for Welcome Back5/18/2008 c1 JERKOFF
Ok...this was bad...You dont know how to describe anything, the characters were OOC, the plot was horrible, the scene portrayed really monstrous, and you are not supposed to have script style writings on ff. So seek help immediately at the nearest writing center, and dont walk there, RUN! Trust me, you need it.
Ok...this was bad...You dont know how to describe anything, the characters were OOC, the plot was horrible, the scene portrayed really monstrous, and you are not supposed to have script style writings on ff. So seek help immediately at the nearest writing center, and dont walk there, RUN! Trust me, you need it.
6/18/2006 c1 
33Moving Mountains
O this sounds interesting, alhough i'm too fond of script form stories. Otherwise good xx
33Moving MountainsO this sounds interesting, alhough i'm too fond of script form stories. Otherwise good xx
6/18/2006 c1 lesjeux
It's good for your first fic, but I would advice you to use quotation marks instead of ":"s. And instead of "R", use the whole name, because you could be referring to Raven or Robin(their names both starts with R). Update soon!^_^
It's good for your first fic, but I would advice you to use quotation marks instead of ":"s. And instead of "R", use the whole name, because you could be referring to Raven or Robin(their names both starts with R). Update soon!^_^