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9PurpleCranberi
Good job showing Roy's emotions. It was really realistic.
I could see Roy being a womanizer and secretly loving Riza.
I really like it. Good Job ^.^
9PurpleCranberiGood job showing Roy's emotions. It was really realistic.
I could see Roy being a womanizer and secretly loving Riza.
I really like it. Good Job ^.^
6/15/2008 c1 99MoonStarDutchess
I think you did an excellent job with this. I think you balanced the feelings very well.
Great job.
99MoonStarDutchessI think you did an excellent job with this. I think you balanced the feelings very well.
Great job.
2/2/2008 c1 srdfgchvjboguvjh
its good, but it feel somehow unfinished. I mean, it is well written, with a plot that is pretty cliched (but uve manged to pull it off) but the end feels really loose. Another paragraph or two is needed. Oh and you might want to change the title/summary. i kind of thought roy was a rapist or something.
its good, but it feel somehow unfinished. I mean, it is well written, with a plot that is pretty cliched (but uve manged to pull it off) but the end feels really loose. Another paragraph or two is needed. Oh and you might want to change the title/summary. i kind of thought roy was a rapist or something.
11/20/2007 c1 26j-mercuryuk
I love this, so much more realistic then others, and very different. It's nice every now and then not to have a 'happily ever after' ending.
26j-mercuryukI love this, so much more realistic then others, and very different. It's nice every now and then not to have a 'happily ever after' ending.
10/11/2006 c1 Queen of Angst
hihi alice!
its jenna!
nice going...actualli to tell yoo the truth i didn't read all of your fic coz its not draco/hermione...! but yeah...i read the first half n its good...
at least its longer than cyravil's drabbles...
but anyway keep going!
oh n read n review maii fic if you haf time...
-jainre
hihi alice!
its jenna!
nice going...actualli to tell yoo the truth i didn't read all of your fic coz its not draco/hermione...! but yeah...i read the first half n its good...
at least its longer than cyravil's drabbles...
but anyway keep going!
oh n read n review maii fic if you haf time...
-jainre
8/9/2006 c1 7The New Fullmetal Alchemist
Oh, wow, this is awesome! Why haven't I found this before? Darn it all! Anyway, I will read the next chappie soon! This is pretty good! BTW, I'll be praying for your cousin as well... I really admire and agree with your views on... everything... Anyway, I hope that she and her baby are ok...
7The New Fullmetal AlchemistOh, wow, this is awesome! Why haven't I found this before? Darn it all! Anyway, I will read the next chappie soon! This is pretty good! BTW, I'll be praying for your cousin as well... I really admire and agree with your views on... everything... Anyway, I hope that she and her baby are ok...
8/9/2006 c1 2eternal-angelic-innocence
Like this royai drabble... different approach... but VERY GOOD =D
will you write a sequel?
2eternal-angelic-innocenceLike this royai drabble... different approach... but VERY GOOD =D
will you write a sequel?
8/7/2006 c1 lili
I love it! Please write a sequel!
I love it! Please write a sequel!
8/7/2006 c1 13momiji-k
Hey there! I haven't seen you post anything for a while. I've been busy so I have been out of touch. I'm sorry for that.
This was a good piece of writing, just a few typos here and there. (If I can remember long enough I'll send you the list) I think you pretty well got the emotions across. I could feel it any ways. A sad piece here. You really feel for Riza who lets duty rule her heart, and Roy as well for the same reason. Only they both have different ways of dealing with it. Roy's way being... really bad. Thank god he isn't really like that or I would be really sad. :)
Good job! Keep up the good work!
13momiji-kHey there! I haven't seen you post anything for a while. I've been busy so I have been out of touch. I'm sorry for that.
This was a good piece of writing, just a few typos here and there. (If I can remember long enough I'll send you the list) I think you pretty well got the emotions across. I could feel it any ways. A sad piece here. You really feel for Riza who lets duty rule her heart, and Roy as well for the same reason. Only they both have different ways of dealing with it. Roy's way being... really bad. Thank god he isn't really like that or I would be really sad. :)
Good job! Keep up the good work!
8/6/2006 c1 Candide Avedo Notloggedon
Hm, well done, it's great as a one-shot. I really wonder how some people can make up drabbles? They're very good. Too bad that they don't make them more than a one-shot. Lovin it!
Hm, well done, it's great as a one-shot. I really wonder how some people can make up drabbles? They're very good. Too bad that they don't make them more than a one-shot. Lovin it!
8/6/2006 c1 Dee
Awsome drabble, one of the best ones I've seen!
Awsome drabble, one of the best ones I've seen!
8/6/2006 c1 18Nilmiel
Nil: Aww, this was so sweet! So cute! I loved it.. i loved the angsty-ness! Absolutly beautiful! You really vaptured Riza's emotions beautiful... I almost cried during the part with Roy. So sad, but so realistic, and beautiful! I hope you keep writing more! I've been waiting for an update from you for ages!
Sorry the review is so short, im sleep deprived and hungry and can't think of any more was to tell you how awesome this story is...
18NilmielNil: Aww, this was so sweet! So cute! I loved it.. i loved the angsty-ness! Absolutly beautiful! You really vaptured Riza's emotions beautiful... I almost cried during the part with Roy. So sad, but so realistic, and beautiful! I hope you keep writing more! I've been waiting for an update from you for ages!
Sorry the review is so short, im sleep deprived and hungry and can't think of any more was to tell you how awesome this story is...