for Truth or dare8/10/2006 c4 Guest
Hey
WOW its so cute. i think this one is my favourite that you've written. Aww i love your dialog, just be careful not to rush the details of the place, and to keep the dialog to the way they talk in jk's books. like er - instead of um and yeah. the dialog is great though:) good job.
Hey
WOW its so cute. i think this one is my favourite that you've written. Aww i love your dialog, just be careful not to rush the details of the place, and to keep the dialog to the way they talk in jk's books. like er - instead of um and yeah. the dialog is great though:) good job.
7/7/2006 c4 INSANEPRINCE
That story was so sweet it realy made me cry. If you are thinking about writing more seriously let me know
love
neverloveanother
That story was so sweet it realy made me cry. If you are thinking about writing more seriously let me know
love
neverloveanother
7/5/2006 c1 Micky B
The points of view change unexpectedly, and at some points I can't tell who's talking, other than that, I think that it's a pretty good first chapter.
The points of view change unexpectedly, and at some points I can't tell who's talking, other than that, I think that it's a pretty good first chapter.
7/1/2006 c1 Ali3
me again! i loved it! haha and i absolutely love the part where he ditches lavender. she needs to learn that no one likes her!
xoxo
me again! i loved it! haha and i absolutely love the part where he ditches lavender. she needs to learn that no one likes her!
xoxo
6/30/2006 c4 
5addiedas
that was a very good story...full of conflicts that made it interesting! keep it up
5addiedasthat was a very good story...full of conflicts that made it interesting! keep it up
6/30/2006 c4 1Joan Marie Mesi
Aw. So cute. And pissing of Lavendar in the same breath? Bloody amazing. Good work, mate.
Peace and Harmony,
Joey Marie
1Joan Marie MesiAw. So cute. And pissing of Lavendar in the same breath? Bloody amazing. Good work, mate.
Peace and Harmony,
Joey Marie