAsh relationship. Does May love Ash or something? What's up with her? Anyway, I'm wating for your next chapter. Keep updating!
Wow... Wow... Wow... did I already say wow? Uerm, that was very forward and quick with the VioletXAsh relationship. Does May love Ash or something? What's up with her? Anyway, I'm wating for your next chapter. Keep updating!
6/11/2006 c3 14AshK1980
Cool story so far! Keep up the good work! Please Update Soon!
Sincerely,
AshK
14AshK1980Cool story so far! Keep up the good work! Please Update Soon!
Sincerely,
AshK
6/9/2006 c2 Lavabear
The beginning was sad, really sad that Misty died. But it IS pretty cool that Misty is an angel.
Keep going! this is a cool story!
The beginning was sad, really sad that Misty died. But it IS pretty cool that Misty is an angel.
Keep going! this is a cool story!
5/27/2006 c1 AshK1980
Interesting and strange. Great piec of work though! Please update soon!
Sincerely,
AshK
Interesting and strange. Great piec of work though! Please update soon!
Sincerely,
AshK